Poems About the Sun Seeking Honest Critique
#sun
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
27th Dec 2024 2:25pm
27th Dec 2024 2:25pm
~some night of a traversing highway chaos
the sweltering december hotness sun
consumes gritty astringent skinnish salts
in enormous gulping hunger of a famine
vacuuming emptiness, a fuming depression
of a puckering in sizzling hot desert, rises in
a rotting stench of bled out moulted maroons
scattered as a modern streaked out flash art
sprinkled with the sweaty deltaic tidal waves
in craving wide open rafflesia blooms in scents
of a pickled inner vascular.. severed as tidbits
..screams of an unquenchable insane violence
in firing passion burns to the...
consumes gritty astringent skinnish salts
in enormous gulping hunger of a famine
vacuuming emptiness, a fuming depression
of a puckering in sizzling hot desert, rises in
a rotting stench of bled out moulted maroons
scattered as a modern streaked out flash art
sprinkled with the sweaty deltaic tidal waves
in craving wide open rafflesia blooms in scents
of a pickled inner vascular.. severed as tidbits
..screams of an unquenchable insane violence
in firing passion burns to the...
#love
#night
#rain
#sensual
#sun
94 reads
4 Comments
Trillium
Poem Published
8th Dec 2024 5:08pm
8th Dec 2024 5:08pm
Sunset over Lake Huron
Huron shores
West towards the sunset
Night after night
We watched
Some nights
Colours masked by heavy clouds
Other nights are spectacular
Every night a little different.
You can’t expect a sunset to look a particular way
You can’t control it
shape it.
Just take the time to enjoy it as it is.
Each one has its own beauty
if you’re willing to experience it
West towards the sunset
Night after night
We watched
Some nights
Colours masked by heavy clouds
Other nights are spectacular
Every night a little different.
You can’t expect a sunset to look a particular way
You can’t control it
shape it.
Just take the time to enjoy it as it is.
Each one has its own beauty
if you’re willing to experience it
#beauty
#nature
#sun
73 reads
3 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
23rd Nov 2024 11:02pm
23rd Nov 2024 11:02pm
In the Dead of the Night
Intro:
In the dead of night, the cradle rocks.
Echoes in the shadows, ticking clocks.
Tiny hands reach out for air.
Chaos reigns, curly hair everywhere.
Rhyme 1:
Under the moonlight, whispers grow,
silent secrets only shadows know.
From the cradle to the rocking chair,
curly hair is everywhere.
Chorus:
Rock the cradle, feel the storm,
in the darkness love takes form.
Curly hair, wild and free,
a symbol of our destiny.
Rhyme 2:
Midnight cries break the silence....
In the dead of night, the cradle rocks.
Echoes in the shadows, ticking clocks.
Tiny hands reach out for air.
Chaos reigns, curly hair everywhere.
Rhyme 1:
Under the moonlight, whispers grow,
silent secrets only shadows know.
From the cradle to the rocking chair,
curly hair is everywhere.
Chorus:
Rock the cradle, feel the storm,
in the darkness love takes form.
Curly hair, wild and free,
a symbol of our destiny.
Rhyme 2:
Midnight cries break the silence....
#dance
#funny
#lyrics
#music
#sun
56 reads
6 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
17th Nov 2024 9:02pm
17th Nov 2024 9:02pm
You're in control
Standing on a wave in time
Distant silhouettes run through my mind
Messengers through a cloudy space
Darkness reflects onto my face
Maybe one day the sun will reflect a new vision
Walking towards the light is my decision
A warm glow on my soul,
beauty through my eyes
A new dream each day,
thankful to see a new sunrise
Distant silhouettes run through my mind
Messengers through a cloudy space
Darkness reflects onto my face
Maybe one day the sun will reflect a new vision
Walking towards the light is my decision
A warm glow on my soul,
beauty through my eyes
A new dream each day,
thankful to see a new sunrise
#dark
#happiness
#memories
#sun
#uplifting
65 reads
6 Comments
Pinkdreams
Poem Published
19th Oct 2024 6:36am
19th Oct 2024 6:36am
F the Sun
Evil carcinogenic ball in the sky
I've a message for you: piss off and die
You promised to hide so we could have rain
yet on you blazed
bringing nothing but pain
Strut your radiant ass away and leave me alone
cool rainy days feel more like home
Your stupid solution
is to bring more pollution
well done i say
in the worst possible way
There's big trouble in the East
flooding and such
but would just one thunderstorm here
be asking too much?
