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Cruel Ones
The cruel ones don’t let u up when you r down
The cruel ones don’t let u up
When you r down
Sit and smile at your misery
They sit and smile at my misery
Cruel ones won’t let u up
When ur down
Rip and pull at your heartstrings
Don’t feel…anything
They rip and pull
And u feel real small…Like you’re 2 foot tall
The cruel ones don’t let u up
When u r down
Till a time comes when you don’t care
And leave it all behind
Drop these feelings of being down
And these clowns...
The cruel ones don’t let u up
When you r down
Sit and smile at your misery
They sit and smile at my misery
Cruel ones won’t let u up
When ur down
Rip and pull at your heartstrings
Don’t feel…anything
They rip and pull
And u feel real small…Like you’re 2 foot tall
The cruel ones don’t let u up
When u r down
Till a time comes when you don’t care
And leave it all behind
Drop these feelings of being down
And these clowns...
#fear
#hate
#jealousy #oppression
#jealousy #oppression
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In Due Time
The seven angels have sounded their trumpets
Unleashing death unto mankind
Few will be spared this horrible fate
The holy who bare the sign
Now I have seen the light and I know the truth
And I hope that I’m on his list
The locusts are coming
With skeletons, armed, to drag you into the abyss
(Chorus)
In due time
You will meet your maker
Look to the sky
For the creator
In due time
You will die
In due time
Due time
(2)
The plague hit the land
and ice turned to sand
The moon fell out of the...
Unleashing death unto mankind
Few will be spared this horrible fate
The holy who bare the sign
Now I have seen the light and I know the truth
And I hope that I’m on his list
The locusts are coming
With skeletons, armed, to drag you into the abyss
(Chorus)
In due time
You will meet your maker
Look to the sky
For the creator
In due time
You will die
In due time
Due time
(2)
The plague hit the land
and ice turned to sand
The moon fell out of the...
#Christian
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Vomiting Up
Vomiting up
Swallowing down
Walking on this blue ball
Trying not to feel small
As I hear clamoring
On the horizon
Balance of nature
Wanting to nurture
Finding things that diminish me
Slings and arrows penetrate my soul
Funerals and petals
Processions and marching bands
Having to stand up not to stand down
Involved in the righteousness
Of snakes and serpents
Involved in the righteousness of false prophets
Spiritualized proselytized
They vomit it up
As...
Swallowing down
Walking on this blue ball
Trying not to feel small
As I hear clamoring
On the horizon
Balance of nature
Wanting to nurture
Finding things that diminish me
Slings and arrows penetrate my soul
Funerals and petals
Processions and marching bands
Having to stand up not to stand down
Involved in the righteousness
Of snakes and serpents
Involved in the righteousness of false prophets
Spiritualized proselytized
They vomit it up
As...
#anger
#apathy
#greed
#lyrics
#music
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"The Machine" Short Audio Version
What is the machine but the child of our hand,
Born not of nature’s womb but thought's demand?
It grows like a child, then turns to a beast,
Its bones of steel, its hunger unleashed.
Heartbeat pounding, gears in time,
Is it our creation, or the shape of our climb?
Oh, the machine, a mirror of the soul,
A marvel, a terror, it makes us whole.
Does it reflect, or does it consume?
Is it life’s new dawn or our silent tomb?
You, a traveler from the stars afar,
Gaze at our machine, the iron...
Born not of nature’s womb but thought's demand?
It grows like a child, then turns to a beast,
Its bones of steel, its hunger unleashed.
Heartbeat pounding, gears in time,
Is it our creation, or the shape of our climb?
Oh, the machine, a mirror of the soul,
A marvel, a terror, it makes us whole.
Does it reflect, or does it consume?
Is it life’s new dawn or our silent tomb?
You, a traveler from the stars afar,
Gaze at our machine, the iron...
#lyrics
#philosophical
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Then You Were Gone
Shadows creeping closer, the end might be near, I'll share something in laughter, to chase away fear.
Been dreaming big dreams, now let them soar to the skies, Lost in the moments , while the truth softly lies.
She’s reading my words, though her heart’s through the door
I wear a fake smile, while my mind's left in awe
There is pain in my veins, and a knife to my back, A Bullet through my thoughts, guess I'm losing my track.
A bit on the edge, yeah, my mind’s gone a wild, Walking through the rain, just a lost little child.
...
Been dreaming big dreams, now let them soar to the skies, Lost in the moments , while the truth softly lies.
She’s reading my words, though her heart’s through the door
I wear a fake smile, while my mind's left in awe
There is pain in my veins, and a knife to my back, A Bullet through my thoughts, guess I'm losing my track.
A bit on the edge, yeah, my mind’s gone a wild, Walking through the rain, just a lost little child.
...
#lyrics
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A little star shines
Inside Roare
A little star shines
A spade sank into the daisies.
Only two sturdy trees cast shadows, singing softly.
About the fact that a little star cannot be seen when it disappears from the sky.
Only the glitter remains on the hand.
The one who saw her and stroked her golden hair.
The one who dared to call her by name, led her by the hand.
As the spade sank into the ribs,
His downcast eyes cast a black shadow, no one sings.
Everything that shone quickly went out, it's all gone.
Yet the star shines.
...
A little star shines
A spade sank into the daisies.
Only two sturdy trees cast shadows, singing softly.
About the fact that a little star cannot be seen when it disappears from the sky.
Only the glitter remains on the hand.
The one who saw her and stroked her golden hair.
The one who dared to call her by name, led her by the hand.
As the spade sank into the ribs,
His downcast eyes cast a black shadow, no one sings.
Everything that shone quickly went out, it's all gone.
Yet the star shines.
...
