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DamianDeadLove
Poem Published
3rd Apr 2025 6:27am
3rd Apr 2025 6:27am
Bound To Rust
Fucking circus just pulled into town
Flimflam ringmaster wants to burn it down
Unelected sidekick dancing like a clown
Psychotic logic a smile conceals a frown
How much more has to happen?
To wake them from perpetual sleep?
Disappearing those humans they hate
When it’s the billionaires inflicting pain
This self-induced fall from grace
Turning heel as the world watches in disgust
Pulling the rug while rigging the race
Without allies our foundation is bound to rust
Make America ignorant while killing hope ...
Flimflam ringmaster wants to burn it down
Unelected sidekick dancing like a clown
Psychotic logic a smile conceals a frown
How much more has to happen?
To wake them from perpetual sleep?
Disappearing those humans they hate
When it’s the billionaires inflicting pain
This self-induced fall from grace
Turning heel as the world watches in disgust
Pulling the rug while rigging the race
Without allies our foundation is bound to rust
Make America ignorant while killing hope ...
#philosophical
108 reads
17 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
28th Mar 2025 9:39pm
28th Mar 2025 9:39pm
The Upbringing
Your parents have a problem and you live in constant pain
Your atmosphere is darkness as you begin to go insane
And the way you're going, you'll turn out the same
You hear the words of wisdom as you practice what they tell
You follow your parents teachings, as they threaten you to hell
And the way you're going, you'll turn out the same
My advice to you, is to follow what's in your heart
For if you don't, you'll be finished before you ever start
And the way you're going, you'll turn out the same
Your atmosphere is darkness as you begin to go insane
And the way you're going, you'll turn out the same
You hear the words of wisdom as you practice what they tell
You follow your parents teachings, as they threaten you to hell
And the way you're going, you'll turn out the same
My advice to you, is to follow what's in your heart
For if you don't, you'll be finished before you ever start
And the way you're going, you'll turn out the same
#LifeStruggles
#lyrics
#parent
#religion
#rhyming
84 reads
8 Comments
Kementic1
Poem Published
28th Mar 2025 6:47pm
28th Mar 2025 6:47pm
Standing On Love
I long for the synergy
of our combined love energy
Two souls spinning in a swirl
in a new spiritual world
Living in our own Eden
on an island in Sweden
Feeling the glory of heaven above
just us-Standing on Love
Our entanglement is on a quantum level
and in the joy of this we revel
With you as a Co-polit at the helm
We seek a new metaphysical realm
No longer constrained by this reality
we seek immortality
The fantasy that I dreamt of
we two-Standing on Love
...
of our combined love energy
Two souls spinning in a swirl
in a new spiritual world
Living in our own Eden
on an island in Sweden
Feeling the glory of heaven above
just us-Standing on Love
Our entanglement is on a quantum level
and in the joy of this we revel
With you as a Co-polit at the helm
We seek a new metaphysical realm
No longer constrained by this reality
we seek immortality
The fantasy that I dreamt of
we two-Standing on Love
...
#admiration
#happiness
#inspirational
#love
#motivational
95 reads
0 Comments
Kementic1
Poem Published
22nd Mar 2025 3:53pm
22nd Mar 2025 3:53pm
Give U My Love
I am so sorry
My tongue won't play it's part
wish you could to listen my heart
I was hooked from the start
you are both beautiful and smart
when you run to the mini-mart
it feels like years of being apart
my emotions are so strong
i think about you all day long
I want to give you my love
it's all I have been dreaming of
(repeat)
I wake up everyday
about you to the Lord i pray
hoping you will feel the same way
and forever together we...
My tongue won't play it's part
wish you could to listen my heart
I was hooked from the start
you are both beautiful and smart
when you run to the mini-mart
it feels like years of being apart
my emotions are so strong
i think about you all day long
I want to give you my love
it's all I have been dreaming of
(repeat)
I wake up everyday
about you to the Lord i pray
hoping you will feel the same way
and forever together we...
#admiration
#emotions
#happiness
#hope
#love
96 reads
0 Comments
Dragonnora
Nora
Nora
Poem Published
12th Mar 2025 2:16pm
12th Mar 2025 2:16pm
Emotional
My emotions are much bigger than me
I try to keep them in, but they spill out eventually
Flooding and dragging me into the ground
And they can’t even see what keeps me down
You can’t even see how you’ve hurt me now
Oh
You can’t even see you’ve hurt me now
Every comment cuts a little more
You’re joking that I’m crazy
but that’s how you made me
You love that I’m insecure
Holding back on the loving
So I’ll take your nothing
and I don’t deserve more
The current gets stronger and stronger
Increasing in violence...
I try to keep them in, but they spill out eventually
Flooding and dragging me into the ground
And they can’t even see what keeps me down
You can’t even see how you’ve hurt me now
Oh
You can’t even see you’ve hurt me now
Every comment cuts a little more
You’re joking that I’m crazy
but that’s how you made me
You love that I’m insecure
Holding back on the loving
So I’ll take your nothing
and I don’t deserve more
The current gets stronger and stronger
Increasing in violence...
#feminism
#ignorance
#manipulation
#weakness
#women
94 reads
1 Comment
Dragonnora
Nora
Nora
Poem Published
11th Mar 2025 8:58pm
11th Mar 2025 8:58pm
Sketch Lines (Full version)
I know we are young
I know we have no idea
Where we’ll end up
We’re just finding our way
We won’t stay the same
And I don’t want to
Neither do you
I am hiding in the minutes, the seconds
That I get to kiss you
Some day will come, when we break up
And I have to miss you
Cause we’ll fight, come undone
Too many bullets in our guns
To stay safe
To stay this way
We are just sketching out the lines
Too much is still undefined
So hold me tighter
Than you’ve ever done before
Please come...
