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Not the Boy for Me
https://tinyurl.com/3zf578t3
I take back the nickname
I gave to you
toss it in the trash
along with your ring
on my finger....
I take back the nickname
I gave to you
toss it in the trash
along with your ring
on my finger....
#breakup
#love
#unicorns
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Sunset
You ever try to describe a sunset?
Beauty for the eyes
Nothing you can say can match it
You shouldn't even try
Same feeling I get when I talk about you
You've never known the way I feel
I've kept it to myself
Wasn't sure what I thought was real
Put my feelings on a shelf
Had to make sure what I expressed was true
~Chorus~
I can't keep my love inside my heart anymore
I feel like holding it in, I'll explode from my very core
You can just turn and walk away
Or you can...
Beauty for the eyes
Nothing you can say can match it
You shouldn't even try
Same feeling I get when I talk about you
You've never known the way I feel
I've kept it to myself
Wasn't sure what I thought was real
Put my feelings on a shelf
Had to make sure what I expressed was true
~Chorus~
I can't keep my love inside my heart anymore
I feel like holding it in, I'll explode from my very core
You can just turn and walk away
Or you can...
#love
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*Diamond in the Shadows*
https://tinyurl.com/3998rfuy
Everyone's a gambler
for money or love
It's a sin
like nobody knows....
Everyone's a gambler
for money or love
It's a sin
like nobody knows....
#betrayal
#love
#money #unicorns
#money #unicorns
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Frigi-Ditha
INSIDE ROAR
R1994 Frigi-Ditha
I could live better than now
to have a better wife, apartment and mother-in-law.
What is the fate of having a piece of ice in your bed.
Guys, talk to each other at work
that you're not up to it.
I pretend I can't hear you referring to Wednesday.
You're frigid, you're frigid
I'll have the last beer.
You are frigid, you are frigid.
and fly away and fly away and fly away
circle around her.
so i tried again
it needs change.
A hundred times round
let me forget
Thanks...
R1994 Frigi-Ditha
I could live better than now
to have a better wife, apartment and mother-in-law.
What is the fate of having a piece of ice in your bed.
Guys, talk to each other at work
that you're not up to it.
I pretend I can't hear you referring to Wednesday.
You're frigid, you're frigid
I'll have the last beer.
You are frigid, you are frigid.
and fly away and fly away and fly away
circle around her.
so i tried again
it needs change.
A hundred times round
let me forget
Thanks...
#emotions
#gratitude
#motivational
#respect
#strength
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Old guitar Part 2
Oh this ol guitar it just does
some-thing To me
cracks me open Like an ice cold
Bud light
N I starting pouring out all the things on tap ,
that I feel inside
It sure has a funny way somehow of fixing me
Just by hearing its sweet melody
Yeah when he Gave me this ol guitar
I said i swear Grandpa
I'll forever Near and far
carry on This old 6 string and your name
Ill keep it as strong as they were
The day you started the change
with the lesson You handed down to me
With this ol guitar
Yeahhhhh
...
some-thing To me
cracks me open Like an ice cold
Bud light
N I starting pouring out all the things on tap ,
that I feel inside
It sure has a funny way somehow of fixing me
Just by hearing its sweet melody
Yeah when he Gave me this ol guitar
I said i swear Grandpa
I'll forever Near and far
carry on This old 6 string and your name
Ill keep it as strong as they were
The day you started the change
with the lesson You handed down to me
With this ol guitar
Yeahhhhh
...
#admiration
#courage
#emotions
#gratitude
#kindness
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The Many Seated Vehicle Song
Can someone help me?
I need a song that starts off slow
and slowly turns fast
One that grows in tempo
the longer it lasts,
and by the end
has gravitational mass
when it picks up
and the singer gets mad
then the song gets calm again
and it ends
as it started
Like if it was a song about a car
it would start with something simple
like
Someone humming
and strumming a guitar ...
I need a song that starts off slow
and slowly turns fast
One that grows in tempo
the longer it lasts,
and by the end
has gravitational mass
when it picks up
and the singer gets mad
then the song gets calm again
and it ends
as it started
Like if it was a song about a car
it would start with something simple
like
Someone humming
and strumming a guitar ...
#cars
#LifeAsAWriter
#lyrics
#metaphor
#music
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Donny Boy
Oh, Donny boy the polls the polls are falling
From Red State to Blue they continue to slide
For you to drop out of the race people are calling
before your runaway train of lies goes off a mountain side
At one time in the Presidential race you were ahead
But, now your campaign is on it's death bed
At this rate
the only thing that can save it is if you win the debate
However, if the Moderators do a real time fact check
you might has well be arranging chairs of the Titanic's main deck
If you keep...
From Red State to Blue they continue to slide
For you to drop out of the race people are calling
before your runaway train of lies goes off a mountain side
At one time in the Presidential race you were ahead
But, now your campaign is on it's death bed
At this rate
the only thing that can save it is if you win the debate
However, if the Moderators do a real time fact check
you might has well be arranging chairs of the Titanic's main deck
If you keep...
#deception
#oppression
#politics
#power
#racism
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Precious Agonies
https://tinyurl.com/ysanp3s4
Watch me dance
in dead girl's shoes
my heart lies torn and dirty....
Watch me dance
in dead girl's shoes
my heart lies torn and dirty....
#breakup
#regret
#suffering #unicorns
#suffering #unicorns
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*The Blackest Rose*
https://tinyurl.com/ps56exmn
The blackest rose can still smell sweet
although she's fallen in the gutter
and been trampled by his feet....
The blackest rose can still smell sweet
although she's fallen in the gutter
and been trampled by his feet....
#hope
#LifeStruggles
#unicorns
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More, more, more
https://tinyurl.com/nanssdd5
I got me big Bob Marley
and I know to mingle on the dread dance floor
but come Monday morning I can't help feeling
how I always want more.....
I got me big Bob Marley
and I know to mingle on the dread dance floor
but come Monday morning I can't help feeling
how I always want more.....
#greed
#humankind
#unicorns
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Where I call home
girl me and you
kinda remind me
Of johnny and June
All the years
so many smiles,
we've had our share of tears .
oh how we burned up
the miles,
A whole lot of glad,
a handful of sad,
Many memories
We've had
with each other
I swear Ill never have another
Ill Ever again call my lover,
It's where I'll run to
when my crazy world
Comes unglued,
When life's got me
feeling so dam small
I can't bear
the weight of it all,
Your love is
my heart's telephone,
I'll dial you...
kinda remind me
Of johnny and June
All the years
so many smiles,
we've had our share of tears .
oh how we burned up
the miles,
A whole lot of glad,
a handful of sad,
Many memories
We've had
with each other
I swear Ill never have another
Ill Ever again call my lover,
It's where I'll run to
when my crazy world
Comes unglued,
When life's got me
feeling so dam small
I can't bear
the weight of it all,
Your love is
my heart's telephone,
I'll dial you...
#dreams
#fire
#LifeGoals #love
#LifeGoals #love
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Do not return evil.
INSIDE ROARE
Do not return evil.
It's meant to be forgiven
look at the world differently, let go of evil.
everyone hides something good in themselves.
So why did you shoot?
Forgiveness means peace in the soul,
to forgive means a hole in the heart
which you can't stick.
So why did you shoot?
Try to stand up straight
you won't lie
maybe in the ears
the sound of gunshots will play to you.
Do not return evil.
try to go straight
have peace of mind
to have reason in the head.
Do not...
Do not return evil.
It's meant to be forgiven
look at the world differently, let go of evil.
everyone hides something good in themselves.
So why did you shoot?
Forgiveness means peace in the soul,
to forgive means a hole in the heart
which you can't stick.
So why did you shoot?
Try to stand up straight
you won't lie
maybe in the ears
the sound of gunshots will play to you.
Do not return evil.
try to go straight
have peace of mind
to have reason in the head.
Do not...
#emotions
#inspirational
#love
#motivational
#respect
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