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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
11th Jan 2022 11:19am
11th Jan 2022 11:19am
Plagued By Puppets
Plagued By Puppets"
Puppet people, with puppet thoughts/
Puppet police force, and puppet courts
The puppets taught, by puppet schools/
The puppet teachers, with puppet rules
The puppet lives, of which puppets talk/
Through puppet eyes, the puppets gawk
The government lies, the puppets bought/
The puppets comply, when government ought
If puppets don't like, these puppets report/
Yet in public these puppets, not doing **** all
What puppets were taught, was go get the Jab/
And if you end up a corpse, no Vaccine for that
These...
Puppet people, with puppet thoughts/
Puppet police force, and puppet courts
The puppets taught, by puppet schools/
The puppet teachers, with puppet rules
The puppet lives, of which puppets talk/
Through puppet eyes, the puppets gawk
The government lies, the puppets bought/
The puppets comply, when government ought
If puppets don't like, these puppets report/
Yet in public these puppets, not doing **** all
What puppets were taught, was go get the Jab/
And if you end up a corpse, no Vaccine for that
These...
#LifeStruggles
#LifeAsAWriter
#WritingPoetry
#rap
#pandemic
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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
11th Jan 2022 11:15am
11th Jan 2022 11:15am
Find It Hard To Digest
Find It Hard To Digest"
Simple people with simple minds, can often lead simple lives/
Yet me I'm a little more complex, so it ain't all black & white
I seem to find it hard to digest, what they speak show & write/
So unless the truth it cannot nest, in an open mind like mine
I cannot rest or settle for less, if I close my eyes I'll go blind/
And if I sit even to sh*t, I know that I am wasting my time
As taking time is not something, I have enough time to partake/
When it's already taken fighting Satan, the late nights & heartache ...
Simple people with simple minds, can often lead simple lives/
Yet me I'm a little more complex, so it ain't all black & white
I seem to find it hard to digest, what they speak show & write/
So unless the truth it cannot nest, in an open mind like mine
I cannot rest or settle for less, if I close my eyes I'll go blind/
And if I sit even to sh*t, I know that I am wasting my time
As taking time is not something, I have enough time to partake/
When it's already taken fighting Satan, the late nights & heartache ...
#LifeAsAWriter
#WritingPoetry
#PowerOfWords
#rap
#SelfDiscovery
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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
9th Jan 2022 12:48pm
9th Jan 2022 12:48pm
My Spiritual War With The Fallen
My Spiritual War With The Fallen"
I threaten their reality, and that scares their fascade/
So they lie and they slander, with any given chance
This society has conditioned, these people to be fake/
So they hate on my existance, and all which I create
A mix of fear and admiration, in the most cowardice ways/
Unenlightened, they're frightened, yet choose to act brave
They've been kept in an illusion, as they're evil on purpose/
So they suffer confusion, and then get bit by the Serpent
They've perfected a personality, of which they are not/ ...
I threaten their reality, and that scares their fascade/
So they lie and they slander, with any given chance
This society has conditioned, these people to be fake/
So they hate on my existance, and all which I create
A mix of fear and admiration, in the most cowardice ways/
Unenlightened, they're frightened, yet choose to act brave
They've been kept in an illusion, as they're evil on purpose/
So they suffer confusion, and then get bit by the Serpent
They've perfected a personality, of which they are not/ ...
#dark
#spiritual
#ShortStory
#WritingPoetry
#rap
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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
8th Jan 2022 11:49am
8th Jan 2022 11:49am
The Devil Within
The Devil Within"
A tormented lost soul, nobody knew of the evil within/
All alone out in the cold, they would never let him in
Hoping that he would fold, so not to publish their sins/
His soul had been sold, so I guess the devil would win
Scratching at his skin, as if to make the hurt disappear/
Only to hurt himself further, and for the fear to reappear
In the mirror he see's Satan, but society just see's him as lost/
He knew their lives would be forsaken, like Jesus on the cross
Life had taken him to a crossroads, four choices to choose/ ...
A tormented lost soul, nobody knew of the evil within/
All alone out in the cold, they would never let him in
Hoping that he would fold, so not to publish their sins/
His soul had been sold, so I guess the devil would win
Scratching at his skin, as if to make the hurt disappear/
Only to hurt himself further, and for the fear to reappear
In the mirror he see's Satan, but society just see's him as lost/
He knew their lives would be forsaken, like Jesus on the cross
Life had taken him to a crossroads, four choices to choose/ ...
