Self Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Personal poetry about the way you feel about yourself
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Gorotika
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:59pm
Yesterday 11:59pm
insect enclosure
Maggots nestled beneath my bed, swarming over blood stained tissues.
Oh what a sight.
Flies buzzing in the corner of my room, happily feasting on the bowls filled with retch.
Oh what a scene
Watch your step, theres spiders on the floor.
Fragments of my mind scattered all around my room.
Watch your step, theres glass on the floor.
Locked up inside, there is no way out.
No light at the end of the tunnel
No mouth for the cave
No future, no hope
Oh so deep
Oh what a sight.
Flies buzzing in the corner of my room, happily feasting on the bowls filled with retch.
Oh what a scene
Watch your step, theres spiders on the floor.
Fragments of my mind scattered all around my room.
Watch your step, theres glass on the floor.
Locked up inside, there is no way out.
No light at the end of the tunnel
No mouth for the cave
No future, no hope
Oh so deep
#dark
#depression
#despair
#EatingDisorder
#SelfHarm
16 reads
1 Comment
Baldwin
Poem Published
Yesterday 2:09pm
Yesterday 2:09pm
purposeless
This morning I awoke
to find
I am again
not quite alive,
and loned
closed up
within the greying grief
of rainy days.
I’m drained of  hope
that anywhere in all
the hours  ahead
before I once more
go to sleep
I’ll  know contentment or
a centering.
to find
I am again
not quite alive,
and loned
closed up
within the greying grief
of rainy days.
I’m drained of  hope
that anywhere in all
the hours  ahead
before I once more
go to sleep
I’ll  know contentment or
a centering.
#depression
18 reads
0 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
Yesterday 1:30pm
Yesterday 1:30pm
Others' poetry
Isn't it exhilarating
how someone's poetry
can ignite a fire within us?
When their words resonate
so deeply, it's like they unlock
hidden chambers in our own hearts,
revealing emotions and thoughts
we hadn't fully realized were there.
Crafting your own verses
becomes more than just writing
it's a dialogue between your soul and theirs,
a harmonious exchange
across the canvas of creativity.
I've always found
that immersing myself
in powerful poetry
not only inspires me
but...
how someone's poetry
can ignite a fire within us?
When their words resonate
so deeply, it's like they unlock
hidden chambers in our own hearts,
revealing emotions and thoughts
we hadn't fully realized were there.
Crafting your own verses
becomes more than just writing
it's a dialogue between your soul and theirs,
a harmonious exchange
across the canvas of creativity.
I've always found
that immersing myself
in powerful poetry
not only inspires me
but...
#confessional
#emotions
#LifeAsAWriter
#myself
#WritingPoetry
33 reads
8 Comments
Pete_25
Poem Published
Yesterday 8:10am
Yesterday 8:10am
Me
I'm the kinda guy you can't deny
Through blue eyes I'll paint your sky
Yours sincerely, touch lit dark
Imps and fairies, makin' sparks
Pen and ink, I overthink
Smoke n' ice, one more drink
I keep it tight, shed some light
Mother fuck! Another write
Through blue eyes I'll paint your sky
Yours sincerely, touch lit dark
Imps and fairies, makin' sparks
Pen and ink, I overthink
Smoke n' ice, one more drink
I keep it tight, shed some light
Mother fuck! Another write
#emotions
#SelfWorth
#strength
45 reads
12 Comments
Fishmander
Poem Published
26th Jan 2025 8:12pm
26th Jan 2025 8:12pm
Metamorph
In an ocean stretched across time
The mouth of the void stirs, hungers
I will not waver, fail the climb
I walk the path where strength lingers
Misfortune attacks my steel breast
I ache for the sting of sorrow
Yet I go on in this soul-theft
Reach for rule beyond tomorrow
Terror is a shroud worn out, tired
I yearn for illustrious touch
The kiss of knowledge warm, sired
Waves to aid me along this crutch
This oath bites, burns and leaves it's mark
Leaving me bare, wanting for life as such.
The mouth of the void stirs, hungers
I will not waver, fail the climb
I walk the path where strength lingers
Misfortune attacks my steel breast
I ache for the sting of sorrow
Yet I go on in this soul-theft
Reach for rule beyond tomorrow
Terror is a shroud worn out, tired
I yearn for illustrious touch
The kiss of knowledge warm, sired
Waves to aid me along this crutch
This oath bites, burns and leaves it's mark
Leaving me bare, wanting for life as such.
#dark
#MentalHealth
#SelfReflection #spiritual
#SelfReflection #spiritual
24 reads
1 Comment
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
26th Jan 2025 7:35pm
26th Jan 2025 7:35pm
Friendship...poof!
The Cycle of Friendship...
We played dolls every Friday while her Mom babysat me. Then our mothers fought and I never saw her again. I don't remember her name!
Lisa sat in front of me in 1st grade. We sat together at lunch. Then, my mother moved us across the city.
At the new school there was Chuckie. He made funny faces. The end of the school year was the last I saw him.
Kids came and went. I expected it. Then I married Fat Boy and I wasn't allowed friends. There were a couple women here and there that were almost friends until Fat Boy...
We played dolls every Friday while her Mom babysat me. Then our mothers fought and I never saw her again. I don't remember her name!
Lisa sat in front of me in 1st grade. We sat together at lunch. Then, my mother moved us across the city.
At the new school there was Chuckie. He made funny faces. The end of the school year was the last I saw him.
Kids came and went. I expected it. Then I married Fat Boy and I wasn't allowed friends. There were a couple women here and there that were almost friends until Fat Boy...
#bittersweet
#disappointment
#IMissYou
#MovingOn
#sadness
22 reads
4 Comments
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
23rd Dec 2024 1:02am
23rd Dec 2024 1:02am
Loving You.
