Poems About the Sun Seeking Honest Critique
#sun
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
12th Sep 2024 3:58pm
12th Sep 2024 3:58pm
Aureate Divinity of Gilded Shadow
In sanctums veiled, where shadows gleam
A gilded dark, a twisted dream
No sun nor star could dare unveil
The golden black where spirits wail
Divine the shade, the shadows crawl
In golden veils, the light they maul
A blessed dark, a holy blight
Where gold and black entwine the night
O hallowed void, thou art adorned
With splintered rays of darkness scorned
The light that bends beneath thy shroud
To forge a throne of midnight proud
In cathedrals wrought of silent...
A gilded dark, a twisted dream
No sun nor star could dare unveil
The golden black where spirits wail
Divine the shade, the shadows crawl
In golden veils, the light they maul
A blessed dark, a holy blight
Where gold and black entwine the night
O hallowed void, thou art adorned
With splintered rays of darkness scorned
The light that bends beneath thy shroud
To forge a throne of midnight proud
In cathedrals wrought of silent...
#mythology
#night
#shadows #sun
#shadows #sun
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
12th Sep 2024 5:33am
12th Sep 2024 5:33am
Saturnine Resplendence
In silence deep, where suns are blind
The Autarch reigns with chill unkind
A sovereign of the void’s embrace
'Midst shadowed orbs and starless space
The cold dominion, vast and wide
Where planets drift and horrors bide
Unseen by light of mortal kin
The reign of shadows, dark as sin
With scepter forged in Saturn’s dread
He walks the paths where gods have bled
The ancient dark between the stars
Where silence splits like metal scars
His throne is built on nameless stone
Where time is bent, and laws dethrone ...
The Autarch reigns with chill unkind
A sovereign of the void’s embrace
'Midst shadowed orbs and starless space
The cold dominion, vast and wide
Where planets drift and horrors bide
Unseen by light of mortal kin
The reign of shadows, dark as sin
With scepter forged in Saturn’s dread
He walks the paths where gods have bled
The ancient dark between the stars
Where silence splits like metal scars
His throne is built on nameless stone
Where time is bent, and laws dethrone ...
#shadows
#stars
#sun #universe
#sun #universe
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KendalM
Poem Published
9th Sep 2024 1:47pm
9th Sep 2024 1:47pm
Just A Seventh
It's such a beautiful thought...
The sun, pouring light into the moon, until she becomes full.
Then quietly..slowly, she gives it all back, until she's an empty orb suspended in the heavens, waiting patiently for her next drink, and when his windows open, she closes her eyes and she smiles, letting her cold absorb his heat, feeling the love of the sun once again.
The sun, pouring light into the moon, until she becomes full.
Then quietly..slowly, she gives it all back, until she's an empty orb suspended in the heavens, waiting patiently for her next drink, and when his windows open, she closes her eyes and she smiles, letting her cold absorb his heat, feeling the love of the sun once again.
#moon
#sun
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ExercisingDemons
Poem Published
24th Aug 2024 5:41pm
24th Aug 2024 5:41pm
A Snake, a Gun, the Sun and Me
Tween grass blades
and bugs suffocating on raid
Between mouse houses
and dandelion shade
On I slither
along ankles of folks
past garden stakes and hoses
on I slither
Snakes have scales that shimmer
On I slither
Through skulls of depraved
and saints met by those insane
Through windows of cop shops
and scared hands raised
On I fly
Towards snuffed out hope
over the rich and the broke
on I fly
Bullets have no eyes
On I fly ...
and bugs suffocating on raid
Between mouse houses
and dandelion shade
On I slither
along ankles of folks
past garden stakes and hoses
on I slither
Snakes have scales that shimmer
On I slither
Through skulls of depraved
and saints met by those insane
Through windows of cop shops
and scared hands raised
On I fly
Towards snuffed out hope
over the rich and the broke
on I fly
Bullets have no eyes
On I fly ...
