Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique
#water
Poems about water seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
An Atmospheric River
It's never too soon on days like today
to energize all of the party lights
and watch the lingering leaves blow away
in vortical El Nino flights...
where, in with the fresh air and rain,
spins new activity of thought
unwinding that twist in my brain
which the Halloween candy had brought.
So now I watch the clouds come and go,
like kisses supplying anew,
the reasons for the future to grow
even when skies are no longer blue...
but tinged here and there with an evening...
to energize all of the party lights
and watch the lingering leaves blow away
in vortical El Nino flights...
where, in with the fresh air and rain,
spins new activity of thought
unwinding that twist in my brain
which the Halloween candy had brought.
So now I watch the clouds come and go,
like kisses supplying anew,
the reasons for the future to grow
even when skies are no longer blue...
but tinged here and there with an evening...
#sea
#sky
#clouds
#fall
#water
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Well? What Do You Think Of My New Swimsuit?
Tony climbed out of
the pool in time for Heidi
to walk towards him
with a new bikini on
which made Tony kiss her lips.
the pool in time for Heidi
to walk towards him
with a new bikini on
which made Tony kiss her lips.
#romantic
#beauty
#water
#fiction
#lover
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> > drowning
He was swimming in a sea of other people’s expectations.
Men had drowned in seas like that.”―Robert Jordan
he was a conquerer
of oceans and big lakes.
he had all that it takes:
titanic metaphor!
one day, when eve was red,
he swallowed half the lake—
more than his lungs could take.
the pool became his bed. ...
Men had drowned in seas like that.”―Robert Jordan
he was a conquerer
of oceans and big lakes.
he had all that it takes:
titanic metaphor!
one day, when eve was red,
he swallowed half the lake—
more than his lungs could take.
the pool became his bed. ...
#grief
#dark
#death
#river
#water
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Burial
The light
reflects off the concrete,
onto the undercarriage
of a shuttlecock fern,
pond drippings play Fs and G minors
a rose reaches,
smattered in thorns,
to become celestial,
a part of the constellation
it's ever denied.
Stars do not grace us,
muddied , encased in an overcast scene.
Loose strife continues,
unyielding to wind
nor to rain
nor to the decaying that continues,
relentless within her marrow.
A mirrorball catches shadows,
and the sky, she rains
as if bereft or relinquishing,
or...
reflects off the concrete,
onto the undercarriage
of a shuttlecock fern,
pond drippings play Fs and G minors
a rose reaches,
smattered in thorns,
to become celestial,
a part of the constellation
it's ever denied.
Stars do not grace us,
muddied , encased in an overcast scene.
Loose strife continues,
unyielding to wind
nor to rain
nor to the decaying that continues,
relentless within her marrow.
A mirrorball catches shadows,
and the sky, she rains
as if bereft or relinquishing,
or...
#night
#water
#nature
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TO ESCAPE FAR AWAY
Let's examine something that can affect your thoughts and imagination, with a image and sounds of translating the process of your mind 🤫 For lets clear our thoughts and the sense of our well being, in a wonderful place of peace and tranquility with the sounds of clean clear water falling down from above 🤔 Now I want you to close your eyes and to think not like me, I just want you to think about a place that offers you. A sense of calmness.🤫 As it is reflecting and feeding on the mere, vibes that is illuminating positive ENERGY that is slowly. Entering and going through...
#river
#sky
#water
#nature
#mountains
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I Swear, Guys! I Really Saw A Genuine Mermaid!
Matthew
walked over to
the lake and saw some chick
smiling at him before she turned
and flashed her fish tail before swimming home.
walked over to
the lake and saw some chick
smiling at him before she turned
and flashed her fish tail before swimming home.
#friendship
#water
#fiction
#fish
#mermaids
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From Walking On The Beach
Daphne came back in
from walking on the beach and
saw David in the shower.
from walking on the beach and
saw David in the shower.
#friendship
#beach
#water
#fiction
#sensual
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incredible rain: a pentaprismic suite
of floods and famines, flaws and fools
2. floods
incredible rain
stampeding tears from weeping, trembling clouds
comes down on the plane
chanting its chorus recklessly and loud
tight rivers in spate
are swallowed up by splashing, dashing seas
that slowly abate
when kissed by cheering sun and cooling breeze
© Copyright 2023 September 18
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
2. floods
incredible rain
stampeding tears from weeping, trembling clouds
comes down on the plane
chanting its chorus recklessly and loud
tight rivers in spate
are swallowed up by splashing, dashing seas
that slowly abate
when kissed by cheering sun and cooling breeze
© Copyright 2023 September 18
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
#rain
#storm
#water
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incredible rain: a pentaprismic suite
of floods and famines, flaws and fools
1. overture
incredible rain
stampeding tears from weeping, trembling clouds,
whose utterance the evensong enshrouds.
inedible grain
gleaned from wild seeds of poison ivy fields―
abundant nullity with swords and shields.
indelible stain
marks well the parchment of the careless ink
that leaks where mental compass strains to think.
insatiable gain ...
1. overture
incredible rain
stampeding tears from weeping, trembling clouds,
whose utterance the evensong enshrouds.
inedible grain
gleaned from wild seeds of poison ivy fields―
abundant nullity with swords and shields.
indelible stain
marks well the parchment of the careless ink
that leaks where mental compass strains to think.
insatiable gain ...
#rain
#water
#food
#greed
#weakness
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Wait Until Mom And Dad See You In These Pics, Sis!
Judy stripped, got in the water
and splashed in there with her one best friend Tim
before he allowed himself to grab her
arm and give Judy one hot kiss after
another before they saw Jennifer
shooting some pics of her sister
standing in the water with him.
and splashed in there with her one best friend Tim
before he allowed himself to grab her
arm and give Judy one hot kiss after
another before they saw Jennifer
shooting some pics of her sister
standing in the water with him.
#sister
#corruption
#water
#fiction
#sensual
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In The Water For A Swim
As
soon as
both Derek
and Maggie looked
around and made sure
that no one else was there,
they stripped down and got into
the water only to have them
hear someone say "wait" which made them turn
around and see Sally standing on the
shore with a pair of towels and saying
"My dad saw what you were doing. You
guys need to get out of there and
dressed right now." only to have
Derek and Maggie laugh
and invite Sally
to join them in
the water
for a
swim.
soon as
both Derek
and Maggie looked
around and made sure
that no one else was there,
they stripped down and got into
the water only to have them
hear someone say "wait" which made them turn
around and see Sally standing on the
shore with a pair of towels and saying
"My dad saw what you were doing. You
guys need to get out of there and
dressed right now." only to have
Derek and Maggie laugh
and invite Sally
to join them in
the water
for a
swim.
#friendship
#corruption
#water
#fiction
#sensual
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Joyce Stepped Out Of The Shower
Joyce stepped out
of the shower and put
on a robe in time to see David
still asleep in bed with Wendy and does not wish
to wake them up no matter what the
reason happens to be
on that day.
of the shower and put
on a robe in time to see David
still asleep in bed with Wendy and does not wish
to wake them up no matter what the
reason happens to be
on that day.
#friendship
#home
#water
#fiction
#acceptance
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