Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Red Light
Girls chance, dark nights
Men glance, red lights
Walk by, car stop
Eye spy, knee drop
Cheap thrill, money seek
Bitter pill, turn cheek
Nights out, morning comes
Doubts shout, pimp runs
Men glance, red lights
Walk by, car stop
Eye spy, knee drop
Cheap thrill, money seek
Bitter pill, turn cheek
Nights out, morning comes
Doubts shout, pimp runs
#despair
#heartbroken
#sadness
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Heartache on aisle 5
I wake with sudden ambition, a deep sadness stretch's across my face and I take A moment of reflection
my ghost of past lost visits me once again, A bitter-sweet reunion of the face I wished to lay beside.
for A seemingly unrelated dream can shift to the most serious of moments and it is the heart that seems locked in A eternal nightmare.
with eyes as sharp as glass she stares into my soul and lights it asunder with every second I am forced to remember her everything.
how is it that after this long I refuse to let go even when I have begged for...
my ghost of past lost visits me once again, A bitter-sweet reunion of the face I wished to lay beside.
for A seemingly unrelated dream can shift to the most serious of moments and it is the heart that seems locked in A eternal nightmare.
with eyes as sharp as glass she stares into my soul and lights it asunder with every second I am forced to remember her everything.
how is it that after this long I refuse to let go even when I have begged for...
#dreams
#FirstLove
#heartbroken
#nightmares
#SelfReflection
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Soul Tired
I think I’ll find a needle in a haystack
Before I find a soul mate
It’s exhausting to keep the faith
My confidence is slim
My expression is grim
I feel out of place in a world that beats me down to shame
I know love is not a race but even a marathon eventually ends.
Before I find a soul mate
It’s exhausting to keep the faith
My confidence is slim
My expression is grim
I feel out of place in a world that beats me down to shame
I know love is not a race but even a marathon eventually ends.
#disappointment
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#sadness
#shame
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The questions that always pops in my mind
The questions that always pops in my mind
Why are my friends jealous of me
Is that because I am a poet?
I was chosen by God to be his poet
Many years ago
Also I am a Christian
Since birth
And I have the feeling that
You don't like people that are Christian
Also you are not a Christian friend
I can't force you to be a Christian
Also you no beliefs
And you don't care for God
I must tell you that it was God
That made you my friend
And if it wasn't for God
You would not be here
I am telling you the truth friend ...
Why are my friends jealous of me
Is that because I am a poet?
I was chosen by God to be his poet
Many years ago
Also I am a Christian
Since birth
And I have the feeling that
You don't like people that are Christian
Also you are not a Christian friend
I can't force you to be a Christian
Also you no beliefs
And you don't care for God
I must tell you that it was God
That made you my friend
And if it wasn't for God
You would not be here
I am telling you the truth friend ...
#despair
#fear
#hate
#heartbroken
#regret
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you could have had me
Do you remember when I said
you could have had me?
But what you told me that you wanted
Was someone prettier than me
So you selected all the face cards from the royal deck
But you were ultimately blinded by what was plain to see
The wild card was the Joker disguised in the garb of a clown
A smooth tongued jester who stole your innocence so deceitfully
A master at sleight-of-hand who tricked the Queen of Hearts
Into giving away her pot of gold underhandedly for free
All the bets were placed, your chips down on the table
The game was called...
you could have had me?
But what you told me that you wanted
Was someone prettier than me
So you selected all the face cards from the royal deck
But you were ultimately blinded by what was plain to see
The wild card was the Joker disguised in the garb of a clown
A smooth tongued jester who stole your innocence so deceitfully
A master at sleight-of-hand who tricked the Queen of Hearts
Into giving away her pot of gold underhandedly for free
All the bets were placed, your chips down on the table
The game was called...
#heartbroken
#love
#regret
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Life goes on still
Life goes on still
Every single
Day
That I wake up
Early every single day
Father I am so happy.
With you
Because now
You finally ended.
The Winter
And brought.
Me once again
The Spring
Today here today
And also, you gave me.
The beautiful sunny
Weather
I am looking forward.
To go out
First thing in the
Morning
Every single
Day
That I wake up
Early every single day
Father I am so happy.
With you
Because now
You finally ended.
The Winter
And brought.
Me once again
The Spring
Today here today
And also, you gave me.
The beautiful sunny
Weather
I am looking forward.
To go out
First thing in the
Morning
#anxiety
#dark
#denial
#hate
#heartbroken
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Thank you
Thank you
for the moments that lit my sky
Thank you
for making my days fly by
You somehow had that touch
that something that meant so much
All it showed me.
