Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Now that the long night is over
Now that the long night is over
We had a long sleep
Now my Father
Brought the morning for us
First thing in the morning
Now it is time to say good morning to each other
It is finally a beautiful day
Outside
We just got up now
We are ready to enjoy this beautiful sunny day
That our Father gave to us
We are lucky to have a beautiful morning
With lots of sun
We are glad that there is no sign of rain
Also we are getting lots of vitamin d
This morning
We had a long sleep
Now my Father
Brought the morning for us
First thing in the morning
Now it is time to say good morning to each other
It is finally a beautiful day
Outside
We just got up now
We are ready to enjoy this beautiful sunny day
That our Father gave to us
We are lucky to have a beautiful morning
With lots of sun
We are glad that there is no sign of rain
Also we are getting lots of vitamin d
This morning
#confusion
#denial
#greed
#heartbroken
#sadness
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Lost Love
She was the best part of my day
Your banner flashing across my screen
What a giddy rush
Like opening my first Christmas presents
You’ve cannibalized my thoughts
These neurons fire only for you
Encapsulating your beauty and charm
In those special moments we shared
Perfectly preserved and timeless like a pristine fossil
Life is dull without your brightness,
Cascading over me like a warm blanket
The daily monotonous minutia is mind numbing
Your memory breaks the routine if only briefly
The memories...
Your banner flashing across my screen
What a giddy rush
Like opening my first Christmas presents
You’ve cannibalized my thoughts
These neurons fire only for you
Encapsulating your beauty and charm
In those special moments we shared
Perfectly preserved and timeless like a pristine fossil
Life is dull without your brightness,
Cascading over me like a warm blanket
The daily monotonous minutia is mind numbing
Your memory breaks the routine if only briefly
The memories...
#heartbroken
#IMissYou
#love
#sadness
#UnrequitedLove
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Backwoods Love
Loving you was harder then it seemed.
Up at night, due to broken dreams.
Puppet Master, you loved pulling strings.
When all you had to do was just believe.
We had a future, I handed you the keys.
Country living, just like you asked to be.
I was your king, and you were my queen.
But that Wile E Coyote, would always get in between.
On my knees, begging for you to see.
But you and God had other plans unfortunately.
Up at night, due to broken dreams.
Puppet Master, you loved pulling strings.
When all you had to do was just believe.
We had a future, I handed you the keys.
Country living, just like you asked to be.
I was your king, and you were my queen.
But that Wile E Coyote, would always get in between.
On my knees, begging for you to see.
But you and God had other plans unfortunately.
#breakup
#conflict
#heartbroken
#love
#relationships
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melancholy girls
sadness regrets the day
her light shine but on one saw
her brittle glory fade
one moment at a time
melancholy cry her dreams shattered, died
silently she held it within
she told no one of her brokenheart
sorrow utter grief
she talked about her problems with no relief
her feelings stir deep within
she linger in the past and couldn't resolve
days of dark blue
shadowed their days
sisters in solemn's stead
their combined tears, made a river of lost hope
my days are sometimes like this
I don't...
her light shine but on one saw
her brittle glory fade
one moment at a time
melancholy cry her dreams shattered, died
silently she held it within
she told no one of her brokenheart
sorrow utter grief
she talked about her problems with no relief
her feelings stir deep within
she linger in the past and couldn't resolve
days of dark blue
shadowed their days
sisters in solemn's stead
their combined tears, made a river of lost hope
my days are sometimes like this
I don't...
#heartbroken
#sadness
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Breaking the silence
Now I can't believe
That you aren't near me
It's so easy to deceive
My thoughts that you don't see
Want you to feel my pain
Come and touch my hands
Would you hear it again?
Time measured through the sands
Sometimes, you don't understand
What you mean to me
Try to enter my mind
Maybe, you could see
Start to open your eyes
I fall into my dreams forever
Every night I dream of you
We can rest our fears together
Breaking the silence that surrounds you
That you aren't near me
It's so easy to deceive
My thoughts that you don't see
Want you to feel my pain
Come and touch my hands
Would you hear it again?
Time measured through the sands
Sometimes, you don't understand
What you mean to me
Try to enter my mind
Maybe, you could see
Start to open your eyes
I fall into my dreams forever
Every night I dream of you
We can rest our fears together
Breaking the silence that surrounds you
#dreams
#heartbroken
#relationships #UnrequitedLove
#relationships #UnrequitedLove
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Miss me?
Miss me?