I know we have no idea
Where we’ll end up
We’re just finding our way
We won’t stay the same
And I don’t want to
Neither do you
I am hiding in the minutes, the seconds
That I get to kiss you
Some day will come, when we break up
And I have to miss you
Cause we’ll fight, come undone
Too many bullets in our guns
To stay safe
To stay this way
We are just sketching out the lines
Too much is still undefined
So hold me tighter
Than you’ve ever done before
Please come...
#bittersweet
#fear
#heartbroken
#love
#teens
76 reads
0 Comments
OxyMoronicMe
G.L.
G.L.
Poem Published
10th Mar 2025 3:28pm
10th Mar 2025 3:28pm
Daisies Lullaby
Hush little vessel, don't you cry,
Mother's here, to lullaby.
Crescent moon, and daisies white,
A perfect vessel, bathed in light
From shadowed earth, a vessel's rise,
Beneath the crescent, perfect lies
Mother's here, to lullaby.
Crescent moon, and daisies white,
A perfect vessel, bathed in light
From shadowed earth, a vessel's rise,
Beneath the crescent, perfect lies
#death
5 reads
2 Comments
PoetSpeak
Poem Published
9th Mar 2025 7:26pm
9th Mar 2025 7:26pm
The Lonliness
The loneliness
It grabs at my heart
The loneliness
An affair from the start
The loneliness
You pulled me in
The loneliness
I'm your broken sin
The loneliness
I hope and pray
The loneliness
You made me pay
Chorus
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
Never knew how to be strong
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
I'm no hero till I'm gone
You took me in
You gave me a pen
You showed me your bed
You gave me head
You fed me your food ...
It grabs at my heart
The loneliness
An affair from the start
The loneliness
You pulled me in
The loneliness
I'm your broken sin
The loneliness
I hope and pray
The loneliness
You made me pay
Chorus
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
Never knew how to be strong
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
I'm no hero till I'm gone
You took me in
You gave me a pen
You showed me your bed
You gave me head
You fed me your food ...
#loneliness
#lyrics
#WritingPoetry
208 reads
33 Comments
Kementic1
Poem Published
6th Mar 2025 11:18pm
6th Mar 2025 11:18pm
Another Place and Time
What would my life be if.........
I didn't have responsibilities
like paying my utilities
no playing taxi for my friends
going to places where the earth ends
No working hard to get my pay
we could chill in bed all day
In another place and time
life would be so fine
we would share a love divine
In another place and time
No picking up kids from school
just we two by a pool
no constant trips to the grocery store
means more time with the one i adore
no...
#bittersweet
#regret
#sadness
137 reads
2 Comments
Lynxxey
Poem Published
3rd Mar 2025 6:27am
3rd Mar 2025 6:27am
Afterglow
I’m feeling so good, since I up and flew out the pin.
Feeling alive and so free, like I can breathe again.
I took a walk with my swimming thoughts and thought about how I should live.
Then I noticed that it’s mostly myself that I seem to struggle with.
A problem in you, is a problem I feel in me
With all the cameras in the world, how come we still don’t see?
That what you put out, tends to come around back to you.
And the things we see online, tend to always blur the truth.
Oh, oh yeah, afterglow..
If I knew then, what I...
Feeling alive and so free, like I can breathe again.
I took a walk with my swimming thoughts and thought about how I should live.
Then I noticed that it’s mostly myself that I seem to struggle with.
A problem in you, is a problem I feel in me
With all the cameras in the world, how come we still don’t see?
That what you put out, tends to come around back to you.
And the things we see online, tend to always blur the truth.
Oh, oh yeah, afterglow..
If I knew then, what I...
#inspirational
#wisdom
66 reads
0 Comments
QuietlyOutspoken
Poem Published
3rd Mar 2025 1:01am
3rd Mar 2025 1:01am
21 Seasons
You promised me everything I’ve never had
Coffee and Halloween candy
Always confidently saying “she’s not that much younger than me”
What I thought was love was only pity
And fucked up codependency
I should’ve known this is how it would end
From the first moment we met
You were biting her neck
And staring at me
Now when I look you in the eyes
I’m pressing on a bruise
That’s three different shades of blue
Because you gave her a ring
While always promising me the same thing
I thought you’d come back when...
Coffee and Halloween candy
Always confidently saying “she’s not that much younger than me”
What I thought was love was only pity
And fucked up codependency
I should’ve known this is how it would end
From the first moment we met
You were biting her neck
And staring at me
Now when I look you in the eyes
I’m pressing on a bruise
That’s three different shades of blue
Because you gave her a ring
While always promising me the same thing
I thought you’d come back when...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#lover
101 reads
0 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
26th Feb 2025 1:27am
26th Feb 2025 1:27am
Scars
Scars
The scars of Satan
Can only be seen when I’m naked
The blood in my eyes tells me I’m jaded
I desecrate those who I come into
Jesus what’s your latest sin now
Who’d you sacrifice to be your disciple
Wings of Icarus here comes your son now
Now I step into my clothes again
They hide the sins I want to hide from you
The scars of Satan
Can only be used when I’m naked
The blood in my eyes tells me I’m faded
I desecrate those who I come into
Jesus what’s your...
The scars of Satan
Can only be seen when I’m naked
The blood in my eyes tells me I’m jaded
I desecrate those who I come into
Jesus what’s your latest sin now
Who’d you sacrifice to be your disciple
Wings of Icarus here comes your son now
Now I step into my clothes again
They hide the sins I want to hide from you
The scars of Satan
Can only be used when I’m naked
The blood in my eyes tells me I’m faded
I desecrate those who I come into
Jesus what’s your...
#betrayal
#deception
#devil #God
#devil #God
125 reads
2 Comments
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