Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#heartbroken
heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
I hate surprises
Oh, don't give me
Alice's intentions
and a queen of hearts
attitude.
In Wonderland,
with a good smile,
even cats disappear.
In wonder
with a good
disappear.
Cat's land smile.
Alice's intentions
and a queen of hearts
attitude.
In Wonderland,
with a good smile,
even cats disappear.
In wonder
with a good
disappear.
Cat's land smile.
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#hurt
38 reads
6 Comments
Mother
Mother,
I feel,
like
an
earthquake
got buried
in
your
womb.
Smothering,
positivity
and
the love I miss,
crumbling tomb......
I forgot
how to love,
I forgot
how to feel,
I have
one emotion
and is
negativity
I'm a
narcissist,
I even
hurt a kid
who hurt
me
with her words.
She was only
a puppy at 12
I feel bad
and I feel mad
but its not enough
to assume.....
that I can change,
walk past ...
I feel,
like
an
earthquake
got buried
in
your
womb.
Smothering,
positivity
and
the love I miss,
crumbling tomb......
I forgot
how to love,
I forgot
how to feel,
I have
one emotion
and is
negativity
I'm a
narcissist,
I even
hurt a kid
who hurt
me
with her words.
She was only
a puppy at 12
I feel bad
and I feel mad
but its not enough
to assume.....
that I can change,
walk past ...
#anxiety
#confusion
#dark
#grief
#heartbroken
31 reads
0 Comments
Goodbye Dad
Goodbye Dad
I am heart broken
That I have lost you
So fast
I can't stop crying
Yes I could never believe
That you had to part so soon
But deep down
I could not stand to see you
Suffer every day
Battling you disease
I tried to make you
Comfortable
Also I had to be strong for you
And it is very hard to do
Yes you lost you battle
And at the same time
It was hard to see you leave
This earth
But at the same time
I must understand that
You are in a better place them me
You are living a new...
I am heart broken
That I have lost you
So fast
I can't stop crying
Yes I could never believe
That you had to part so soon
But deep down
I could not stand to see you
Suffer every day
Battling you disease
I tried to make you
Comfortable
Also I had to be strong for you
And it is very hard to do
Yes you lost you battle
And at the same time
It was hard to see you leave
This earth
But at the same time
I must understand that
You are in a better place them me
You are living a new...
#despair
#disappointment
#grief
#heartbroken
#shame
22 reads
0 Comments
How I Feel
Its been sorrowful to the point,
I cry without wet salty tears,
Feelings do but don't appoint,
as erased are my life's fears.
I'm so stuck in its gears.
I cry without wet salty tears,
Feelings do but don't appoint,
as erased are my life's fears.
I'm so stuck in its gears.
#despair
#emptiness
#heartbroken #loneliness
#heartbroken #loneliness
42 reads
2 Comments
Cosmic Tide
Like a tsunami, an origami of emotions
tears through my chest.
Crest crashing down on my heart,
creating a black hole.
Scrolling through porcelain dreams,
just to flail in collapsed nightmares.
Staring into the abyss
with cuckoo eyes.
Crying as I drown in the whirlpool,
unable to escape your betrayal.
tears through my chest.
Crest crashing down on my heart,
creating a black hole.
Scrolling through porcelain dreams,
just to flail in collapsed nightmares.
Staring into the abyss
with cuckoo eyes.
Crying as I drown in the whirlpool,
unable to escape your betrayal.
#heartbroken
#sadness
#WritingPoetry
19 reads
12 Comments
~You are my Golden Spring..
https://youtu.be/6xlMbWc52VI?feature=shared
1.
you bring over this aching
soul .. those very memories
of that youngly budding in
metallic copperish gleams..
the very first sight, in our
rendezvous
of love..
in this eventual eve .. that’s
in some bearing of a seeded
petrichor.. of a rain to be.. you
come and go through my heart
.. leaving just the wetting
tears
why is this...
