Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique
#water
Poems about water seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Reflecting With The Reflection
Upon the water’s glass I gaze
To meet myself in mirrored hue
The flaxen hair, like summer’s blaze
The eyes, cerulean and true
I trace the line of cheek and chin
This sculpted mask that time bestowed
In shadowed light and shape therein
Where fleeting fears and wonders stowed
Are eyes too wide? Or fair enough
To pierce the world’s unyielding stare?
They seem to hold a shade, a bluff
A mystic depth beyond compare
Yet strange, this face both mine and not
Its every line so known and new
As if some...
To meet myself in mirrored hue
The flaxen hair, like summer’s blaze
The eyes, cerulean and true
I trace the line of cheek and chin
This sculpted mask that time bestowed
In shadowed light and shape therein
Where fleeting fears and wonders stowed
Are eyes too wide? Or fair enough
To pierce the world’s unyielding stare?
They seem to hold a shade, a bluff
A mystic depth beyond compare
Yet strange, this face both mine and not
Its every line so known and new
As if some...
#meditation
#nature
#rhyming
#SelfReflection
#water
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After Summer comes The Rains
i love the summers torrid, their Stark feel
time when the winds hold the time still
wherein the mirage waving like a dream sea
where silhouette twist their eerie entity
zenithal heat, vertical sun, burning limit
zero shadow, Dante's inferno, the sky's lit
zephyr of a sighing giant in the gaping air
under a disk flaming, sending sizzling glare
it feels like time is always and ever hot
lose any reviving, any freshening thought
but,to such flaring flames, the more i light
every flaming pyre, in the deep of night
there,...
time when the winds hold the time still
wherein the mirage waving like a dream sea
where silhouette twist their eerie entity
zenithal heat, vertical sun, burning limit
zero shadow, Dante's inferno, the sky's lit
zephyr of a sighing giant in the gaping air
under a disk flaming, sending sizzling glare
it feels like time is always and ever hot
lose any reviving, any freshening thought
but,to such flaring flames, the more i light
every flaming pyre, in the deep of night
there,...
#birth
#fire
#rain
#storm
#water
149 reads
3 Comments
L'eau, l'encre et la poesie
j'aime voir le ciel vibrer en milles lumieres
et que la terre me servira a voir ça plus clair
la montagne comme un remede contre la douleur
a quoi bon exister si ton cour est un trou noir?
et que tu passeS ta vie en une vaine douceur
ouvre tes petales, et accpe le don du ciel
tu est une fleur, source de beaute et de miel
la rosee qui te baingne dans la belle matinee
sera l'encre du poete pour une celeste verite
et que la montagne se tienne debout derriere
contre tout les maivais vents et les tonnerres
et...
et que la terre me servira a voir ça plus clair
la montagne comme un remede contre la douleur
a quoi bon exister si ton cour est un trou noir?
et que tu passeS ta vie en une vaine douceur
ouvre tes petales, et accpe le don du ciel
tu est une fleur, source de beaute et de miel
la rosee qui te baingne dans la belle matinee
sera l'encre du poete pour une celeste verite
et que la montagne se tienne debout derriere
contre tout les maivais vents et les tonnerres
et...
#earth
#emotions
#inspirational #water
#inspirational #water
126 reads
9 Comments
Spy among Us
Tentacle stretches across the sea floor
With some suckers on his arm gripping onto his prey
When he’s with a friend wraps his arm around
And hugs him up
As a hermit crab searches for a new home
So they line up size by size to find a new apartment
With a camera on his shell so I can see
What’s going on in the land of the hermits
They proceed to move into their new shell
Some happy some not so much
A pigs day begins in the Caribbean
Swimming in the ocean
They swim like Michael...
With some suckers on his arm gripping onto his prey
When he’s with a friend wraps his arm around
And hugs him up
As a hermit crab searches for a new home
So they line up size by size to find a new apartment
With a camera on his shell so I can see
What’s going on in the land of the hermits
They proceed to move into their new shell
Some happy some not so much
A pigs day begins in the Caribbean
Swimming in the ocean
They swim like Michael...
#fish
#nature
#sea #water
#sea #water
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Depth is Deep
Depth is deep
Depth is so deep
In the black water of my soul
Fathoming searching
Come up for air
Hold my breath
Deep in the black water of my soul
Bubbles reach the surface
My soul is underwater
Try to catch my breath
In the black water of my soul
Fight the demons
That hold me under
There is a kink in the
Black water of my soul
Forces pulling me under
In the black water of my soul
Spirit wants to break free
From the black water of my soul
...
Depth is so deep
In the black water of my soul
Fathoming searching
Come up for air
Hold my breath
Deep in the black water of my soul
Bubbles reach the surface
My soul is underwater
Try to catch my breath
In the black water of my soul
Fight the demons
That hold me under
There is a kink in the
Black water of my soul
Forces pulling me under
In the black water of my soul
Spirit wants to break free
From the black water of my soul
...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#mirror
#spiritual #water
#spiritual #water
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Now Who Is It This Time?