#death
#nature
#sun #violence
#sun #violence
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OyateInyanNajin
Poem Published
14th Aug 2024 00:36am
14th Aug 2024 00:36am
HIDDEN PARADISE BEACH ('X' Marks the Spot') (original 1st draft) (Hidden Paradise Beach, near Puerto Vallarta, Mexico)
hi sea
water love
comes right up
greeting me
wave face
rises bends and breaks
in all it s blue green purity
as it curves and pitches
like a thick wet whale tongue s
fluid glass song s
sudden powerful
whumppphhhh
as it rushes up
onto shallow sloped shoreline s
receptive sandy beach s
tranquil tropic heart beat s
transcendent tidal seam
soaking sand fizzingly
all around my legs
and open spirit s being
in it s exhuberant friendly gesture
to greet embrace and kiss
my earthbound...
water love
comes right up
greeting me
wave face
rises bends and breaks
in all it s blue green purity
as it curves and pitches
like a thick wet whale tongue s
fluid glass song s
sudden powerful
whumppphhhh
as it rushes up
onto shallow sloped shoreline s
receptive sandy beach s
tranquil tropic heart beat s
transcendent tidal seam
soaking sand fizzingly
all around my legs
and open spirit s being
in it s exhuberant friendly gesture
to greet embrace and kiss
my earthbound...
#beach
#earth
#memories
#sea
#sun
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SweetKittyCat5
Poem Published
3rd Aug 2024 5:22am
3rd Aug 2024 5:22am
Mmm..Giving Up That Soft Crazy Love
You kissed my tender lips, slightly trembling beneath yours
His voice I submitted my love, desires upon my skin shall gently pour
I inched back, preparing to flee
The silhouette of his soul upon earth’s pillow where his heart now tease
Gently he pulled me closer, my erratic heartbeats sinking in trepidation
Fallen stars, into my soothing waters stand with me among the thunder’s incarnations
How many moons, shall eclipse whispers from Heaven as Earth dance in...
His voice I submitted my love, desires upon my skin shall gently pour
I inched back, preparing to flee
The silhouette of his soul upon earth’s pillow where his heart now tease
Gently he pulled me closer, my erratic heartbeats sinking in trepidation
Fallen stars, into my soothing waters stand with me among the thunder’s incarnations
How many moons, shall eclipse whispers from Heaven as Earth dance in...
#love
#moon
#sun
#water
#passion
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AmyMMosier
Poem Published
19th Jul 2024 2:53am
19th Jul 2024 2:53am
July 11th, 1991
Time, as I felt it, stopped
As the Sun gave up its power and waned
But for an interval. I was lost –
Called away from the mundane.
Given like a vision from God –
I was shown one of absence
Contrary to a comfortable thought
But at the mercy of physics.
I am One with the Stars and Earth
And all Things of eternity;
That doubt of universal birth
Was overshadowed by gray reverie.
As the Sun gave up its power and waned
But for an interval. I was lost –
Called away from the mundane.
Given like a vision from God –
I was shown one of absence
Contrary to a comfortable thought
But at the mercy of physics.
I am One with the Stars and Earth
And all Things of eternity;
That doubt of universal birth
Was overshadowed by gray reverie.
#sun
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
18th Jul 2024 7:50pm
18th Jul 2024 7:50pm
The Sun
As we end the day and reveal the stars,
that one by one appear
i know another night has come,
revealing my fears
For in the black and endless stars, for which I run
i pray for the falling of the night, the rising of the sun
For in the night I see your face, your smile so like the sun
and in my heart I feel your warmth, then yet I have to run
Because the things to show my love, have all been done,
so I wonder through the night, waiting for the sun
And so I think I'll go out, wherever it may be
in my trouble...
that one by one appear
i know another night has come,
revealing my fears
For in the black and endless stars, for which I run
i pray for the falling of the night, the rising of the sun
For in the night I see your face, your smile so like the sun
and in my heart I feel your warmth, then yet I have to run
Because the things to show my love, have all been done,
so I wonder through the night, waiting for the sun
And so I think I'll go out, wherever it may be
in my trouble...
