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Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
Today 1:03am
Today 1:03am
My favorite things (Parody Spoof) lyrics
#drugs
#lesbian
#sex
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oldmanG
Poem Published
12th Jan 2025 7:04am
12th Jan 2025 7:04am
Great Day
She had a great day
She had a great day
She didn’t have to stay
My sister has a black spot
The thing we wish we ain’t got
Hers is in her head
Ours is what we truly dread
She had a great day
Told her she didn’t have to stay
She had a great day
She didn’t have to stay
The dread of our own span
And she can’t stand strong
It was her party day and
She can’t play…
Even on her Day…Her own Day
She had a great day
Told her she didn’t have to stay
She had a really great day ...
She had a great day
She didn’t have to stay
My sister has a black spot
The thing we wish we ain’t got
Hers is in her head
Ours is what we truly dread
She had a great day
Told her she didn’t have to stay
She had a great day
She didn’t have to stay
The dread of our own span
And she can’t stand strong
It was her party day and
She can’t play…
Even on her Day…Her own Day
She had a great day
Told her she didn’t have to stay
She had a really great day ...
#cancer
#family
#love #sister
#love #sister
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Inside_Roare
Ivo
Ivo
Poem Published
6th Jan 2025 8:59pm
6th Jan 2025 8:59pm
PINK JULLIEN
PINK JULLIEN
Inside Roare
I try to read from your gray eyes
where your blue has gone.
Why are you so ordinary, why have you no color.
The blue from under your eyelashes always shone,
pink face.
Why is everything suddenly dark,
gray like a wall.
Jullien you feel that I can endure,
Jullien you see what I will endure.
Your cold gaze, icy palms.
Jullien, I want to breathe on them.
And breathe. And live.
Pull you out of the cobwebs and say I love you.
Look into your eyes and get your blue.
And...
Inside Roare
I try to read from your gray eyes
where your blue has gone.
Why are you so ordinary, why have you no color.
The blue from under your eyelashes always shone,
pink face.
Why is everything suddenly dark,
gray like a wall.
Jullien you feel that I can endure,
Jullien you see what I will endure.
Your cold gaze, icy palms.
Jullien, I want to breathe on them.
And breathe. And live.
Pull you out of the cobwebs and say I love you.
Look into your eyes and get your blue.
And...
#emotions
#inspirational
#love
#motivational
#respect
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Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
30th Dec 2024 7:33am
30th Dec 2024 7:33am
Returning on a jet plane...
(Paul Harvey used to give "...the rest of the story" on the radio. The same radio played songs that gave us a glimpse into song character's lives but are never revisited! Even worse when the singer dies! I hated that! One of the songs I always felt needed an ending was...John Denver's: "Leaving on a jet plane." So, I present...Returning on a jet plane. Dedicated to the late John Denver.
--‐------------------
Packed my bags again...
I'm finally coming home...
I sang the songs they wanted...
'til...I felt so all alone...
...
--‐------------------
Packed my bags again...
I'm finally coming home...
I sang the songs they wanted...
'til...I felt so all alone...
...
#emotions
#love
#TimeHeals
61 reads
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imortalone
Poem Published
5th Jan 2025 1:51am
5th Jan 2025 1:51am
Hachi Ju Hachi - Mariachi Kobans in Outerspace. imort imo demo tracks - song 2 official lyrics
This is the link to my goth 2024 imort imo demo tracks.
https://open.spotify.com/album/07r9T8cAGHEPbG2eGqGi8p?si=3fxld6myRgSDHcBtcb-pcQ
My Hyper follow
https://hyperfollow.com/imortalone
Also my Brand New 22 page dragon list
https://ko-fi.com/s/059c907329
Hachi Ju Hachi
By Professor Prestome Ungyobrock
Sodosure Imortalone Hukyuu Shimasho.
A dying punk who never had immortality.
Gensu Dake No issyo Ni. CyberTech Nobas Ta
Personally need 2 be more inhuman
Still falling. Still dying.