Aurora was in the middle of
her shower when she heard her phone
ring which made her look around
to make sure she's alone
and grab a towel
before rushing
to answer
that phone
call.
her shower when she heard her phone
ring which made her look around
to make sure she's alone
and grab a towel
before rushing
to answer
that phone
call.
#fiction
#home
#sensual
#technology
#water
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The Shipwrecked Heart
He had emptied an ocean for her.
No seashells
No gold
Just salt and bones.
No seashells
No gold
Just salt and bones.
#heartbroken
#sea
#unicorns #water
#unicorns #water
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9 Comments
His Encounter With A Real Mermaid
Quinton stepped out of
the cabin and over to
the dock for a cool down swim.
But when he got there,
his eyes had grown wide at the
sight of a hot chick swimming.
That was before he
cleared his throat which made her look
over her shoulder at him.
And just as he was
about to say something to
her, that mermaid swam away.
the cabin and over to
the dock for a cool down swim.
But when he got there,
his eyes had grown wide at the
sight of a hot chick swimming.
That was before he
cleared his throat which made her look
over her shoulder at him.
And just as he was
about to say something to
her, that mermaid swam away.
#beauty
#fiction
#mermaids
#summer
#water
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Natural Delight
Natural Delight
Some natural gifts in my inborn flair
'bout mundane life, not the more i care
Societal games, bustling agora sites
Loveless feel for the bright city lights
Praising a stroll somewhere in the field
In the mead, not before a screen shield
Where bleat and moo make the book i read
Where shepherd and mountain take the lead
My feelings flame at morning dripping dew
At chirping bird with dawn wakes up, anew
And riparian walk by a trickling stream
Time is water...
Some natural gifts in my inborn flair
'bout mundane life, not the more i care
Societal games, bustling agora sites
Loveless feel for the bright city lights
Praising a stroll somewhere in the field
In the mead, not before a screen shield
Where bleat and moo make the book i read
Where shepherd and mountain take the lead
My feelings flame at morning dripping dew
At chirping bird with dawn wakes up, anew
And riparian walk by a trickling stream
Time is water...
#earth
#forest
#nature
#trees
#water
105 reads
4 Comments
The Sea
I stand upon the shore, the night grown deep
The stars above in silent vigil keep
Yet as I gaze upon the endless sea
A nameless dread doth rise and gnaw at me
What swimmeth there, beneath the moonless tide
Where darkness moves and ancient horrors bide?
The waves, they whisper secrets I shan’t know
And in their depths, the foulest creatures grow
I hear the swell, a low and eerie sound
As though some beast below were winding 'round
Its form unseen, its presence yet I feel
A weight that presses, cold and sharp as steel
...
The stars above in silent vigil keep
Yet as I gaze upon the endless sea
A nameless dread doth rise and gnaw at me
What swimmeth there, beneath the moonless tide
Where darkness moves and ancient horrors bide?
The waves, they whisper secrets I shan’t know
And in their depths, the foulest creatures grow
I hear the swell, a low and eerie sound
As though some beast below were winding 'round
Its form unseen, its presence yet I feel
A weight that presses, cold and sharp as steel
...
#dark
#sea
#water
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Climate times(flyin high)
Flyin high in climate times
Gonna get an RV to see
Things not saw by my eyes
Mile marker 29 flys by
Pull into the campground
Stretch my legs and let go
As small talk goes all around
Back on the horse
Rubber on asphalt
Driving on an American Dream
Driving on an American Dream
Mountains stand tall in the distance
A frog hops into whitewater
I want to go to Hawaii
I can’t step onto the runway ...
Gonna get an RV to see
Things not saw by my eyes
Mile marker 29 flys by
Pull into the campground
Stretch my legs and let go
As small talk goes all around
Back on the horse
Rubber on asphalt
Driving on an American Dream
Driving on an American Dream
Mountains stand tall in the distance
A frog hops into whitewater
I want to go to Hawaii
I can’t step onto the runway ...
#earth
#fire
#tragedy #water
#tragedy #water
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Heavy 13
Feeling heavy 13
Feeling heavy carbon
I’m 13 into my fusion
Fusion fuels me I speed
Colliding with myself
I’m nuclear in you
My tension fuels me and
I’m spinning like a top
Symphony when we crash together
We crash and blow up the world
Fall into a rhythm like we’re in chic fil a
While my sins scream from the pew
Church of sins inside me
I’m feeling heavy carbon I’m 13
Hover above light carbon 12 doesn’t spark
Nuclear chemistry...
Feeling heavy carbon
I’m 13 into my fusion
Fusion fuels me I speed
Colliding with myself
I’m nuclear in you
My tension fuels me and
I’m spinning like a top
Symphony when we crash together
We crash and blow up the world
Fall into a rhythm like we’re in chic fil a
While my sins scream from the pew
Church of sins inside me
I’m feeling heavy carbon I’m 13
Hover above light carbon 12 doesn’t spark
Nuclear chemistry...
#earth
#fire
#water
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DU Poetry : Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique