Rhyming Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#rhyming
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
21st Nov 2024 3:20am
21st Nov 2024 3:20am
Clockwork Bard
Line by line and writ by writ
Creativity from rotating gears?
Forged thoughts together knit
Man or machine they fear
No such thing as auto masters
Nay no spark from the soul
Sure it writes faster and faster
But my mastery is mine to control
Challenge automaton work
But words here are of flesh and bone
Homunculi writers are stuck with a dirk
Blood flows here as creativity is enthroned
No punch cards or binary brains
To say otherwise is a misguided frame
Where art thou relentless disdain? ...
Creativity from rotating gears?
Forged thoughts together knit
Man or machine they fear
No such thing as auto masters
Nay no spark from the soul
Sure it writes faster and faster
But my mastery is mine to control
Challenge automaton work
But words here are of flesh and bone
Homunculi writers are stuck with a dirk
Blood flows here as creativity is enthroned
No punch cards or binary brains
To say otherwise is a misguided frame
Where art thou relentless disdain? ...
#meditation
#rhyming
#SelfReflection
#technology
#WritingPoetry
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LunasChild8
Poem Published
20th Nov 2024 1:18pm
20th Nov 2024 1:18pm
Pet Peeve
Dontcha wanna know my pet peeve?
Use it to get back at me
Irritate me just right; ferment my blood into aged wine
Dontcha wanna know what are my dreams?
Burn them all up right at the seams
Hijacking my sight; playing dirty games in my mind.
Use it to get back at me
Irritate me just right; ferment my blood into aged wine
Dontcha wanna know what are my dreams?
Burn them all up right at the seams
Hijacking my sight; playing dirty games in my mind.
#frustration
#rhyming
37 reads
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
20th Nov 2024 10:18am
20th Nov 2024 10:18am
Feuer mit Schwertern
Das Feuer tanzt auf blankem Stahl
Ein Funkensprung im finstren Saal
Die Klinge singt, ein Lied so wild
Im Flammenschein wird Blut erfüllt
For the English speakers:
The fire dances on the blade
A spark ignites where shadows fade
The sword it sings, a song of strife
In fiery glow, it drinks of life
Ein Funkensprung im finstren Saal
Die Klinge singt, ein Lied so wild
Im Flammenschein wird Blut erfüllt
For the English speakers:
The fire dances on the blade
A spark ignites where shadows fade
The sword it sings, a song of strife
In fiery glow, it drinks of life
#fire
#metaphor
#narrative
#rhyming
#strength
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LunasChild8
Poem Published
19th Nov 2024 1:37am
19th Nov 2024 1:37am
Queen of my Heart
Blessed are the flowers that bloom in your hair
Fed by the warmness from your heart full of care
The moonlight beams down, and your soul shines
The stars are twinkling, and I know this is a sign.
An otherworldly gift has been presented to me
A beautiful expression of heavenly art
This precious gift has set my soul free
A Princess; the Queen of my heart.
Fed by the warmness from your heart full of care
The moonlight beams down, and your soul shines
The stars are twinkling, and I know this is a sign.
An otherworldly gift has been presented to me
A beautiful expression of heavenly art
This precious gift has set my soul free
A Princess; the Queen of my heart.
#admiration
#beauty
#love #rhyming
#love #rhyming
82 reads
4 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
18th Nov 2024 6:56am
18th Nov 2024 6:56am
Respite Under Arches
O house of splendor, temple divine
With vaults that in gilded radiance shine!
Thy arches soar, as prayers take flight
To pierce the veil of the eternal night
Thy pillars, twelve, as prophets of old
Proclaim the truths in stories told
Each stone a witness, each wall a creed
To Him who hath met our every need
The rose-hued glass, in splendor bright
Transforms the sun to heavenly light
Its beams cascade in hallowed streams
As angels sing of sacred dreams
The sacred font, in marble hewn
Doth whisper of the coming...
With vaults that in gilded radiance shine!
Thy arches soar, as prayers take flight
To pierce the veil of the eternal night
Thy pillars, twelve, as prophets of old
Proclaim the truths in stories told
Each stone a witness, each wall a creed
To Him who hath met our every need
The rose-hued glass, in splendor bright
Transforms the sun to heavenly light
Its beams cascade in hallowed streams
As angels sing of sacred dreams
The sacred font, in marble hewn
Doth whisper of the coming...
#Christian
#God
#religion
#rhyming
#spiritual
55 reads
2 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
17th Nov 2024 11:47am
17th Nov 2024 11:47am
Lucifer Loves You, Always!
One day my parents were about to go out for a drive
Satan appeared and said, "one of you must die"
He performed some witchery with his hands
Said something foreign that my parents didn't understand
That night mother saw something as she undressed
Lucifer's mark was burned upon her breast
The next day father was relaxing in the tub
A creature flew in the window, named Beelzebub
Satan arrives in many forms
Not just a man with red devil horns
The creature brought in a recipe for maple walnut fudge
The...
