Poems About Family Seeking Honest Critique
#family
Poems about family seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
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day we married, it was at the registry office
and your mum was a bit cutting
about me not wearing a tie, but then you didn’t either,
and about that she said nothing
and your mum was a bit cutting
about me not wearing a tie, but then you didn’t either,
and about that she said nothing
#family
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Nuclear Family
Have you tested your nuclear family today?
You may need to
There's been a nation wide falling out amongst this group
I wouldn't get to close
You may catch what they already have
Once contaminated,
Like so many American families
You'll never leave your home again
You may need to
There's been a nation wide falling out amongst this group
I wouldn't get to close
You may catch what they already have
Once contaminated,
Like so many American families
You'll never leave your home again
#environment
#family
#FeelingTrapped #home
#FeelingTrapped #home
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8 Comments
She's Not A Baby Girl Anymore
As far back as even
I could remember,
Molly was just a baby
girl and Dad would
do nothing bad to her.
But that was before
she got older and Dad
took one look at her
naked which made him
want to hump her hard.
I could remember,
Molly was just a baby
girl and Dad would
do nothing bad to her.
But that was before
she got older and Dad
took one look at her
naked which made him
want to hump her hard.
#dialogue
#family
#fiction
#FreeVerse
#sex
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Shocked At The Sight Of Her Mother
Holly became shocked
at the sight of her mother
naked and getting
probed from behind by her kid
brother Toby and his rod.
at the sight of her mother
naked and getting
probed from behind by her kid
brother Toby and his rod.
#family
#fiction
#home
#sex
#tanka
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Honest. I Really Didn't Know Who He Was.
Jill's miracle to
find the one man
to lose her virginity
changed into sheer
embarrassment for
she chose her dad.
find the one man
to lose her virginity
changed into sheer
embarrassment for
she chose her dad.
#family
#fiction
#FreeVerse
#ignorance
#sex
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2 Comments
~the syneresis moon
his eyes are in a fixated
long stare at mine..
in a unbearably delicate
holding of so much
tears and words
he wants to
cry out
& say..
yet he’s here
in a determined
stagnant stare
shines his
the ever iron clad
pitch black coal
eyes.. only that
now the syneresing
irises are in a separating…
… as pulpy famine greys
with the inner broken
yet the somehow running
& holding patterns
of a crinkly petallous
sepia blooms..
fading out
to a distant ...
long stare at mine..
in a unbearably delicate
holding of so much
tears and words
he wants to
cry out
& say..
yet he’s here
in a determined
stagnant stare
shines his
the ever iron clad
pitch black coal
eyes.. only that
now the syneresing
irises are in a separating…
… as pulpy famine greys
with the inner broken
yet the somehow running
& holding patterns
of a crinkly petallous
sepia blooms..
fading out
to a distant ...
#family
#illness
#love
#moon
#support
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10 Comments
Yes! That's It! Do It Now!
Quick!
You got
to shoot that
rod off and get
it out of me! Mom
and Dad would be home soon
and I know that they would not
be pleased to see me naked and
letting my stepbrother hump me hard
on their own bed! Yes! That's it! Do it now!
You got
to shoot that
rod off and get
it out of me! Mom
and Dad would be home soon
and I know that they would not
be pleased to see me naked and
letting my stepbrother hump me hard
on their own bed! Yes! That's it! Do it now!
#dialogue
#family
#fiction
#home
#sex
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It will drive you insane
My sister & I are chained to a steel bedpost
Every few hours my mother comes in and beats me with a fire poker
She then sends one of her boyfriends to kiss my sister and hit her with his belt
They've often told my sister & I that they love us
Once we get out of here, we'll get our revenge
I'll wait until there sleeping
I'll use that same poker and beat their brains in until there unconscious
Nothing smells like human brains
A thick, sweet smell
It will drive you insane
Every few hours my mother comes in and beats me with a fire poker
She then sends one of her boyfriends to kiss my sister and hit her with his belt
They've often told my sister & I that they love us
Once we get out of here, we'll get our revenge
I'll wait until there sleeping
I'll use that same poker and beat their brains in until there unconscious
Nothing smells like human brains
A thick, sweet smell
It will drive you insane
#dark
#family
#horror
#revenge
#violence
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Great Day
She had a great day
She had a great day
She didn’t have to stay
My sister has a black spot
The thing we wish we ain’t got
Hers is in her head
Ours is what we truly dread
She had a great day
Told her she didn’t have to stay
She had a great day
She didn’t have to stay
The dread of our own span
And she can’t stand strong
It was her party day and
She can’t play…
Even on her Day…Her own Day
She had a great day
Told her she didn’t have to stay
She had a really great day ...
She had a great day
She didn’t have to stay
My sister has a black spot
The thing we wish we ain’t got
Hers is in her head
Ours is what we truly dread
She had a great day
Told her she didn’t have to stay
She had a great day
She didn’t have to stay
The dread of our own span
And she can’t stand strong
It was her party day and
She can’t play…
Even on her Day…Her own Day
She had a great day
Told her she didn’t have to stay
She had a really great day ...
#cancer
#family
#love #sister
#love #sister
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Unconscious Pleasure
Verse
I’m still not old enough to go inside
And I remember waiting by the door
Smoking a pink lollipop
Every time we drive by
I don’t remember when it changed
From reaching for the clouds
To crying in the rain
Pre-chorus
Everyone thinks you’re a narcissist
A sinkhole straight into the abyss
Chorus
Her head is still bleeding
The doors are still locked
You never know when to stop
It’s just another accident
They’ll never guess what happened
And you’ll never feel anything but sweet satisfaction...
I’m still not old enough to go inside
And I remember waiting by the door
Smoking a pink lollipop
Every time we drive by
I don’t remember when it changed
From reaching for the clouds
To crying in the rain
Pre-chorus
Everyone thinks you’re a narcissist
A sinkhole straight into the abyss
Chorus
Her head is still bleeding
The doors are still locked
You never know when to stop
It’s just another accident
They’ll never guess what happened
And you’ll never feel anything but sweet satisfaction...
#abuse
#family
#fear
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A Lullaby in January or A Portrait of Sisterhood
I’m in first grade and the bus drops me off at the bottom of our steep driveway. Jamie waits for me at the top. She has forgotten her house key in her locker at school.
There is ice and snow on the ground, and it will be dark soon. She holds my hand to walk through a patch of woods to the neighbor’s house to use their phone to call Papa.
III
It’s brown powder with tap water sitting in a plastic cap. I don’t know what I expected, but I guess not that. I thought poison would look more alchemic, like a simmering cauldron of black ink.
Jamie...
There is ice and snow on the ground, and it will be dark soon. She holds my hand to walk through a patch of woods to the neighbor’s house to use their phone to call Papa.
III
It’s brown powder with tap water sitting in a plastic cap. I don’t know what I expected, but I guess not that. I thought poison would look more alchemic, like a simmering cauldron of black ink.
Jamie...
#addiction
#DomesticViolence
#drugs
#family
#sister
122 reads
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Why Does She Always Do This To Me?
Kay
walked in
and became
shocked at the sight
of steady boyfriend
Mike naked and humping
her mother Juliet on
the living room sofa before
Kay went into her bedroom and said
"Why does she always do this to me? Why?"
walked in
and became
shocked at the sight
of steady boyfriend
Mike naked and humping
her mother Juliet on
the living room sofa before
Kay went into her bedroom and said
"Why does she always do this to me? Why?"
#corruption
#family
#fiction
#home
#sex
109 reads
2 Comments
DU Poetry : Poems About Family Seeking Honest Critique