Self Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Personal poetry about the way you feel about yourself
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PAR
Poem Published
Today 3:34pm
Today 3:34pm
Vision_of_insanity
A mountain is not
what you see
from the air.
A vision is not what
you can see inside
the mountain...
Inside the mountain
a rock heart of
insanity.
Trembling.
what you see
from the air.
A vision is not what
you can see inside
the mountain...
Inside the mountain
a rock heart of
insanity.
Trembling.
#confessional
#LifeAsAWriter
#MyInspiration
#WritersBlock
#WritingPoetry
35 reads
6 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
Today 1:25pm
Today 1:25pm
Characters in my story... TheOralizer
Your hieroglyphic ideographic writing,
minted in gold on bare stone,
It is a spectacle of ancient elegance
and timeless majesty.
Each symbol, meticulously engraved,
shines with a golden light that contrasts
with the austere coldness of stone.
The lines and curves of hieroglyphs
capture an ethereal beauty,
while the precision of art
is a testament to the skill
and dedication required to create such work.
The gold, shining and pure,
gives a feeling of opulence and solemnity,
transforming...
minted in gold on bare stone,
It is a spectacle of ancient elegance
and timeless majesty.
Each symbol, meticulously engraved,
shines with a golden light that contrasts
with the austere coldness of stone.
The lines and curves of hieroglyphs
capture an ethereal beauty,
while the precision of art
is a testament to the skill
and dedication required to create such work.
The gold, shining and pure,
gives a feeling of opulence and solemnity,
transforming...
#confessional
#identity
#LifeAsAWriter
#WritersBlock
#WritingPoetry
26 reads
6 Comments
Poetblue
Poeblue
Poeblue
Poem Published
Today 12:42pm
Today 12:42pm
Fasting from Your Love
Fasting from your love—
The addiction that consumes my mind,
A fire that burns, leaving reason behind.
I’m desperate to purge you from my soul,
But our bond runs deeper, beyond control.
Our souls are bound, down to the nucleus,
A connection so pure, so ruinous.
To break us apart would shatter the skies,
An atomic ripple where the universe cries.
I’m a prisoner of my own fragile mind,
Padded walls meant to protect, yet confined.
But even here, the stabs still find my heart,
As darkness whispers, tearing me apart.
...
The addiction that consumes my mind,
A fire that burns, leaving reason behind.
I’m desperate to purge you from my soul,
But our bond runs deeper, beyond control.
Our souls are bound, down to the nucleus,
A connection so pure, so ruinous.
To break us apart would shatter the skies,
An atomic ripple where the universe cries.
I’m a prisoner of my own fragile mind,
Padded walls meant to protect, yet confined.
But even here, the stabs still find my heart,
As darkness whispers, tearing me apart.
...
#breakup
#sadness
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0 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
Today 9:35am
Today 9:35am
Rage Inside
Gotta rage inside
Can’t let him out
Catch a spark
And now it’s happening
Starts as a small hill
Turns into a mountain
Simple convo turns to anger
Wanted to dig deep and find out why I am
Learned that having No guidance
And being by myself
Stops you from forming
Your soon to be adult mind
Had no mentor to straighten me out
When you live in your head
It can’t turn out good
So I’m compulsive and have a hair trigger
Not what I saw but it’s what I’m living
Can’t let him out
Catch a spark
And now it’s happening
Starts as a small hill
Turns into a mountain
Simple convo turns to anger
Wanted to dig deep and find out why I am
Learned that having No guidance
And being by myself
Stops you from forming
Your soon to be adult mind
Had no mentor to straighten me out
When you live in your head
It can’t turn out good
So I’m compulsive and have a hair trigger
Not what I saw but it’s what I’m living
#anger
#dark
#regret #shame
#regret #shame
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0 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
Today 9:26am
Today 9:26am
The Hunter
The Hunter
Run around trying to find the right spot
Nature steps up and i reset
But I’m breathing and I’m scheming
To find that place
To let my freedom fly
It might not come on my first or second trip
But I keep scheming and looking
To exploit the weakness that
I see before me
Still huntin for that right spot
I don’t need that much
To get it off and if I get it off
It’ll tickle the twine
Almost every time
It’ll tickle the twine
Almost every time
Even if it don’t…if it don’t ...
Run around trying to find the right spot
Nature steps up and i reset
But I’m breathing and I’m scheming
To find that place
To let my freedom fly
It might not come on my first or second trip
But I keep scheming and looking
To exploit the weakness that
I see before me
Still huntin for that right spot
I don’t need that much
To get it off and if I get it off
It’ll tickle the twine
Almost every time
It’ll tickle the twine
Almost every time
Even if it don’t…if it don’t ...
#dreams
#motivational
#sports #success
#sports #success
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Nil
Nolan
Nolan
Poem Published
Today 2:56am
Today 2:56am
Transdniestrian Sentiment.
All there is.
Is the silence.
The high pitched squeal.
Of the death of my hearing.
And.
I can hear the emptiness punctuated with electrical whines.
Anticipating something to just.
Fill the air.
With an angsty.
Revolt.
Against the.
Calm.
Is the silence.
The high pitched squeal.
Of the death of my hearing.
And.
I can hear the emptiness punctuated with electrical whines.
Anticipating something to just.
Fill the air.
With an angsty.
Revolt.
Against the.
Calm.
#bittersweet
#boredom
#emptiness
27 reads
1 Comment
Nil
Nolan
Nolan
Poem Published
Today 2:53am
Today 2:53am
Unfinished half thought out idea.
