Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique
#water
Poems about water seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Purples
Nature's best musicians sing
Over lakes and ponds and streams
Sweet and salty waters hum
My guitar strings gently strum
Let the melody of worlds
Convey her gentle sound through you
Drown in deep blues
Sing in strong reds
So that you might live in purples
Follow singing rivers ahead
Go where no man's ever tread
Stay until you lose yourself
Stay until you lose your self
Over lakes and ponds and streams
Sweet and salty waters hum
My guitar strings gently strum
Let the melody of worlds
Convey her gentle sound through you
Drown in deep blues
Sing in strong reds
So that you might live in purples
Follow singing rivers ahead
Go where no man's ever tread
Stay until you lose yourself
Stay until you lose your self
#birds
#emotions
#hope
#nature
#water
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Assistant to Power
Assistant to Power
You go to school and dig into law principles
I go to school I’m an Apprentice to a Master Plumber
We see each other in social situations
Blacked out pledging the fraternity of yourfamily
So I see you in the library but you’re reading the comics
I’m on the stone looking to master Plumbing
As time passes you’re clerking for the Supreme Court
I worked for all of this I Mastered Plumbing
You were drunk and sleeping, pulling down your pants now you’re on the Supreme Court ...
You go to school and dig into law principles
I go to school I’m an Apprentice to a Master Plumber
We see each other in social situations
Blacked out pledging the fraternity of yourfamily
So I see you in the library but you’re reading the comics
I’m on the stone looking to master Plumbing
As time passes you’re clerking for the Supreme Court
I worked for all of this I Mastered Plumbing
You were drunk and sleeping, pulling down your pants now you’re on the Supreme Court ...
#job
#sacrifice
#water
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Breathe a Breath
Breathe to me a breath I can share
Breath a breath that saves the earth
Climate will hurt us
if we are ignorant to the land
that burns us and quakes us and spins tornadoes
We should all agree living not dying
Is better than not existing even a little bit
So temperatures rise and we can’t lie
Bacon is burning breakfast on asphalt
Breathe a breathe that saves all of us
Plant a tree give oxygen to peoplekind
As fires burn the west 80 foot flames in Greece
No...
Breath a breath that saves the earth
Climate will hurt us
if we are ignorant to the land
that burns us and quakes us and spins tornadoes
We should all agree living not dying
Is better than not existing even a little bit
So temperatures rise and we can’t lie
Bacon is burning breakfast on asphalt
Breathe a breathe that saves all of us
Plant a tree give oxygen to peoplekind
As fires burn the west 80 foot flames in Greece
No...
#earth
#environment
#fire #water
#fire #water
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playing within
When the lights are dim
and the crowd’s all gone
keep the game alive
play on and on.
No need for a stage
or a roaring cheer
the heart of the game
is always here.
In the silence,
moves are made
passes thrown
in a hidden parade.
Invisible victories
unseen sweat
chasing dreams
with no regret.
Under the stars
with no eyes to see.
The spirit of play runs
wild and free.
Every shot a whisper
every goal a ghost.
In the quiet night
you’re playing the...
and the crowd’s all gone
keep the game alive
play on and on.
No need for a stage
or a roaring cheer
the heart of the game
is always here.
In the silence,
moves are made
passes thrown
in a hidden parade.
Invisible victories
unseen sweat
chasing dreams
with no regret.
Under the stars
with no eyes to see.
The spirit of play runs
wild and free.
Every shot a whisper
every goal a ghost.
In the quiet night
you’re playing the...
#fire
#identity
#silence
#water
#WritingPoetry
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Brine Song
Priest kissed those cold clay lips
Form mutilated on battle between ships
A gift given back from grey seas
Fish and brine ate up everything below the knee
Once a man of honor, strong and bold
A warrior forged in fire and mold
He sailed beneath both storm and star
To find his fate in realms afar
A tale of powder’s burn and sabres’ flash
Of cannon’s roar and timbers’ crash
Where mortal form on reefs was dashed
And hope, like sails, to tatters lashed
The waves bore witness, fierce and grim
As bloodied waters...
Form mutilated on battle between ships
A gift given back from grey seas
Fish and brine ate up everything below the knee
Once a man of honor, strong and bold
A warrior forged in fire and mold
He sailed beneath both storm and star
To find his fate in realms afar
A tale of powder’s burn and sabres’ flash
Of cannon’s roar and timbers’ crash
Where mortal form on reefs was dashed
And hope, like sails, to tatters lashed
The waves bore witness, fierce and grim
As bloodied waters...
#conflict
#dark
#death
#sea
#water
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Reflecting With The Reflection
Upon the water’s glass I gaze
To meet myself in mirrored hue
The flaxen hair, like summer’s blaze
The eyes, cerulean and true
I trace the line of cheek and chin
This sculpted mask that time bestowed
In shadowed light and shape therein
Where fleeting fears and wonders stowed
Are eyes too wide? Or fair enough
To pierce the world’s unyielding stare?
They seem to hold a shade, a bluff
A mystic depth beyond compare
Yet strange, this face both mine and not
Its every line so known and new
As if some...