#dark
#death
#LifeAsAWriter
#rap
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
584 reads
2 Comments
MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
7th Jan 2022 11:38am
7th Jan 2022 11:38am
The Basic Brains Of Broken Britain
The Basic Brains Of Broken Britain"
Give em double jabs, to fill em with heavy metals/
They'll queue at the pumps, & then fight for the petrol
The West has gone East, like the Beast is in Bethnal/
Like my eyes cannot see, that these people are Special
Being a child of the light, I won't side with the devil/
But if the other side want fight, I will crush what is pebble
If the first two do not kill em, they'll go get the tripple/
It's so hard not to laugh, when it's like I've been tickled
All their mind's have been pickled, like some onion...
Give em double jabs, to fill em with heavy metals/
They'll queue at the pumps, & then fight for the petrol
The West has gone East, like the Beast is in Bethnal/
Like my eyes cannot see, that these people are Special
Being a child of the light, I won't side with the devil/
But if the other side want fight, I will crush what is pebble
If the first two do not kill em, they'll go get the tripple/
It's so hard not to laugh, when it's like I've been tickled
All their mind's have been pickled, like some onion...
#LifeStruggles
#funny
#WritingPoetry
#rap
#pandemic
423 reads
2 Comments
MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
7th Jan 2022 11:32am
7th Jan 2022 11:32am
Tupac Used To Rap For Me
Tupac Used To Rap For Me"
I took to black culture, cause there was no dad for me/
Everyday he got more colder, Tupac used to rap for me
Had me feeling like a soldierrr, was something I could be/
I used to pray to Jehovah, hoping he'd get back to me
My family hate me bad, I think they have it in for me/
Yet I'm very good at rap, so I don't need your sympathy
I'm supposed to be a dad, but my child I do not see/
I reach for a pen & pad, so I can smile through the misery
Thinking what they did to me, & what they did was wrong/
They...
I took to black culture, cause there was no dad for me/
Everyday he got more colder, Tupac used to rap for me
Had me feeling like a soldierrr, was something I could be/
I used to pray to Jehovah, hoping he'd get back to me
My family hate me bad, I think they have it in for me/
Yet I'm very good at rap, so I don't need your sympathy
I'm supposed to be a dad, but my child I do not see/
I reach for a pen & pad, so I can smile through the misery
Thinking what they did to me, & what they did was wrong/
They...
#dark
#God
#LifeAsAWriter
#WritingPoetry
#rap
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1 Comment
MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
6th Jan 2022 11:16am
6th Jan 2022 11:16am
Bael (Demon #1)
Bael" (Demon #1)
I am Bael from the Goetia, the Egyptian God Osris in disguise/
Escaping from Solomon's bindings, no Humanity shows in my eyes
My Sigil the image of a stick figure, extended crosses in both hands/
My humour is formal religion, designed by angels to entrap all man
Successfully drawing thousands, of angelic followers into my lair/
As a silent attack upon the angels, and three heads is how I appear
As I am Bael the king of the east, the ruler to sixty-six legions/
Emerging from an inverted crown, I am the king of all demons
Many...
I am Bael from the Goetia, the Egyptian God Osris in disguise/
Escaping from Solomon's bindings, no Humanity shows in my eyes
My Sigil the image of a stick figure, extended crosses in both hands/
My humour is formal religion, designed by angels to entrap all man
Successfully drawing thousands, of angelic followers into my lair/
As a silent attack upon the angels, and three heads is how I appear
As I am Bael the king of the east, the ruler to sixty-six legions/
Emerging from an inverted crown, I am the king of all demons
Many...
#dark
#death
#God
#spiritual
#rap
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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
6th Jan 2022 11:13am
6th Jan 2022 11:13am
Lilith
Lilith"
I am the first human woman created, by God to be the wife of Adam/
Yet when commanded, I refused to bow to him, so with Lucifer I then fled Eden
I was later replaced by Eve by God, as I was now a godlike powerful demon/
And for this God casted me in to the ninth circle, along with Lucifer for treason
Hundreds of thousands of years later, Amen Hotep opened a gateway to Hell/
Leaving the portal opened, I made my escape, & built an army to destroy the world
Even the second prince of Hell, Leviathan, does not have the power I possess/
They...
I am the first human woman created, by God to be the wife of Adam/
Yet when commanded, I refused to bow to him, so with Lucifer I then fled Eden
I was later replaced by Eve by God, as I was now a godlike powerful demon/
And for this God casted me in to the ninth circle, along with Lucifer for treason
Hundreds of thousands of years later, Amen Hotep opened a gateway to Hell/
Leaving the portal opened, I made my escape, & built an army to destroy the world
Even the second prince of Hell, Leviathan, does not have the power I possess/
They...
#dark
#death
#God
#WritingPoetry
#rap
525 reads
1 Comment
MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
5th Jan 2022 11:36am
5th Jan 2022 11:36am
Stay Down
Stay Down"
Dear God, it's been a while, I don't know what to say/
I need to open up my heart, but if I do, they'll lock me away
But how can they lock me away, for spitting the misery I feel in my heart/
When the ones that made me betrayed me, when I was just a baby in the dark
Fiending for a father figure, and crying for his mother/
Wishing they'd love him, but they wished they had another
So it hurts me to say this, I've been a cursed seed since day one/
I guess I weren't a product of love, I was just what come after a night of fun
With...
Dear God, it's been a while, I don't know what to say/
I need to open up my heart, but if I do, they'll lock me away
But how can they lock me away, for spitting the misery I feel in my heart/
When the ones that made me betrayed me, when I was just a baby in the dark
Fiending for a father figure, and crying for his mother/
Wishing they'd love him, but they wished they had another
So it hurts me to say this, I've been a cursed seed since day one/
I guess I weren't a product of love, I was just what come after a night of fun
With...
#confessional
#LifeAsAWriter
#WritingPoetry
#art
#rap
732 reads
4 Comments
MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
5th Jan 2022 11:33am
5th Jan 2022 11:33am
Bars From Behind Bars
Bars From Behind Bars"
All I ever wanted was a Father, to love & hold me tight/
Now all I have is a cell, where it's so lonely & cold at night
Eyes holding back the tears, so my peers don't think that I'm weak/
So many years I've spent looking answers, so many questions to a past that runs so deep
Using poetry as my release, to escape my bleak surroundings/
From the abuse I received since a youth, to under the roof of the prison landings
Deeply regretting the texts I sent, cause sending 'em sent me 2 HMP/
Like my life weren't already a...
All I ever wanted was a Father, to love & hold me tight/
Now all I have is a cell, where it's so lonely & cold at night
Eyes holding back the tears, so my peers don't think that I'm weak/
So many years I've spent looking answers, so many questions to a past that runs so deep
Using poetry as my release, to escape my bleak surroundings/
From the abuse I received since a youth, to under the roof of the prison landings
Deeply regretting the texts I sent, cause sending 'em sent me 2 HMP/
Like my life weren't already a...
#LifeAsAWriter
#WritingPoetry
#PowerOfWords #rap
#PowerOfWords #rap
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MrDunnePoetry
Poem Published
4th Jan 2022 3:51pm
4th Jan 2022 3:51pm
Narcissistic Love
Narcissistic Love"
They tend to be hyper sexual, always looking someone new to seduce/
So they will abuse you, run to another, and try hide the awful truth
Even with Internet and phone evidence, they'll just get angry and lie/
And if confronted it'll all be your fault, for the problems in their mind
They'll cry and declare their love, when there is no love, only contempt/
Then look into your eyes and tell you lies, on how their night was spent
They'll give non-friends their respect, and show you the ultimate disdain
Humiliation, betrayal and...
They tend to be hyper sexual, always looking someone new to seduce/
So they will abuse you, run to another, and try hide the awful truth
Even with Internet and phone evidence, they'll just get angry and lie/
And if confronted it'll all be your fault, for the problems in their mind
They'll cry and declare their love, when there is no love, only contempt/
Then look into your eyes and tell you lies, on how their night was spent
They'll give non-friends their respect, and show you the ultimate disdain
Humiliation, betrayal and...
#love
#relationships
#abuse
#vanity
#rap
587 reads
1 Comment
silent_lotus
Poem Published
2nd Nov 2021 3:19pm
2nd Nov 2021 3:19pm
the Sanctuary of the Sun
#music
#travel
#rap #culture
#rap #culture
627 reads
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