All the things I havent said.
I'd like to say.
Sometime far away.
Maybe, before I'm dead.
I've lost the motivation.
I've forgotten the plot.
To my multi syllabic salvation.
With an obfuscated forget me not.
I've written out my frustration.
Onto the rap sheet.
Of when I fell asleep.
Can't write with this lack of attention.
I think I'm trying to resolve.
The contradiction in my mind.
Writing something to absolve.
Me, of this truth I just can't find.
I have so many things to say.
Just,...
I'd like to say.
Sometime far away.
Maybe, before I'm dead.
I've lost the motivation.
I've forgotten the plot.
To my multi syllabic salvation.
With an obfuscated forget me not.
I've written out my frustration.
Onto the rap sheet.
Of when I fell asleep.
Can't write with this lack of attention.
I think I'm trying to resolve.
The contradiction in my mind.
Writing something to absolve.
Me, of this truth I just can't find.
I have so many things to say.
Just,...
#boredom
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u53l355
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:31pm
Yesterday 5:31pm
Dead
My body slowly becomes intertwined with the soil,
Feeding the worms , giving back to the earth.
I have never felt so free.
- Forgotten writer
Feeding the worms , giving back to the earth.
I have never felt so free.
- Forgotten writer
#dark
#death
#depression
#suffering
#suicide
34 reads
1 Comment
PAR
Poem Published
Yesterday 2:40pm
Yesterday 2:40pm
One-way ticket...
Why should I care for the new year?
Another cycle of the same celestial dance
spiraling through familiar constellations.
Same faces in the same places,
their conversations a recitation of a well-worn script.
Why should I care for the new year?
When the clock's hands circle back
to touch the same numbers they brushed a moment ago.
And the calendar's pages, thin and brittle
fall like leaves from the same tree.
Why should I care for the new year...
When the same hues paint the dawn
and...
Another cycle of the same celestial dance
spiraling through familiar constellations.
Same faces in the same places,
their conversations a recitation of a well-worn script.
Why should I care for the new year?
When the clock's hands circle back
to touch the same numbers they brushed a moment ago.
And the calendar's pages, thin and brittle
fall like leaves from the same tree.
Why should I care for the new year...
When the same hues paint the dawn
and...
#fate
#karma
#luck
#mirror
#NewYear
48 reads
10 Comments
moon_bather
Poem Published
Yesterday 3:11am
Yesterday 3:11am
Espejo
Distracted by
Distraught interactions
with others who don’t understand
nor do they care
nor do I care if
who gives a shit?
Rambling on again and again
to somehow heal
through an idiot’s catharsis
Believing in something
to believe in something
to feel a reason
to keep on believing
that life is worth living
but in the end
all the same bullshit
just painted a different color
Join their party?
Why would I?
Well
of course I...
Distraught interactions
with others who don’t understand
nor do they care
nor do I care if
who gives a shit?
Rambling on again and again
to somehow heal
through an idiot’s catharsis
Believing in something
to believe in something
to feel a reason
to keep on believing
that life is worth living
but in the end
all the same bullshit
just painted a different color
Join their party?
Why would I?
Well
of course I...
#confessional
#FreeVerse
#StreamOfConsciousness
#suffering
#TruthOfLife
40 reads
2 Comments
Carpe_Noctem
Poem Published
11th Dec 2024 10:03am
11th Dec 2024 10:03am
Meaningful title inserted
it's two am
slept
maybe an hour
two uninterrupted dreamers
laying undisturbed
enter the muse
tangoing into the mind's eye
quickening the pace
flowing coffee
freshly brewed as scant offering
she summons me
wounds still fresh in the blistering sun
yet to scar over
still puss and scab
sorrows embrace of sadness grips me
still the door creaks, opened by her
drawing from the joint
gently she guides me
my smoke shadow, mere illusion
...
slept
maybe an hour
two uninterrupted dreamers
laying undisturbed
enter the muse
tangoing into the mind's eye
quickening the pace
flowing coffee
freshly brewed as scant offering
she summons me
wounds still fresh in the blistering sun
yet to scar over
still puss and scab
sorrows embrace of sadness grips me
still the door creaks, opened by her
drawing from the joint
gently she guides me
my smoke shadow, mere illusion
...
#healing
#PTSD
32 reads
1 Comment
poet5678
CHUCKLES 123
CHUCKLES 123
Poem Published
11th Dec 2024 7:28am
11th Dec 2024 7:28am
I am glad you want me
I am glad you want me
Ally
To be your friend
Maybe forever
I will be fine with it
I don't want you to think
That I am a hopeless case
I am trying my best
Taking care of me
Because there is nobody
Else who will take care of me
And I am quite able to do it
Also I am now in my senior years
And I just love to live in my
Senior years
I had lost some of my hearing
That is why
I need to use my hearing aid
I already got used to it
I already have some cataract
On my left eye
Also I need glasses for...
Ally
To be your friend
Maybe forever
I will be fine with it
I don't want you to think
That I am a hopeless case
I am trying my best
Taking care of me
Because there is nobody
Else who will take care of me
And I am quite able to do it
Also I am now in my senior years
And I just love to live in my
Senior years
I had lost some of my hearing
That is why
I need to use my hearing aid
I already got used to it
I already have some cataract
On my left eye
Also I need glasses for...
#anxiety
#disappointment
#fear
#jealousy
#regret
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0 Comments
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