Thank you
for bringing the best out of me
Thank you
for showing me what I couldn't see
Thank you
for making me breathe a while
Thank you
each moment that made me smile
Even though you must go
Il'l support it, all you do
and though you'll fade away
your memory will always stay
All it took out of me.
A short...
for the moments that lit my sky
Thank you
for making my days fly by
You somehow had that touch
that something that meant so much
All it showed me.
Thank you
for bringing the best out of me
Thank you
for showing me what I couldn't see
Thank you
for making me breathe a while
Thank you
each moment that made me smile
Even though you must go
Il'l support it, all you do
and though you'll fade away
your memory will always stay
All it took out of me.
A short...
#heartbroken
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42 years of life you have given me Lord
42 years of life you have given me Lord
And
I am grateful for
The gift of life
That is so precious to me
My tolerance and respect is built around people
On understanding and empathy
There is another world for me to embrace
I always question what are they saying
I can do so many things
I need to have a desire to do it Lord
It doesn’t matter where I came from
The ability to triumph begins with me always
I like to say that risks always pays of
I learn what to do or not to do
I see your face in me
I talk to children...
And
I am grateful for
The gift of life
That is so precious to me
My tolerance and respect is built around people
On understanding and empathy
There is another world for me to embrace
I always question what are they saying
I can do so many things
I need to have a desire to do it Lord
It doesn’t matter where I came from
The ability to triumph begins with me always
I like to say that risks always pays of
I learn what to do or not to do
I see your face in me
I talk to children...
#greed
#grief
#hate
#heartbroken
#sadness
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Crumbling to dust
I feel so empty
without you
like a carcass floating
in memories
tossed n flung
to an island desolate
pecked at by vultures of agony
bit by bit...piece by piece
without you
like a carcass floating
in memories
tossed n flung
to an island desolate
pecked at by vultures of agony
bit by bit...piece by piece
#breakup
#despair
#heartbroken #love
#heartbroken #love
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Rumination
I miss you
So much
Till my chest starts hurting
Left gasping for air
I miss seeing your name
In the list of people
That watch my story
Every time I hope it’s there
Every time I’m disappointed
I see your name
Everywhere
I don’t know why
A constant reminder
From the universe
That I can’t have you
I miss the days when
I would wake up to your texts
We would talk and talk and talk
Like an endless ping pong match
Spilling over into the next days
You broke my heart
I don’t hate you...
So much
Till my chest starts hurting
Left gasping for air
I miss seeing your name
In the list of people
That watch my story
Every time I hope it’s there
Every time I’m disappointed
I see your name
Everywhere
I don’t know why
A constant reminder
From the universe
That I can’t have you
I miss the days when
I would wake up to your texts
We would talk and talk and talk
Like an endless ping pong match
Spilling over into the next days
You broke my heart
I don’t hate you...
#apathy
#despair
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#loneliness
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WHAT IS TRUE LOVE in
The eclipse of the moon is a eclipse of the sun, as it hides a change is gonna come as the same is true. FOR love is our happiness and support and encouragement, and respect with honesty and truth and trust. For sure we are still human beings, just looking for the betterment of our lives and life. YET with a positive level of substance in our relationship, that they are still by our side in the good times and the bad times. As in love with respect and supporting us together as one. That with a real honest commitment and consistency, and real communications between us. AS twin flames one...
#conflict
#deception
#heartbroken
#lies
#TimeHeals
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He Said If You Enjoyed It, It's Not Rape
He said if you enjoyed it, it's not rape,
as if laughter could drown the echoes of pain,
as if joy could erase the scars left behind,
turning trauma into shadows, whispering blame.
He said if you enjoyed it, don’t be dramatic,
a hollow laugh that masked the cruel truth,
but countless souls wear this heavy disguise,
fighting for light, struggling for proof.
He said if you enjoyed it, be grateful instead,
as if suffering were something we should embrace,
but every smile that hides a heartache
is a mask worn...
as if laughter could drown the echoes of pain,
as if joy could erase the scars left behind,
turning trauma into shadows, whispering blame.
He said if you enjoyed it, don’t be dramatic,
a hollow laugh that masked the cruel truth,
but countless souls wear this heavy disguise,
fighting for light, struggling for proof.
He said if you enjoyed it, be grateful instead,
as if suffering were something we should embrace,
but every smile that hides a heartache
is a mask worn...
#anger
#anxiety
#apathy
#fear
#heartbroken
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