To meet myself in mirrored hue
The flaxen hair, like summer’s blaze
The eyes, cerulean and true
I trace the line of cheek and chin
This sculpted mask that time bestowed
In shadowed light and shape therein
Where fleeting fears and wonders stowed
Are eyes too wide? Or fair enough
To pierce the world’s unyielding stare?
They seem to hold a shade, a bluff
A mystic depth beyond compare
Yet strange, this face both mine and not
Its every line so known and new
As if some...
#meditation
#nature
#rhyming
#SelfReflection
#water
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After Summer comes The Rains
i love the summers torrid, their Stark feel
time when the winds hold the time still
wherein the mirage waving like a dream sea
where silhouette twist their eerie entity
zenithal heat, vertical sun, burning limit
zero shadow, Dante's inferno, the sky's lit
zephyr of a sighing giant in the gaping air
under a disk flaming, sending sizzling glare
it feels like time is always and ever hot
lose any reviving, any freshening thought
but,to such flaring flames, the more i light
every flaming pyre, in the deep of night
there,...
time when the winds hold the time still
wherein the mirage waving like a dream sea
where silhouette twist their eerie entity
zenithal heat, vertical sun, burning limit
zero shadow, Dante's inferno, the sky's lit
zephyr of a sighing giant in the gaping air
under a disk flaming, sending sizzling glare
it feels like time is always and ever hot
lose any reviving, any freshening thought
but,to such flaring flames, the more i light
every flaming pyre, in the deep of night
there,...
#birth
#fire
#rain
#storm
#water
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L'eau, l'encre et la poesie
j'aime voir le ciel vibrer en milles lumieres
et que la terre me servira a voir ça plus clair
la montagne comme un remede contre la douleur
a quoi bon exister si ton cour est un trou noir?
et que tu passeS ta vie en une vaine douceur
ouvre tes petales, et accpe le don du ciel
tu est une fleur, source de beaute et de miel
la rosee qui te baingne dans la belle matinee
sera l'encre du poete pour une celeste verite
et que la montagne se tienne debout derriere
contre tout les maivais vents et les tonnerres
et...
et que la terre me servira a voir ça plus clair
la montagne comme un remede contre la douleur
a quoi bon exister si ton cour est un trou noir?
et que tu passeS ta vie en une vaine douceur
ouvre tes petales, et accpe le don du ciel
tu est une fleur, source de beaute et de miel
la rosee qui te baingne dans la belle matinee
sera l'encre du poete pour une celeste verite
et que la montagne se tienne debout derriere
contre tout les maivais vents et les tonnerres
et...
#earth
#emotions
#inspirational #water
#inspirational #water
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Spy among Us
Tentacle stretches across the sea floor
With some suckers on his arm gripping onto his prey
When he’s with a friend wraps his arm around
And hugs him up
As a hermit crab searches for a new home
So they line up size by size to find a new apartment
With a camera on his shell so I can see
What’s going on in the land of the hermits
They proceed to move into their new shell
Some happy some not so much
A pigs day begins in the Caribbean
Swimming in the ocean
They swim like Michael...
With some suckers on his arm gripping onto his prey
When he’s with a friend wraps his arm around
And hugs him up
As a hermit crab searches for a new home
So they line up size by size to find a new apartment
With a camera on his shell so I can see
What’s going on in the land of the hermits
They proceed to move into their new shell
Some happy some not so much
A pigs day begins in the Caribbean
Swimming in the ocean
They swim like Michael...
#fish
#nature
#sea #water
#sea #water
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Depth is Deep
Depth is deep
Depth is so deep
In the black water of my soul
Fathoming searching
Come up for air
Hold my breath
Deep in the black water of my soul
Bubbles reach the surface
My soul is underwater
Try to catch my breath
In the black water of my soul
Fight the demons
That hold me under
There is a kink in the
Black water of my soul
Forces pulling me under
In the black water of my soul
Spirit wants to break free
From the black water of my soul
...
Depth is so deep
In the black water of my soul
Fathoming searching
Come up for air
Hold my breath
Deep in the black water of my soul
Bubbles reach the surface
My soul is underwater
Try to catch my breath
In the black water of my soul
Fight the demons
That hold me under
There is a kink in the
Black water of my soul
Forces pulling me under
In the black water of my soul
Spirit wants to break free
From the black water of my soul
...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#mirror
#spiritual #water
#spiritual #water
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Now Who Is It This Time?
Aurora was in the middle of
her shower when she heard her phone
ring which made her look around
to make sure she's alone
and grab a towel
before rushing
to answer
that phone
call.
her shower when she heard her phone
ring which made her look around
to make sure she's alone
and grab a towel
before rushing
to answer
that phone
call.
#fiction
#home
#sensual
#technology
#water
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The Shipwrecked Heart
He had emptied an ocean for her.
No seashells
No gold
Just salt and bones.
No seashells
No gold
Just salt and bones.
#heartbroken
#sea
#unicorns #water
#unicorns #water
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DU Poetry : Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique