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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
Yesterday 8:09pm
Yesterday 8:09pm
Bill Cosby's Favorite Disney Princess Is Sleeping Beauty
She likes it long in the back
She likes it short on the top and the sides
She likes it back in black
She wants to go for a mustache ride
I am your mullet man
Yes I am
Gonna take you for a ride in my van
I am your mullet man
Because I damn well can
Gonna give you all some lovin tonight
That's right
She wants in my pants
Cause they're the tightest of tight
She like my sexy teeth
Cause they are the whitest of white
I got a finger and I want you to pull it
Let me show you the power of the mullet
...
She likes it short on the top and the sides
She likes it back in black
She wants to go for a mustache ride
I am your mullet man
Yes I am
Gonna take you for a ride in my van
I am your mullet man
Because I damn well can
Gonna give you all some lovin tonight
That's right
She wants in my pants
Cause they're the tightest of tight
She like my sexy teeth
Cause they are the whitest of white
I got a finger and I want you to pull it
Let me show you the power of the mullet
...
#funny
#lyrics
#men
#satirical
#sex
38 reads
5 Comments
TimWombles
Poem Published
24th Nov 2024 7:04pm
24th Nov 2024 7:04pm
Maybe I'm the Toxic One
Warning][warning]
Stay away from me
[Warning][warning]
Maximum toxicity
Another romantic relationship ends like they do
Happens everytime, every one I get into
When it comes to relationships, I'm think I'm done
Looks like I may be the toxic one
Another romance ends in mental abuse
Seems like everytime someone blows a fuse
She walked out the door and now she's gone
Must be that I'm the toxic one
~Chorus~
My toxicity level is at max
[Warning][warning]
Time for me to face The facts
It's best for me that...
Stay away from me
[Warning][warning]
Maximum toxicity
Another romantic relationship ends like they do
Happens everytime, every one I get into
When it comes to relationships, I'm think I'm done
Looks like I may be the toxic one
Another romance ends in mental abuse
Seems like everytime someone blows a fuse
She walked out the door and now she's gone
Must be that I'm the toxic one
~Chorus~
My toxicity level is at max
[Warning][warning]
Time for me to face The facts
It's best for me that...
#breakup
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2 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
22nd Nov 2024 11:15am
22nd Nov 2024 11:15am
Blue Skies, Lavender Mornings
Blue skies, Lavender Mornings
Colors Orange, Yellow and Green
Will this make my day brighter?
Will it make me a better writer?
There's no place that can be better
When you're mind is in the clouds
Create an island oasis
Return to the basics
It's a great feeling when there's no hassles
Floating free, walk upon the shore
Give you & I things to make our lives better
My mango's are orange & yellow forever
Clarity is seen
Envisioned dreams
Escape within your own reality
Colors Orange, Yellow and Green
Will this make my day brighter?
Will it make me a better writer?
There's no place that can be better
When you're mind is in the clouds
Create an island oasis
Return to the basics
It's a great feeling when there's no hassles
Floating free, walk upon the shore
Give you & I things to make our lives better
My mango's are orange & yellow forever
Clarity is seen
Envisioned dreams
Escape within your own reality
#dreams
#escape
#happiness
#motivational
#uplifting
43 reads
4 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
22nd Nov 2024 11:13am
22nd Nov 2024 11:13am
Come on Girl
You just live the simple life
well you don't do nothing good
you wonder where the good times are
well there right in front of you
Stop being a grump
or you'll get dumped
come on girl, get in on life
You've been told that there's only one way,
and that's why the rules you follow each day
if you keep on living like that,
you're gonna die like the rest of the pack
Let free, let go,
let everyone know
you're not gonna be another victim of society
You're free from your daddy's hand,
go out and find...
well you don't do nothing good
you wonder where the good times are
well there right in front of you
Stop being a grump
or you'll get dumped
come on girl, get in on life
You've been told that there's only one way,
and that's why the rules you follow each day
if you keep on living like that,
you're gonna die like the rest of the pack
Let free, let go,
let everyone know
you're not gonna be another victim of society
You're free from your daddy's hand,
go out and find...