Unque...
https://open.spotify.com/album/07r9T8cAGHEPbG2eGqGi8p?si=3fxld6myRgSDHcBtcb-pcQ
My Hyper follow
https://hyperfollow.com/imortalone
Also my Brand New 22 page dragon list
https://ko-fi.com/s/059c907329
Hachi Ju Hachi
By Professor Prestome Ungyobrock
Sodosure Imortalone Hukyuu Shimasho.
A dying punk who never had immortality.
Gensu Dake No issyo Ni. CyberTech Nobas Ta
Personally need 2 be more inhuman
Still falling. Still dying.
Unque...
#culture
#gothic
#inspirational
#scifi
#universe
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QuietlyOutspoken
Poem Published
4th Jan 2025 11:21pm
4th Jan 2025 11:21pm
Unconscious Pleasure
Verse
I’m still not old enough to go inside
And I remember waiting by the door
Smoking a pink lollipop
Every time we drive by
I don’t remember when it changed
From reaching for the clouds
To crying in the rain
Pre-chorus
Everyone thinks you’re a narcissist
A sinkhole straight into the abyss
Chorus
Her head is still bleeding
The doors are still locked
You never know when to stop
It’s just another accident
They’ll never guess what happened
And you’ll never feel anything but sweet satisfaction...
I’m still not old enough to go inside
And I remember waiting by the door
Smoking a pink lollipop
Every time we drive by
I don’t remember when it changed
From reaching for the clouds
To crying in the rain
Pre-chorus
Everyone thinks you’re a narcissist
A sinkhole straight into the abyss
Chorus
Her head is still bleeding
The doors are still locked
You never know when to stop
It’s just another accident
They’ll never guess what happened
And you’ll never feel anything but sweet satisfaction...
#abuse
#family
#fear
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Officialkn9ne
Poem Published
4th Jan 2025 7:14pm
4th Jan 2025 7:14pm
What Love Is
I lied when I said it was infatuation
I knew you was a fragment of my imagination
Was it love?
Was it lust?
You never had no patience
Gave you the most praise
I feel humiliated, never appreciated
Always opinionated, never communication
Different sides of the fence, call it segregation
When it came to me and you, I felt so separated
All the time I put in, All the love that I give
I can’t see myself falling ever again
I took it all to the chin
Can’t let my heart break again
Its so hard to pretend
So let me...
I knew you was a fragment of my imagination
Was it love?
Was it lust?
You never had no patience
Gave you the most praise
I feel humiliated, never appreciated
Always opinionated, never communication
Different sides of the fence, call it segregation
When it came to me and you, I felt so separated
All the time I put in, All the love that I give
I can’t see myself falling ever again
I took it all to the chin
Can’t let my heart break again
Its so hard to pretend
So let me...
#FirstLove
#IMissYou
#sadness
#shame
#women
65 reads
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Inside_Roare
Ivo
Ivo
Poem Published
3rd Jan 2025 9:44pm
3rd Jan 2025 9:44pm
ice heart
INSIDE ROARE
ice heart
What you think about, what you dream,
what you believe, that is not a dream.
What you live for, let it not be a dream.
Believe that life is different.
You see the sky blue,
or full of stars.
The earth soaked in blood
that lies at your feet.
Forget about the sinful soul,
in your chest a foreign heart beats.
aaaaa
Heartless aaaa, like an ice queen,
aaaaa
look at who you have hurt,
perhaps a hundred years behind ice bars.
aaaaa
Even if you live alone,
to...
ice heart
What you think about, what you dream,
what you believe, that is not a dream.
What you live for, let it not be a dream.
Believe that life is different.
You see the sky blue,
or full of stars.
The earth soaked in blood
that lies at your feet.
Forget about the sinful soul,
in your chest a foreign heart beats.
aaaaa
Heartless aaaa, like an ice queen,
aaaaa
look at who you have hurt,
perhaps a hundred years behind ice bars.
aaaaa
Even if you live alone,
to...
#emotions
#inspirational
#love
#motivational
#respect
62 reads
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TimWombles
Poem Published
2nd Jan 2025 3:35pm
2nd Jan 2025 3:35pm
Baby it's Cold Out
Outside my window
A leaveless tree encased in ice
Like my heart beating in my chest
I see you standing there
I'm feeling the heat rising in the room
Are you my spring thaw
Or a voyeur watching this snowman's doom?