I miss myself too
I miss myself too
#confessional
#heartbroken
#IMissYou
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Confined Solitude
I ramble on ways where fear and memories are eternal
Where my existence day after day becomes more painful
Then so, I live to meet you in my path someday
I don't possess the desire of being in heaven
Earthly feelings will take me to the insanity down below
One more time I seek in the depths of melancholy
And it's like the weight of my sadness will be arrested onto my feet
I will be left with this hurt and the death pain whispers
And if I can't forget your face I will die without even noticing
Sweet and enlightened death, end this...
Where my existence day after day becomes more painful
Then so, I live to meet you in my path someday
I don't possess the desire of being in heaven
Earthly feelings will take me to the insanity down below
One more time I seek in the depths of melancholy
And it's like the weight of my sadness will be arrested onto my feet
I will be left with this hurt and the death pain whispers
And if I can't forget your face I will die without even noticing
Sweet and enlightened death, end this...
#dark
#heartbroken
#love
#memories
#sadness
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With u gone
With u gone seems like a nightmare. Feelings of worthlessness and lonely ness to much to bare. Feels like I am running out of air. Walls closing in so heavy and cold. The pain of u gone is to much to bare. The days drag on like an endless parade. Depression holding me down leaving me gasping for air. My light is dieing in side but can't see it from the outside. Wishing u was here. 2 years needs to already be here. So life can go on and I can be happy again.
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#sadness #separation
#sadness #separation
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The love of God
people
The love of God
Is pure
That he is giving
To you every
Single that
People I am telling you
The truth
I never lied to you
People
Because lies won't get me
Anywhere
Also people
I don't want to lose you
I also need you to be
A part of my life
Every single day
The love of God
Is pure
That he is giving
To you every
Single that
People I am telling you
The truth
I never lied to you
People
Because lies won't get me
Anywhere
Also people
I don't want to lose you
I also need you to be
A part of my life
Every single day
#anger
#dark
#grief
#heartbroken
#shame
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I Cry… Hide My Tears
I cry in the shower to hide my tears,
The water masking the weight of my fears.
So much pain in my heart, burying love within,
Choked by the sorrow, where hope once had been.
Failure lurks around every bend,
Dreams collapsing, too broken to mend.
Faith once sturdy now fades, turns thin,
A ghost of the strength I held deep within.
A man adrift, no compass, no guide,
Wrestling shadows, a storm inside.
Control has vanished, I’m sinking fast,
Grasping for anchors that never last.
I cry to my Heavenly Father above, ...
The water masking the weight of my fears.
So much pain in my heart, burying love within,
Choked by the sorrow, where hope once had been.
Failure lurks around every bend,
Dreams collapsing, too broken to mend.
Faith once sturdy now fades, turns thin,
A ghost of the strength I held deep within.
A man adrift, no compass, no guide,
Wrestling shadows, a storm inside.
Control has vanished, I’m sinking fast,
Grasping for anchors that never last.
I cry to my Heavenly Father above, ...
#heartbroken
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I’m Sleepwalking with Love of You
I’m sleepwalking with love of you,
A dream-bound path the night winds drew.
Each step I take is quiet and slow,
Through a dark world where whispers flow.
Your voice in my head echoes for days,
Guides me through these twilight ways.
The moon is shy, the stars hang low,
But your light lingers, all I know.
The air is thick with what we were,
A fleeting touch, a breath, a blur.
Yet even in this drifting trance,
My heart remembers every glance.
I chase you where the veils are thin,
Through doors that neither lose...
A dream-bound path the night winds drew.
Each step I take is quiet and slow,
Through a dark world where whispers flow.
Your voice in my head echoes for days,
Guides me through these twilight ways.
The moon is shy, the stars hang low,
But your light lingers, all I know.
The air is thick with what we were,
A fleeting touch, a breath, a blur.
Yet even in this drifting trance,
My heart remembers every glance.
I chase you where the veils are thin,
Through doors that neither lose...
#heartbroken
#love
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“A Heart That Can’t Let Go”
My heart is strong, they say,
But it falters when you’re far away.
For you are the rhythm, the steady beat,
The warmth that makes its pulse complete.
You’re the love my soul was made to find,
The thread that weaves through heart and mind.
Without you near, the world turns gray,
The brightest sun feels dim today.
My soul tie, my love, my reason to breathe,
To lose you is more than my heart can grieve.
It’s like tearing the stars from the night,
Or breaking the dawn from the morning light.
Each memory of you is etched...
But it falters when you’re far away.
For you are the rhythm, the steady beat,
The warmth that makes its pulse complete.
You’re the love my soul was made to find,
The thread that weaves through heart and mind.
Without you near, the world turns gray,
The brightest sun feels dim today.
My soul tie, my love, my reason to breathe,
To lose you is more than my heart can grieve.
It’s like tearing the stars from the night,
Or breaking the dawn from the morning light.
Each memory of you is etched...
#heartbroken
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