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Stasis In the Cards
He fumbles still one more attempt
To come up with some telling lines
But his concentration shifts
And never quite picks up the signs
His mediocrity arrives to mock
The stasis forming in his mind
He envies those who persevere
And leaves much work so far behind
Will he regain some acumen,
Or tap drivel at the keys?
Perhaps better this than draw a blank
Or succumb to nascent writer's freeze.
To come up with some telling lines
But his concentration shifts
And never quite picks up the signs
His mediocrity arrives to mock
The stasis forming in his mind
He envies those who persevere
And leaves much work so far behind
Will he regain some acumen,
Or tap drivel at the keys?
Perhaps better this than draw a blank
Or succumb to nascent writer's freeze.
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Re. Stasis In the Cards
Anonymous
14th Apr 2019 10:40pm
It happens to the best of us. At least you can write even if your muse is silent. I wish I could do this. But that's where a real poet like you excels. I watch you and I am in silent veneration because you are a great poet and I learn something new every time I read you.
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Re: Re. Stasis In the Cards
14th Apr 2019 10:54pm
Thank you J. I have been writing much that I quickly delete. I can't say how much your opinion means to me, a poet of your caliber. I may well leave this posted, with my gratitude to you.
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Anonymous
- Edited 14th Apr 2019 10:59pm
14th Apr 2019 10:58pm
I am not greater than you, even if I thank you for your kindness and your words. I feel I have so much to learn from you. I want to thank you for adding my latest poem to your reading list. I am honoured
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14th Apr 2019 11:09pm
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14th Apr 2019 11:19pm
Re. Stasis In the Cards
Anonymous
14th Apr 2019 11:19pm
Oh, dear Thomas, even if you do not write for days or weeks we remember your work...and we have you coming back everytime to remind us why we so adore your work.
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Re: Re. Stasis In the Cards
14th Apr 2019 11:34pm
Thank you SoulzGirl. That's a fear of mine here, to be forgotten. You reassure and honor me.
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Anonymous
14th Apr 2019 11:36pm
It would be incredibly difficult to forget our Crow! 🤗
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14th Apr 2019 11:41pm
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Anonymous
14th Apr 2019 11:44pm
It was the best spot for it! Big hugs
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Anonymous
14th Apr 2019 11:24pm
I`m no stranger, sir Fly,
so i understand the feeling;
very wrenching & plaguing ... ~Devlin
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Re: Re. Stasis In the Cards
14th Apr 2019 11:32pm
I keep telling myself I may need to take a break but keep coming back, almost daily. What I end up posting varies so much in quality and, if I'm stuck, it's in the trap of rhythm and rhyme. You're one of the poets I admire here the most. No traps for you, dear Devlin. Thank you!
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Anonymous
14th Apr 2019 11:42pm
Wow.
I am humbled by this response.
I need to start a coalition on RL`ing
comments!
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Re. Stasis In the Cards
14th Apr 2019 11:29pm
I enjoyed this and you have expressed my frustration well. I end up just "tapping drivel at the keys" in hopes thats the exit. Nice job Crow.
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Re: Re. Stasis In the Cards
14th Apr 2019 11:38pm
In my case it's a compulsion, and the results are likely mixed. At times I'm tempted just to hang it up, but I'm hooked on DUP, it seems. Thank you for the kind response!
Re. Stasis In the Cards
15th Apr 2019 2:05am
We spill what permeates the mind. If we try too hard it can become stale...my best state of mind is when moving from one realm to another
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16th Apr 2019 9:57pm
Re. Stasis In the Cards
15th Apr 2019 3:06am
It blows my mind, how even your distress about not being able to write reveals such a truly gifted poet. I know you feel like it's a trap, but I so envy your rhythm and rhyme. Enjoy the poet that you are.... the rest of us certainly do!
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16th Apr 2019 10:01pm
Thank you brokentitanium. I try to mix it up these days, not be too reliant on the rhythm and rhyme, but both are so hard to resist. "Compulsive rhyming syndrome." That's me, usually. Thank you for the comment!
Re. Stasis In the Cards
15th Apr 2019 8:28pm
"Or tap drivel at the keys?"
... sounds like you write directly onto the computer ?
Thinking out loud here ... Writing on paper produces quite a different experience, partly because crossed-out words are still visible (unlike totally deleted on a computer) and their albeit dismissed presence still stirs new ideas. The history of one's attempted write still lies before one's eyes in its totality and sparks a different perspective on what's been written. Just a thought.
... sounds like you write directly onto the computer ?
Thinking out loud here ... Writing on paper produces quite a different experience, partly because crossed-out words are still visible (unlike totally deleted on a computer) and their albeit dismissed presence still stirs new ideas. The history of one's attempted write still lies before one's eyes in its totality and sparks a different perspective on what's been written. Just a thought.
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Re: Re. Stasis In the Cards
16th Apr 2019 9:55pm
I actually write on paper before I hit the keys. Then come extensive revisions. Thank you, Josh. I just hope this didn't mislead too much.
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16th Apr 2019 11:07pm
Re. Stasis In the Cards
16th Apr 2019 3:34am
Crow.. all ink spillers, worry about the block.. all we can do is keep ripping away.. been tapping, drivel lately.. I just keep focusing on ideas.. it'll sort it's self out.. into the list it goes.. much respect..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. Stasis In the Cards
16th Apr 2019 10:05pm
You're right, Dave. It does sort itself out, one way or another, and whatever variance in quality. Thank you for the kind comment and inclusion in your reading list!
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16th Apr 2019 7:57pm