Are you my savior?
Or just another flavor, I can't taste
Baby it's cold out
But really it's even colder deep inside
Are you going to be my heatwave?
Can you take me for a warming ride?
[Chorus]
Because there is cold and there's is hot
There is love and there is not
I need to know which you've got ...
A leaveless tree encased in ice
Like my heart beating in my chest
I see you standing there
I'm feeling the heat rising in the room
Are you my spring thaw
Or a voyeur watching this snowman's doom?
Are you my savior?
Or just another flavor, I can't taste
Baby it's cold out
But really it's even colder deep inside
Are you going to be my heatwave?
Can you take me for a warming ride?
[Chorus]
Because there is cold and there's is hot
There is love and there is not
I need to know which you've got ...
#love
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oldmanG
Poem Published
1st Jan 2025 4:59pm
1st Jan 2025 4:59pm
Growiin up in Mayfair
Growin up in Mayfair
Growin up in Mayfair…
Mom worked hard daddy didn’t care
got caught stealin shit from Food Fair
cops took me to moms door
wasn’t her favorite anymore…..
Growing up in Mayfair
had no one to show me
Had a daddy who was job free
was a latchkey kid….
And…did what I fuckin did…
All I had was between my two ears
kept swimming in my own fears
Growin up in Mayfair
Mom worked hard …and daddy didn’t care
Remember being lost in the hall….
On my first day at...
Growin up in Mayfair…
Mom worked hard daddy didn’t care
got caught stealin shit from Food Fair
cops took me to moms door
wasn’t her favorite anymore…..
Growing up in Mayfair
had no one to show me
Had a daddy who was job free
was a latchkey kid….
And…did what I fuckin did…
All I had was between my two ears
kept swimming in my own fears
Growin up in Mayfair
Mom worked hard …and daddy didn’t care
Remember being lost in the hall….
On my first day at...
#childhood
#dreams
#father
#mother
#music
47 reads
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oldmanG
Poem Published
24th Dec 2024 10:16am
24th Dec 2024 10:16am
And I’m Going To…
And I’m going (to)
And I’m going to
Some place in the hills
And I’m going to
Set up my still
And I’m going to
Cook it until
And I’m going to
Take some pills
And I’m going to
Have a laugh
And I’m going to
Smoke some green grass
And I’m going to
Pass some gas
And I’m going to
Refrain from that
And I’m going to
Find a stray cat
And I’m going to
Start wearing a hat
And I’m going to
Get into the pit
And I’m...
And I’m going to
Some place in the hills
And I’m going to
Set up my still
And I’m going to
Cook it until
And I’m going to
Take some pills
And I’m going to
Have a laugh
And I’m going to
Smoke some green grass
And I’m going to
Pass some gas
And I’m going to
Refrain from that
And I’m going to
Find a stray cat
And I’m going to
Start wearing a hat
And I’m going to
Get into the pit
And I’m...
#happiness
#honesty
#love
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oldmanG
Poem Published
23rd Dec 2024 4:32am
23rd Dec 2024 4:32am
Never be Better
There is a strong sense it’ll never be better
Not feeling bound by time or anything
Trying to fit into this madness we’re all living in
Ghosts are chasing me where do i run to
The bottom of the bottle numbs what i truly feel
Stayin in the zone of zombies trying to to break free of what’s killing me
The overall effect is truly the end game 3 is the answer the question is the same
Strong sense it’ll never be better
Country of immigrants with a tall Green Lady
Torch n Flame
Give me tired and scared and too poor to...
Not feeling bound by time or anything
Trying to fit into this madness we’re all living in
Ghosts are chasing me where do i run to
The bottom of the bottle numbs what i truly feel
Stayin in the zone of zombies trying to to break free of what’s killing me
The overall effect is truly the end game 3 is the answer the question is the same
Strong sense it’ll never be better
Country of immigrants with a tall Green Lady
Torch n Flame
Give me tired and scared and too poor to...
#dreams
#hope
#nightmares
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