Satan appeared and said, "one of you must die"
He performed some witchery with his hands
Said something foreign that my parents didn't understand
That night mother saw something as she undressed
Lucifer's mark was burned upon her breast
The next day father was relaxing in the tub
A creature flew in the window, named Beelzebub
Satan arrives in many forms
Not just a man with red devil horns
The creature brought in a recipe for maple walnut fudge
The...
#dark
#devil
#evil
#rhyming
#ShortStory
49 reads
8 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
17th Nov 2024 11:40am
17th Nov 2024 11:40am
Refuse, Resist
Gov't officials see a bright future ahead
The poor will no longer exist
Drive these people out of their homes
Increase their rent, please try & resist
Isolate them like you once did in Harlem
Ghettos without prison walls
If they revolt, cops smash their heads
Or spray mace into their eyeballs
Breakdown the walls that kept us segregated
No time like the present time
Take out the ruling class
No one in life should get a free pass
The poor will no longer exist
Drive these people out of their homes
Increase their rent, please try & resist
Isolate them like you once did in Harlem
Ghettos without prison walls
If they revolt, cops smash their heads
Or spray mace into their eyeballs
Breakdown the walls that kept us segregated
No time like the present time
Take out the ruling class
No one in life should get a free pass
#corruption
#politics
#rebellion
#rhyming
#TruthOfLife
46 reads
4 Comments
refinemind
SUNLITE
SUNLITE
Poem Published
17th Nov 2024 9:55am
17th Nov 2024 9:55am
LITE's oUT{sUN}
#rhyming
31 reads
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wallyroo92
Poem Published
17th Nov 2024 6:00am
17th Nov 2024 6:00am
In Lieu of a Kiss
#funny
#rhyming
47 reads
2 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
14th Nov 2024 8:00pm
14th Nov 2024 8:00pm
Sentenced with a cold
I'm not angry, I just grow tired,
waking days clogged with mucus
I'm not happy, I’m just fed up,
passing nights roll to no focus
Every breath, I test death
Keeping my problems upon my chest
Sleep used to be an escape,
now a house of congestion
Being awake use to be ok,
also having problems with digestion
Sitting here a broken man,
OTC drugs not providing a solution
Not tasting or smelling life's pleasures,
Hacking up greenish, yellow pollution
I know this cold needs to run it's course, ...
waking days clogged with mucus
I'm not happy, I’m just fed up,
passing nights roll to no focus
Every breath, I test death
Keeping my problems upon my chest
Sleep used to be an escape,
now a house of congestion
Being awake use to be ok,
also having problems with digestion
Sitting here a broken man,
OTC drugs not providing a solution
Not tasting or smelling life's pleasures,
Hacking up greenish, yellow pollution
I know this cold needs to run it's course, ...
#illness
#LifeStruggles
#rhyming
53 reads
10 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
13th Nov 2024 11:19am
13th Nov 2024 11:19am
Wet, Drunk & Miserable
He went to the bar
got into a fight
drank lots of Yeg
was up half the night
He was so wasted
he could hardly talk
barely made it to the bed
kept stumbling, couldn't walk
Fell right asleep
out like a light
along came the dream
of mountains and streams
It was so peaceful or so it seemed
the sound of dripping awakened him
he could smell the stench of human pee
He could feel the warmth between his legs
he pissed his pants and it seeped all over the bed
he jumped and ran...
got into a fight
drank lots of Yeg
was up half the night
He was so wasted
he could hardly talk
barely made it to the bed
kept stumbling, couldn't walk
Fell right asleep
out like a light
along came the dream
of mountains and streams
It was so peaceful or so it seemed
the sound of dripping awakened him
he could smell the stench of human pee
He could feel the warmth between his legs
he pissed his pants and it seeped all over the bed
he jumped and ran...
#addiction
#alcohol
#funny #rhyming
#funny #rhyming
47 reads
2 Comments
LunasChild8
Poem Published
13th Nov 2024 3:13am
13th Nov 2024 3:13am
Stand Up
I’m sick of this bullshit that most people use as fuel
I’d rather be called crazy than played as a fool
What wouldn’t I give if it meant freedom?
Most people wouldn’t walk this path, but I’ve got my reasons.
Stand up and feel the fire
Reach out to ignite my heart’s desires
An organ I once thought dead and cold
Now I watch the events unfold.
Stand up; get my ass into gear
I’ll face life head-on and vanquish all my fears
I value actions over words
The unspoken language that can’t be heard.
I’m sick of this bullshit...
I’d rather be called crazy than played as a fool
What wouldn’t I give if it meant freedom?
Most people wouldn’t walk this path, but I’ve got my reasons.
Stand up and feel the fire
Reach out to ignite my heart’s desires
An organ I once thought dead and cold
Now I watch the events unfold.
Stand up; get my ass into gear
I’ll face life head-on and vanquish all my fears
I value actions over words
The unspoken language that can’t be heard.
I’m sick of this bullshit...
#determination
#LifeStruggles
#loneliness
#myself
#rhyming
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