In August I'm leaving
I know not where
but as long as...
I've a message for you: piss off and die
You promised to hide so we could have rain
yet on you blazed
bringing nothing but pain
Strut your radiant ass away and leave me alone
cool rainy days feel more like home
Your stupid solution
is to bring more pollution
well done i say
in the worst possible way
There's big trouble in the East
flooding and such
but would just one thunderstorm here
be asking too much?
In August I'm leaving
I know not where
but as long as...
#frustration
#rain
#sun
100 reads
8 Comments
DecipherMe
Poem Published
19th Oct 2024 1:05am
19th Oct 2024 1:05am
Breaking Lights
She's been through hell, and the hell chases her,
the way the light of the sun is chased from east to west.
No one sees a ray run or asks the first light of the break of day
if she needs to catch her breath.
She does it by herself.
At the height of the sun,
by the corners of her eyes, she stares at the edges of her orange-yellow-studded world.
There are no shadows.
She breathes a few minutes.
Another wave of shade creeps from under the horizon.
The light you protect, you won't let them cover it, huh?
...
the way the light of the sun is chased from east to west.
No one sees a ray run or asks the first light of the break of day
if she needs to catch her breath.
She does it by herself.
At the height of the sun,
by the corners of her eyes, she stares at the edges of her orange-yellow-studded world.
There are no shadows.
She breathes a few minutes.
Another wave of shade creeps from under the horizon.
The light you protect, you won't let them cover it, huh?
...
#anxiety
#motivational
#nature
#SelfDiscovery
#sun
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0 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
16th Oct 2024 1:43am
16th Oct 2024 1:43am
Valley of the Gods
Valley of the Gods
The fog forms a halo
Around majesty in rock form
Can’t pass through have to go around
Thorny path uneven and unnerving
Deep in blue canyon a waterfall
Narrow beauty moss on the walls
Mist dips down and rolls over
Rain falls pitter patter
Rising sun orange blaze
Go with the torrent ride the surge
Walk down the waterfall
Descend down time
A split in Mother Earth
Sliver of water so deep
Look up and see a small slice of heaven
Emerge on...
The fog forms a halo
Around majesty in rock form
Can’t pass through have to go around
Thorny path uneven and unnerving
Deep in blue canyon a waterfall
Narrow beauty moss on the walls
Mist dips down and rolls over
Rain falls pitter patter
Rising sun orange blaze
Go with the torrent ride the surge
Walk down the waterfall
Descend down time
A split in Mother Earth
Sliver of water so deep
Look up and see a small slice of heaven
Emerge on...
#heaven
#sun
#utopia
61 reads
2 Comments
MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
14th Oct 2024 00:14am
14th Oct 2024 00:14am
Sol
It's the hardest part of the sledge,
with little in between,
wielding on the wedge
splitting the evergreen.
It's solar power we devour
to burn for cozy nights
and solar flares by the hour
for Northern Light delights.
I feel the swing at my core
with every downward blow
knowing chlorophyll is making more
with wild stellar glow...
smashing those numberless atoms,
in fusion overload,
processed through globular stratums...
the laws of nature goad. ⚛️
with little in between,
wielding on the wedge
splitting the evergreen.
It's solar power we devour
to burn for cozy nights
and solar flares by the hour
for Northern Light delights.
I feel the swing at my core
with every downward blow
knowing chlorophyll is making more
with wild stellar glow...
smashing those numberless atoms,
in fusion overload,
processed through globular stratums...
the laws of nature goad. ⚛️
#sun
99 reads
6 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
13th Oct 2024 4:21pm
13th Oct 2024 4:21pm
THE NEED FOR PEACE
As another day comes over the horizon and it is here were, I sit down by the river of crystals waters, hearing it flows so calming to my brain 🧠 waves, as it quiets the very temple of my thoughts. WITH the deepness of the sound of running waters, sounding in the backdrop of my mind and eyes, seeing with each ripping wave. TO remain me again how much of what I see affects, the deepness of my thoughts and insight and imagination and dreams. For sure it's here I think of the peace and tranquility and peace, that lets me be able to share my thoughts with me myself and I, with the forest...
#evolution
#forest
#nature
#river
#sun
103 reads
2 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
9th Oct 2024 5:10am
9th Oct 2024 5:10am
Moon hasn’t slept for days
Moon hasn’t slept for days
Sun looks over at him and says what are you
Doing
It’s my turn you have to sleep
Moon is salty as a sailor says
I’ll stand and stare at the sun
Have craters you have sun spots
I’m a little satellite you are the Sun around me
Get up early moon isn’t watching me make
breakfast
I haven’t slept for days all I do is think about you
Sleeping awake on a 5 stack with syrup
And some toast and jam
You’re getting ready to be the Sun...
Sun looks over at him and says what are you
Doing
It’s my turn you have to sleep
Moon is salty as a sailor says
I’ll stand and stare at the sun
Have craters you have sun spots
I’m a little satellite you are the Sun around me
Get up early moon isn’t watching me make
breakfast
I haven’t slept for days all I do is think about you
Sleeping awake on a 5 stack with syrup
And some toast and jam
You’re getting ready to be the Sun...
#earth
#moon
#sun #universe
#sun #universe
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0 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
30th Sep 2024 8:47am
30th Sep 2024 8:47am
Shadows of Dying Worlds
Deep within the pitch-black heart
Entwined behind the weary gaze
In echoes of a world torn apart
In whispers of the fading days
Beneath the shadow of a dying sun
Where once it blazed with fiery might
The solar winds now chill and shun
As darkness grips the lengthening night
Pulsating oceans, cold and stark
Churn with the weight of ancient fears
While strangling shadows mark the arc
Of time that vanishes through the years
It lies in wait, in twilight's shroud
An embodiment of nature’s dread
As silence...
Entwined behind the weary gaze
In echoes of a world torn apart
In whispers of the fading days
Beneath the shadow of a dying sun
Where once it blazed with fiery might
The solar winds now chill and shun
As darkness grips the lengthening night
Pulsating oceans, cold and stark
Churn with the weight of ancient fears
While strangling shadows mark the arc
Of time that vanishes through the years
It lies in wait, in twilight's shroud
An embodiment of nature’s dread
As silence...
#dark
#morality
#sun #universe
#sun #universe
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0 Comments
MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
30th Sep 2024 4:49am
30th Sep 2024 4:49am
Hallowed Firmament
When I describe in glowing terms
September skies that I've adored,
I thought them heavens, best explored,
with what an aspiration affirms...
betokened so by cirrus white,
so thin adrift among the blue,
mingling with the contrail spew
long after jets are out of sight.
These things define that vast expanse
over a leafy sunset gold
to contrast with autumnal cold...
enough to switch from shorts to pants.
Then watch the hummingbirds alight,
just for a moment, on a twig;
thin adrift in a sky so...
September skies that I've adored,
I thought them heavens, best explored,
with what an aspiration affirms...
betokened so by cirrus white,
so thin adrift among the blue,
mingling with the contrail spew
long after jets are out of sight.
These things define that vast expanse
over a leafy sunset gold
to contrast with autumnal cold...
enough to switch from shorts to pants.
Then watch the hummingbirds alight,
just for a moment, on a twig;
thin adrift in a sky so...
#birds
#clouds
#sky #sun
#sky #sun
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6 Comments
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