#emotions
#inspirational
#love
#motivational
#respect
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Caution (Open Verse)
Verse:
Gotta take precautions baby, see I gotta love from afar
See these walls are protecting my heart, don’t wanna see us growing apart
Don’t mean to stray you along, but as you see my heart is covered in scars
Still dealing with my past, but it doesn’t truly negate the woman you are
See I gotta know if you’re worthy of me giving time to
Truth being told, I’m sick of tired of being used, mistreated, and lied to
Searched all over, far and wide but now, I finally found you
But venting my feelings to you is really something I’m working around to ...
Gotta take precautions baby, see I gotta love from afar
See these walls are protecting my heart, don’t wanna see us growing apart
Don’t mean to stray you along, but as you see my heart is covered in scars
Still dealing with my past, but it doesn’t truly negate the woman you are
See I gotta know if you’re worthy of me giving time to
Truth being told, I’m sick of tired of being used, mistreated, and lied to
Searched all over, far and wide but now, I finally found you
But venting my feelings to you is really something I’m working around to ...
#honesty
#love
#relationships
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Redemption (Open Verse)
Intro:
You know,
I once heard this quote
And this quote said
“No matter how hard your heart is broken, the world doesn’t stop for your grief”
So no matter how fractured you are, you can’t stop going
The world doesn’t stop, so we continue to move with it
So, let me take a moment to get this off of my chest
Verse:
The thought constantly haunts my mind
Of how you up and left me during the darkest of times
I thought when we agreed, I had your back, you had mine
I put my heart on the line, just to get stabbed in the spine
...
You know,
I once heard this quote
And this quote said
“No matter how hard your heart is broken, the world doesn’t stop for your grief”
So no matter how fractured you are, you can’t stop going
The world doesn’t stop, so we continue to move with it
So, let me take a moment to get this off of my chest
Verse:
The thought constantly haunts my mind
Of how you up and left me during the darkest of times
I thought when we agreed, I had your back, you had mine
I put my heart on the line, just to get stabbed in the spine
...
#breakup
#healing
#hurt #love
#hurt #love
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Bill Cosby's Favorite Disney Princess Is Sleeping Beauty
She likes it long in the back
She likes it short on the top and the sides
She likes it back in black
She wants to go for a mustache ride
I am your mullet man
Yes I am
Gonna take you for a ride in my van
I am your mullet man
Because I damn well can
Gonna give you all some lovin tonight
That's right
She wants in my pants
Cause they're the tightest of tight
She like my sexy teeth
Cause they are the whitest of white
I got a finger and I want you to pull it
Let me show you the power of the mullet
...
She likes it short on the top and the sides
She likes it back in black
She wants to go for a mustache ride
I am your mullet man
Yes I am
Gonna take you for a ride in my van
I am your mullet man
Because I damn well can
Gonna give you all some lovin tonight
That's right
She wants in my pants
Cause they're the tightest of tight
She like my sexy teeth
Cause they are the whitest of white
I got a finger and I want you to pull it
Let me show you the power of the mullet
...
#funny
#lyrics
#men
#satirical
#sex
87 reads
11 Comments
Maybe I'm the Toxic One
Warning][warning]
Stay away from me
[Warning][warning]
Maximum toxicity
Another romantic relationship ends like they do
Happens everytime, every one I get into
When it comes to relationships, I'm think I'm done
Looks like I may be the toxic one
Another romance ends in mental abuse
Seems like everytime someone blows a fuse
She walked out the door and now she's gone
Must be that I'm the toxic one
~Chorus~
My toxicity level is at max
[Warning][warning]
Time for me to face The facts
It's best for me that...
Stay away from me
[Warning][warning]
Maximum toxicity
Another romantic relationship ends like they do
Happens everytime, every one I get into
When it comes to relationships, I'm think I'm done
Looks like I may be the toxic one
Another romance ends in mental abuse
Seems like everytime someone blows a fuse
She walked out the door and now she's gone
Must be that I'm the toxic one
~Chorus~
My toxicity level is at max
[Warning][warning]
Time for me to face The facts
It's best for me that...
#breakup
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Blue Skies, Lavender Mornings
Blue skies, Lavender Mornings
Colors Orange, Yellow and Green
Will this make my day brighter?
Will it make me a better writer?
There's no place that can be better
When you're mind is in the clouds
Create an island oasis
Return to the basics
It's a great feeling when there's no hassles
Floating free, walk upon the shore
Give you & I things to make our lives better
My mango's are orange & yellow forever
Clarity is seen
Envisioned dreams
Escape within your own reality
Colors Orange, Yellow and Green
Will this make my day brighter?
Will it make me a better writer?
There's no place that can be better
When you're mind is in the clouds
Create an island oasis
Return to the basics
It's a great feeling when there's no hassles
Floating free, walk upon the shore
Give you & I things to make our lives better
My mango's are orange & yellow forever
Clarity is seen
Envisioned dreams
Escape within your own reality
#dreams
#escape
#happiness
#motivational
#uplifting
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Come on Girl
You just live the simple life
well you don't do nothing good
you wonder where the good times are
well there right in front of you
Stop being a grump
or you'll get dumped
come on girl, get in on life
You've been told that there's only one way,
and that's why the rules you follow each day
if you keep on living like that,
you're gonna die like the rest of the pack
Let free, let go,
let everyone know
you're not gonna be another victim of society
You're free from your daddy's hand,
go out and find...
well you don't do nothing good
you wonder where the good times are
well there right in front of you
Stop being a grump
or you'll get dumped
come on girl, get in on life
You've been told that there's only one way,
and that's why the rules you follow each day
if you keep on living like that,
you're gonna die like the rest of the pack
Let free, let go,
let everyone know
you're not gonna be another victim of society
You're free from your daddy's hand,
go out and find...
#emptiness
#freedom
#girlfriend
#LifeStruggles
#rebellion
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4 Comments
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