1.
you bring over this aching
soul .. those very memories
of that youngly budding in
metallic copperish gleams..
the very first sight, in our
rendezvous
of love..
in this eventual eve .. that’s
in some bearing of a seeded
petrichor.. of a rain to be.. you
come and go through my heart
.. leaving just the wetting
tears
why is this...
#heartbroken
#love
#lyrics #ValentinesDay
#lyrics #ValentinesDay
105 reads
6 Comments
Reach in Within (Its Settled)
![restricted poem](/images/extremecontent.jpg)
#despair
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#rejection
#sadness
42 reads
0 Comments
painting the moment
the doors slams
.you are gone
.
the air falls to
the floor defeated
and the roses on
the table can no
longer laugh
.you are gone
.
the air falls to
the floor defeated
and the roses on
the table can no
longer laugh
#heartbroken
72 reads
3 Comments
Fall in Love; At Your Own Detriment
They say love’s a river; soft and wide...
A tender tide; a gentle guide
But heed me well; O foolish heart;
For love will tear your world apart
It starts with whispers; sweet and light...
A fevered dream; a stolen night
You build your castle; stone by stone...
Yet wake to find you’ve wept alone
Their words like silk; their touch like fire...
You drink the lie; consumed by desire
You trade your will; you bend; you break...
And still; you give; though much they take
They hold you close; they make you whole...
Then...
A tender tide; a gentle guide
But heed me well; O foolish heart;
For love will tear your world apart
It starts with whispers; sweet and light...
A fevered dream; a stolen night
You build your castle; stone by stone...
Yet wake to find you’ve wept alone
Their words like silk; their touch like fire...
You drink the lie; consumed by desire
You trade your will; you bend; you break...
And still; you give; though much they take
They hold you close; they make you whole...
Then...
#breakup
#FallingInLove
#heartbroken
91 reads
1 Comment
a poets dilemma
..what do you do
when all the
sunsets die
when all the
sunsets die
#heartbroken
82 reads
16 Comments
Our Commitment
The sensation of her fingertips
Gently touching my hardened face
The taste of her tender lips
Memories I can't erase
Soft touch all over my skin
Her body I to explored
Her passion burned from within
As her key opened my hearts door
So many moments that we shared
Over time our love deeply grew
Emotional boundaries that we dared
My deepest secrets only she knew
We tried new things together
Expanding experiences from our past
Forging our relationship to last forever
Everything about us was meant to last
...
Gently touching my hardened face
The taste of her tender lips
Memories I can't erase
Soft touch all over my skin
Her body I to explored
Her passion burned from within
As her key opened my hearts door
So many moments that we shared
Over time our love deeply grew
Emotional boundaries that we dared
My deepest secrets only she knew
We tried new things together
Expanding experiences from our past
Forging our relationship to last forever
Everything about us was meant to last
...
#heartbroken
#loneliness
64 reads
0 Comments
It Is What It Is
What’s my next move?
I’m scared to dip my toe,
Petrified of every step,
Afraid of what I’ll never know.
But it’s necessary,
I can’t stay in your shadow,
There’s more to life than what you gave,
I need to find it, to let go.
My heart hurts, whether you see or not,
But let’s not dwell in all the ugly,
I won’t point fingers, or play the violin,
No, I owe no one an explanation.
If they ask, I’ll simply say—
It is what it is, and nothing more,
No excuses needed, not...
I’m scared to dip my toe,
Petrified of every step,
Afraid of what I’ll never know.
But it’s necessary,
I can’t stay in your shadow,
There’s more to life than what you gave,
I need to find it, to let go.
My heart hurts, whether you see or not,
But let’s not dwell in all the ugly,
I won’t point fingers, or play the violin,
No, I owe no one an explanation.
If they ask, I’ll simply say—
It is what it is, and nothing more,
No excuses needed, not...
#breakup
#emotions
#heartbroken
#hurt
#separation
79 reads
0 Comments
DU Poetry : Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems