Poems for and About Sons Seeking Honest Critique
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Poems for and about sons seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
And I wait (ramble stream of consciousness forth coming)
I know when we found the coins to scrape together
to put you on that flight you would
have the time of your life
the snippets of the man you will become
touching at the corners of your eyes
when you coached your sisters soccer team at 13
and even now when your walk through the yard
the little ones treat you like a rockstar
and they brag that
you
you with the smart mouth and foul language
you who we have seen naked and cold
and broken and scared
are their hero
and my daughters brag about you
being...
to put you on that flight you would
have the time of your life
the snippets of the man you will become
touching at the corners of your eyes
when you coached your sisters soccer team at 13
and even now when your walk through the yard
the little ones treat you like a rockstar
and they brag that
you
you with the smart mouth and foul language
you who we have seen naked and cold
and broken and scared
are their hero
and my daughters brag about you
being...
#childhood
#fatherhood
#son
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I Worry Boy
once we were warriors filled
with fierce pride
banging our fists to chest
we would shake with the need to bleed
or make bleed
we were men that knew the language of protection
we were men that knew the language of love
toward our family
that knew how to nurture
our hard curbed by their soft
but
warped by booze
violence turned inward
we directed hate at ourselves
letting it spill over our loved ones
and our pride
died
became a curse
cheap piss and beer breath ...
with fierce pride
banging our fists to chest
we would shake with the need to bleed
or make bleed
we were men that knew the language of protection
we were men that knew the language of love
toward our family
that knew how to nurture
our hard curbed by their soft
but
warped by booze
violence turned inward
we directed hate at ourselves
letting it spill over our loved ones
and our pride
died
became a curse
cheap piss and beer breath ...
#childhood
#memories
#parent #son
#parent #son
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Happy Born Day
Letter to my first
I unleashed you
into the world
with the snip of a natal chord
With tenacity we fell
in love at first sight
even then I knew this world
thru me was yours
Three played together
as I watched you
grow strong
from a feeble introduction
To hold your head high
looking up to me
a child-father
no prerequisite nor question
Seems I did the teaching
but truth is
I learned myself
in sacrifice thru you
Re-lived from first step
to remove training wheels ...
I unleashed you
into the world
with the snip of a natal chord
With tenacity we fell
in love at first sight
even then I knew this world
thru me was yours
Three played together
as I watched you
grow strong
from a feeble introduction
To hold your head high
looking up to me
a child-father
no prerequisite nor question
Seems I did the teaching
but truth is
I learned myself
in sacrifice thru you
Re-lived from first step
to remove training wheels ...
#children
#memories
#responsibility #son
#responsibility #son
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Please Tell Me That I Did Not Embarrass My Son In Any Way.
Malcom's mother finally woke up.
She saw David holding up a blanket.
Before asking, she touched herself.
Then, she discovered that she was naked.
She covered herself up with David's blanket.
She saw David holding up a blanket.
Before asking, she touched herself.
Then, she discovered that she was naked.
She covered herself up with David's blanket.
#fiction
#friendship
#mother
#sex
#son
169 reads
2 Comments
The Mother He Loved
Born and raised under her wings
Protection and care, has always been
Everything his mother said he believed
Mother encouraged him, she was often pleased
A few times, he would get himself into a jam
She would always solve it, lend him a hand
As he grew older, he had a successful career
Living across the country, he wasn't so near
One day he received a call, it was from his Aunt
He was told to come back home, she began to rant
She told him that his mother is hospitalized and she's very sick
He took the next flight out, losing his job was a...
Protection and care, has always been
Everything his mother said he believed
Mother encouraged him, she was often pleased
A few times, he would get himself into a jam
She would always solve it, lend him a hand
As he grew older, he had a successful career
Living across the country, he wasn't so near
One day he received a call, it was from his Aunt
He was told to come back home, she began to rant
She told him that his mother is hospitalized and she's very sick
He took the next flight out, losing his job was a...
#fate
#love
#mother
#rhyming
#son
134 reads
22 Comments
A Letter To My Fear

#son
101 reads
4 Comments
Father and his son, the wimp
The boy turned fifteen. His father bought him a shotgun. He taught his son how to load, clean and shoot the gun. He would say, "Kid you've got to stand up for yourself, always." He would make the boy shoot round after round, his shoulder would ache. He would rather read comics, go on his phone, and jerk off like any normal teenager. He didn't like going to the rifle range with his father. The place gave him the creeps.
One Saturday morning in June, his father said, "Get your rifle and get in the car, MOVE IT!" He did what he was told. He sat in the front seat...
One Saturday morning in June, his father said, "Get your rifle and get in the car, MOVE IT!" He did what he was told. He sat in the front seat...
#bullying
#father
#ShortStory #son
#ShortStory #son
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Hand and Eye
My little guy has got the hand and eye
See a shape and put your hands in place
To receive what I’m delivering
As it’s coming in…depth perception kicks in
Two points on a map and intersect where you should be
He sees the ball and anticipates where
And what direction
The passing wind can have an effect
You have to put that into the equation
Split second decisions between hand and eye
When you hawk that ball and hunt it down
It ends up positive with clapping all around
Next thing you know you helped...
See a shape and put your hands in place
To receive what I’m delivering
As it’s coming in…depth perception kicks in
Two points on a map and intersect where you should be
He sees the ball and anticipates where
And what direction
The passing wind can have an effect
You have to put that into the equation
Split second decisions between hand and eye
When you hawk that ball and hunt it down
It ends up positive with clapping all around
Next thing you know you helped...
#determination
#MyInspiration
#son #sports
#son #sports
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Father & Son
The boy hid under his bed when he would hear his father come into the house
A large, hairy, burly man, who has a problem with his hands
Almost every night he comes home drunk
The father would come into the boy's room, wake him up and begin taunting him
His dad would begin touching him inappropriately
He made sure that his boy would touch him back
The father would tell the boy that he's his favorite, even though he's an only child
The boy is kissed violently
He can taste the liquor his father's been drinking
If it's something the boy likes, he...
A large, hairy, burly man, who has a problem with his hands
Almost every night he comes home drunk
The father would come into the boy's room, wake him up and begin taunting him
His dad would begin touching him inappropriately
He made sure that his boy would touch him back
The father would tell the boy that he's his favorite, even though he's an only child
The boy is kissed violently
He can taste the liquor his father's been drinking
If it's something the boy likes, he...
#abuse
#alcohol
#DomesticViolence
#father
#son
94 reads
8 Comments
Glass Abortions (Cauldron Kill Series)

#dirty
#evil
#mother
#rejection
#son
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2 Comments
15 Billion
15 billion miles from Earth
My son sits and wonders what’s beyond the universe
A bunny hops into the grass and we laugh and giggle
I think my son can be an Astronaut for Ages
We stare at the sky sometimes I don’t know why
We watch 3 crows chase a bigger Hawk
We always appreciate the beauty of nature
Go in the back yard pitch baseballs in the net
As we do, me and you are like me,we are on a string
See bumble bees times two buzzing around us
So we throw the ball back and forth ...
My son sits and wonders what’s beyond the universe
A bunny hops into the grass and we laugh and giggle
I think my son can be an Astronaut for Ages
We stare at the sky sometimes I don’t know why
We watch 3 crows chase a bigger Hawk
We always appreciate the beauty of nature
Go in the back yard pitch baseballs in the net
As we do, me and you are like me,we are on a string
See bumble bees times two buzzing around us
So we throw the ball back and forth ...
#astronomy
#father
#memories
#son
#universe
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Mi Noh Uo Nobaddi Nuttn
(Patois)
Di ooman an ar tiifin son tiif mi $12,000 outa mi ouse.
Soh shi can tek dat am piay di lite bill weh shi sey mi uo.
Shi a squatta, an shi a live laka jangcro inna di uol man yawd.
Shi love freenis tumuch, an dat a goh mek ar tun woklis.
Di wickid ooman noh piay noh rent fi bout fuo ier.
Shi a uze tiifin lite inna di plies caw shi noh wah fi piay noh bill.
Di bad-smellin ooman uo $52,800 fi wata bill weh shi run up.
Mi nah shuo ar noh receit caw mi noh uo nobaddi nuttn.
Di ooman an ar tiifin son tiif mi $12,000 outa mi ouse.
Soh shi can tek dat am piay di lite bill weh shi sey mi uo.
Shi a squatta, an shi a live laka jangcro inna di uol man yawd.
Shi love freenis tumuch, an dat a goh mek ar tun woklis.
Di wickid ooman noh piay noh rent fi bout fuo ier.
Shi a uze tiifin lite inna di plies caw shi noh wah fi piay noh bill.
Di bad-smellin ooman uo $52,800 fi wata bill weh shi run up.
Mi nah shuo ar noh receit caw mi noh uo nobaddi nuttn.
#home
#money
#son #women
#son #women
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DU Poetry : Poems for and About Sons Seeking Honest Critique