You were so supposed to love me...
so many times you tried to kill me.
And you passed my sex around.
Momma - I will never understand.
All I ever wanted was to be loved!
You passed away. Your whole family...
thought you were faking even as you took
your final breath - I wish I could have...
...kept you safe from death!!!
I never stopped loving you!
So many unanswered questions...
keep me awake at night.
You'd been through it first -
how could you do that all to me?
All I ever...
so many times you tried to kill me.
And you passed my sex around.
Momma - I will never understand.
All I ever wanted was to be loved!
You passed away. Your whole family...
thought you were faking even as you took
your final breath - I wish I could have...
...kept you safe from death!!!
I never stopped loving you!
So many unanswered questions...
keep me awake at night.
You'd been through it first -
how could you do that all to me?
All I ever...
#abuse
#death
#love
#memories
#mother
111 reads
7 Comments
skymikan
Poem Published
26th Jan 2025 4:00pm
26th Jan 2025 4:00pm
Ocean in Motion
You don’t say that I’ve stopped trying,
I’ve already restrained myself from dying.
You see just a wall, white and wide-eyed,
There’s no word, but the truth you’re denied.
I’ve always loved the idea of flowers,
Changing with each passing hour,
Blooming in color, then fading away—
At least, someday, I’ll expect the change to stay.
You’ll never know what it feels like to be this way,
To give everything and get nothing in return each day.
You look at the sun, but it burns you down,
Caught in the heavy rain, I slowly drown.
...
I’ve already restrained myself from dying.
You see just a wall, white and wide-eyed,
There’s no word, but the truth you’re denied.
I’ve always loved the idea of flowers,
Changing with each passing hour,
Blooming in color, then fading away—
At least, someday, I’ll expect the change to stay.
You’ll never know what it feels like to be this way,
To give everything and get nothing in return each day.
You look at the sun, but it burns you down,
Caught in the heavy rain, I slowly drown.
...
#disappointment
#sea
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0 Comments
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
26th Jan 2025 12:26pm
26th Jan 2025 12:26pm
Emotional Wreck
Today
I am
an
ARROGANT
SELFISH
BITCH!
Cunts Lives Matter!
It is what it is!
What would Voltaire say?
What would Jesus do?
In a dream...
Dr. Suess says
Thing 1 and
Thing 2 were
ACID TABS!!!
Do I recollect...
or do I ramble?
Next year I
want a talking
Christmas tree!
Invent one.
Tears for fears.
I am
an
ARROGANT
SELFISH
BITCH!
Cunts Lives Matter!
It is what it is!
What would Voltaire say?
What would Jesus do?
In a dream...
Dr. Suess says
Thing 1 and
Thing 2 were
ACID TABS!!!
Do I recollect...
or do I ramble?
Next year I
want a talking
Christmas tree!
Invent one.
Tears for fears.
#apathy
#emptiness
#frustration
28 reads
3 Comments
Fishmander
Poem Published
26th Jan 2025 2:52am
26th Jan 2025 2:52am
Trespass
I am a limb torn burden
He who lapped the lips of fragility
On lilac hills uncertain
From streams embrace, blended eternity
Anoint me a new organ
Another quick dive into the riverbank
Substitute the foul warden
Ancient he drowns; reemerges true, blank
He slithers, struggles for warmth
Whispers words, a voice deadly in the night
Swarming the light like a moth
Unholy he aims to cure sinful blight
Carries a sigil across his chest
In hopes armor he seeks his final rest.
He who lapped the lips of fragility
On lilac hills uncertain
From streams embrace, blended eternity
Anoint me a new organ
Another quick dive into the riverbank
Substitute the foul warden
Ancient he drowns; reemerges true, blank
He slithers, struggles for warmth
Whispers words, a voice deadly in the night
Swarming the light like a moth
Unholy he aims to cure sinful blight
Carries a sigil across his chest
In hopes armor he seeks his final rest.
#dark
#MentalHealth
#SelfReflection #spiritual
#SelfReflection #spiritual
42 reads
1 Comment
AfterSexDilemma
Poem Published
26th Jan 2025 1:08am
26th Jan 2025 1:08am
Blood
I blow my nose
Just to release the blood
That overflows.
Both ends,
I'm budding like a rose.
Heart is racing,
The anger shows.
So much pain;
The stress.
I gotta let it go.
If you're in my line of sight,
You're just another foe.
When I'm high,
You're low.
So watch your head,
Not your toes.
Just to release the blood
That overflows.
Both ends,
I'm budding like a rose.
Heart is racing,
The anger shows.
So much pain;
The stress.
I gotta let it go.
If you're in my line of sight,
You're just another foe.
When I'm high,
You're low.
So watch your head,
Not your toes.
#dark
48 reads
3 Comments
Glaxian
Poem Published
25th Jan 2025 4:44pm
25th Jan 2025 4:44pm
Nuthin'
Nuthin'
Largely lost in lethargy
And able to act accordingly
Every energy eviscerating efficiency
Buying bleeding barnyard Barbary
Selling strings soaked in sophistry
living life like literal lunacy
candidly creating chaos casually
Making mountains move maliciously
fleeing fearless fiends for fantasy
proposing purpose pushed to periphery
every edifice eroding endlessly
End
Largely lost in lethargy
And able to act accordingly
Every energy eviscerating efficiency
Buying bleeding barnyard Barbary
Selling strings soaked in sophistry
living life like literal lunacy
candidly creating chaos casually
Making mountains move maliciously
fleeing fearless fiends for fantasy
proposing purpose pushed to periphery
every edifice eroding endlessly
End
#confusion
#emptiness
#escape #motivational
#escape #motivational
37 reads
0 Comments
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