#emotions
#freedom
#love
#night
#sun
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
16th Jul 2024 12:04pm
16th Jul 2024 12:04pm
Sunny Day, Mango Mornings
Sunny Day Mango Mornings
Colors Orange, Yellow and Green
Will this make my day brighter?
Will it make me a better writer?
There's no place that can be better
When you're mind is in the clouds
Create an island oasis
Return to the basics
It's a great feeling when there's no hassles
Floating free, walk upon the shore
Give you & I things to make our lives better
My mango's are orange & yellow forever
Clarity is seen
Envisioned dreams
Escape within your own reality
Colors Orange, Yellow and Green
Will this make my day brighter?
Will it make me a better writer?
There's no place that can be better
When you're mind is in the clouds
Create an island oasis
Return to the basics
It's a great feeling when there's no hassles
Floating free, walk upon the shore
Give you & I things to make our lives better
My mango's are orange & yellow forever
Clarity is seen
Envisioned dreams
Escape within your own reality
#dreams
#escape
#happiness
#sun
#uplifting
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AmyMMosier
Poem Published
12th Jul 2024 1:09pm
12th Jul 2024 1:09pm
The treetop glimmers outside my window
The treetop glimmers outside my window
As light, dancing upon the leaflets -
Shimmies about in affable yellow.
My gaze can't help but be captivated
By light, pure and perfectly aglow.
In the wind, swaying charismatically -
Every leaf is twirled as a ballerina -
Playing with my fragile jealousy.
I think I hear an underlying viola -
Oh, light - would you dance with me?
As light, dancing upon the leaflets -
Shimmies about in affable yellow.
My gaze can't help but be captivated
By light, pure and perfectly aglow.
In the wind, swaying charismatically -
Every leaf is twirled as a ballerina -
Playing with my fragile jealousy.
I think I hear an underlying viola -
Oh, light - would you dance with me?
#sun
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PittinixDesigns
Poem Published
11th Jul 2024 11:32pm
11th Jul 2024 11:32pm
Is Time Really Moving?
Why does everybody believe that time is moving?
How much do we actually know about time?
The author has a new theory that time is standing still.
Situations, people, and things change or move,
But time remains the same; it never changes or moves.
Has anybody ever thought about this subject?
Time is an abstract thing; it cannot be perceived with the senses.
Nobody can prove the theory that time is moving.
We can see and hear physical objects moving.
Moreover, we can see and hear events taking place,
But we can only envisage time...
How much do we actually know about time?
The author has a new theory that time is standing still.
Situations, people, and things change or move,
But time remains the same; it never changes or moves.
Has anybody ever thought about this subject?
Time is an abstract thing; it cannot be perceived with the senses.
Nobody can prove the theory that time is moving.
We can see and hear physical objects moving.
Moreover, we can see and hear events taking place,
But we can only envisage time...
#earth
#science
#sun
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ExercisingDemons
Poem Published
9th Jul 2024 3:48pm
9th Jul 2024 3:48pm
There Is None
There is no sun for me today
Only clouds thick and gray
Shadows lost midst blanket shade
There is no sun for me today
There is no breeze to cool the world
Just dusty air, still, no swirls
Flowers die, the leaves lie still
No sun, nor wind to stroke the trees
or warm the hills
I do not sleep or walk or run
I dare not dream or have my fun
I will not eat or go to the lake
to take a plunge
I will sit in the dark missing
my only one
In an empty garden
Only clouds thick and gray
Shadows lost midst blanket shade
There is no sun for me today
There is no breeze to cool the world
Just dusty air, still, no swirls
Flowers die, the leaves lie still
No sun, nor wind to stroke the trees
or warm the hills
I do not sleep or walk or run
I dare not dream or have my fun
I will not eat or go to the lake
to take a plunge
I will sit in the dark missing
my only one
In an empty garden
#sun
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