#emptiness
#freedom
#girlfriend
#LifeStruggles
#rebellion
51 reads
4 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
21st Nov 2024 7:43pm
21st Nov 2024 7:43pm
I miss you so
I don't care on what they say to you,
I will never ever make you blue
people say that I'm no good for you,
but I can give you love that will be true
I sit in my room and I pray, that you'll come back to me someday
I can't go on living this way anymore
I look out my window and all I see, are people walking down the street
I look for your face in the crowd and your not there
Since you've been gone I haven't felt the same,
because you said once that you would take my name
i don't care if takes 100 years,
or if I had to cry 1...
I will never ever make you blue
people say that I'm no good for you,
but I can give you love that will be true
I sit in my room and I pray, that you'll come back to me someday
I can't go on living this way anymore
I look out my window and all I see, are people walking down the street
I look for your face in the crowd and your not there
Since you've been gone I haven't felt the same,
because you said once that you would take my name
i don't care if takes 100 years,
or if I had to cry 1...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#lyrics
47 reads
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
21st Nov 2024 7:39pm
21st Nov 2024 7:39pm
Why Do We Have To Carry On
makin time
shoot the lights
people you believe in
make you say
call it a day
everybody leaving
everybody leaving
why do we have to carry on
always singing the same old song
tellin lies
shut your eyes
makin more excuses
telling the world
act like the fool
people are abusive
people are abusive
why do we have to carry on
always singing the same old song
lookin for
an open door
ever take your chances
take your pick
makes you sick
seeking new advances ...
shoot the lights
people you believe in
make you say
call it a day
everybody leaving
everybody leaving
why do we have to carry on
always singing the same old song
tellin lies
shut your eyes
makin more excuses
telling the world
act like the fool
people are abusive
people are abusive
why do we have to carry on
always singing the same old song
lookin for
an open door
ever take your chances
take your pick
makes you sick
seeking new advances ...
#betrayal
#honesty
#lies #lyrics
#lies #lyrics
42 reads
2 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
18th Nov 2024 3:21am
18th Nov 2024 3:21am
Poison Tree
Poison Tree
So within the poison tree
I see the rotten part of me
No fruit to bare no soul to see
Just another mystery not solved
I lie awake at night
Afraid of what awaits me
The sinner and the sin now meet
no leaves to fall just a cold wind
As my soul descends into darkness
Gaze at what frightens the masses
But it doesn’t frighten my mind
So with roots with no soil I toil
My body is racing with a tired mind
But my body is withering on the vine
Who knows when it’s...
So within the poison tree
I see the rotten part of me
No fruit to bare no soul to see
Just another mystery not solved
I lie awake at night
Afraid of what awaits me
The sinner and the sin now meet
no leaves to fall just a cold wind
As my soul descends into darkness
Gaze at what frightens the masses
But it doesn’t frighten my mind
So with roots with no soil I toil
My body is racing with a tired mind
But my body is withering on the vine
Who knows when it’s...
#dark
#death
#redemption
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Abracadabra
Poem Published
17th Nov 2024 7:20pm
17th Nov 2024 7:20pm
Never Too Late to Love Again
It's never too late
to love again
if you're brave enough
to try ...
https://tinyurl.com/89nzfj55
to love again
if you're brave enough
to try ...
https://tinyurl.com/89nzfj55
#FallingInLove
66 reads
0 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
17th Nov 2024 11:56am
17th Nov 2024 11:56am
G Says
G says
G says I’m done with that lady
She only tries to control me
He hides from himself
Says he’s right but he knows that he’s not
G says he’s sorry for being angry
Wants to change but needs some help
Look for a couch big enough to hold my thoughts
G says have you seen my Port around
I feel thirsty and naked without it
I go to the gazebo
To smoke my dreams and listen for the crickets
Says I don’t owe the world nothing
G says I’m tired of being the clown
Don’t want to...
G says I’m done with that lady
She only tries to control me
He hides from himself
Says he’s right but he knows that he’s not
G says he’s sorry for being angry
Wants to change but needs some help
Look for a couch big enough to hold my thoughts
G says have you seen my Port around
I feel thirsty and naked without it
I go to the gazebo
To smoke my dreams and listen for the crickets
Says I don’t owe the world nothing
G says I’m tired of being the clown
Don’t want to...
#alcohol
#happiness
#hate
#love
#marijuana
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oldmanG
Poem Published
17th Nov 2024 4:00am
17th Nov 2024 4:00am
Go the Green Backs
Rat a tat tat
Go the green backs
There is a scent of greed
Security all around
Vans full of cash
Ben counts 100
Don’t look that way
For comes another day
Guard drops down
Green greed escapes
Slapping em down
Picking em up
Blue marble spins on green
Turquoise beauty
Loves you when the rent is paid
Don’t pick up the tab
Ain’t licking the landing strip
Greed makes the world go round
Rat a Tat Tat
Go the green bucks
Go the green backs
There is a scent of greed
Security all around
Vans full of cash
Ben counts 100
Don’t look that way
For comes another day
Guard drops down
Green greed escapes
Slapping em down
Picking em up
Blue marble spins on green
Turquoise beauty
Loves you when the rent is paid
Don’t pick up the tab
Ain’t licking the landing strip
Greed makes the world go round
Rat a Tat Tat
Go the green bucks
#devil
#greed
#money
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Inside_Roare
Ivo
Ivo
Poem Published
14th Nov 2024 9:47pm
14th Nov 2024 9:47pm
I have it in me
INSIDE ROAR
I have it in me
Inspiration - The Chemical Brothers - The Test _ Hard test
I don't hear the screams of others
I don't notice who is kicking me.
I don't feel blows or blows
I can't feel someone stepping on me.
I don't feel, I don't feel, I don't feel
I don't notice.
Suddenly there's a flash in my eyes
I fly like an eagle over the landscape.
fuuuuuuu
I feel everything growing
green, I perceive.
Suddenly there's a flash in my eyes
I fly like an eagle over the landscape. ...
I have it in me
Inspiration - The Chemical Brothers - The Test _ Hard test
I don't hear the screams of others
I don't notice who is kicking me.
I don't feel blows or blows
I can't feel someone stepping on me.
I don't feel, I don't feel, I don't feel
I don't notice.
Suddenly there's a flash in my eyes
I fly like an eagle over the landscape.
fuuuuuuu
I feel everything growing
green, I perceive.
Suddenly there's a flash in my eyes
I fly like an eagle over the landscape. ...
#emotions
#gratitude
#inspirational
#love
#motivational
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TimWombles
Poem Published
14th Nov 2024 11:11am
14th Nov 2024 11:11am
My Therapy
Went walking barefoot along the crowded beach, sun kissing my nose
Shuffling just beyond the water's reach
Sand sifting through my toes
Hiking the well-used trail alone, shaded by the tallest pine trees
Brings me to a peaceful state
Puts my racing mind at ease
--Chorus--
Every grain of sand that filters through my hand
Every drop of water in this endless sea
Every blade of grass in this wilderness
They are my therapy
Every flower that hugs the road
Every hickory or ancient oak tree
They are my mental medicine ...
Shuffling just beyond the water's reach
Sand sifting through my toes
Hiking the well-used trail alone, shaded by the tallest pine trees
Brings me to a peaceful state
Puts my racing mind at ease
--Chorus--
Every grain of sand that filters through my hand
Every drop of water in this endless sea
Every blade of grass in this wilderness
They are my therapy
Every flower that hugs the road
Every hickory or ancient oak tree
They are my mental medicine ...
#healing
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6 Comments
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