Poems About Family Seeking Honest Critique
#family
Poems about family seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Tale of the hare (For Northern_Soul)
I often think of you
the hare burrowed
comfortably inside
my left ribcage,
rising up, stoking
fires in ivory glades,
carving ripples
in blood instead
of water and
fresh lakes,
a beacon as
to why some
still carry
on here.
the hare burrowed
comfortably inside
my left ribcage,
rising up, stoking
fires in ivory glades,
carving ripples
in blood instead
of water and
fresh lakes,
a beacon as
to why some
still carry
on here.
#admiration
#family
#LifeAsAWriter #respect
#LifeAsAWriter #respect
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He wants your attention
Little boy left for hardly 10 minutes
The sitter had gone to the store for some cigarettes and soda
When she returned she saw the fire engines in front of the house
She saw the smoke & flames
She found out that the little boy she was babysitting had lit his little brother's crib on fire
The baby was burned to death
He used the matches she had left on the table
He had heard that the only child gets more attention from the parents
With more love & extra dessert
He was only looking out for number one
The sitter had gone to the store for some cigarettes and soda
When she returned she saw the fire engines in front of the house
She saw the smoke & flames
She found out that the little boy she was babysitting had lit his little brother's crib on fire
The baby was burned to death
He used the matches she had left on the table
He had heard that the only child gets more attention from the parents
With more love & extra dessert
He was only looking out for number one
#children
#family
#fire
#ignorance
#ShortStory
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Could You Please Knock Before Coming In Here?
"Could you please knock before coming in here?" was
what Jane said to her daughter Rachel who caught her
naked and letting some guy hump her in the
master bedroom before going to tell her dad.
David barged in on his wife and her lover
and ordered her to get dressed and out of his house
because he had enough of her cheating on
him with other guys even in front of Rachel.
what Jane said to her daughter Rachel who caught her
naked and letting some guy hump her in the
master bedroom before going to tell her dad.
David barged in on his wife and her lover
and ordered her to get dressed and out of his house
because he had enough of her cheating on
him with other guys even in front of Rachel.
#betrayal
#family
#fiction
#home
#sex
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So I Move On
#abuse
#family
#memories #mother
#memories #mother
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Gobble up payback!
You disgust me. I loathe you.
You never thought you'd
see me again. We both knew
you'd never touch me again.
You can't move your arms.
You can't scream for help.
Does that remind you of
what you used to do to me?
The last time...
Do you remember what
disgusting part of you
you shoved in my mouth?
I'll never forget that...
and you'll never forget this!
You will eat SHIT and live!
At least another month they say.
I've had to live years with
what you and others did to me!
And I...
You never thought you'd
see me again. We both knew
you'd never touch me again.
You can't move your arms.
You can't scream for help.
Does that remind you of
what you used to do to me?
The last time...
Do you remember what
disgusting part of you
you shoved in my mouth?
I'll never forget that...
and you'll never forget this!
You will eat SHIT and live!
At least another month they say.
I've had to live years with
what you and others did to me!
And I...
#childhood
#evil
#family
#food
#horror
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Choose your favorite dumpster
Forget the funeral
Place the body in a dumpster
Saves you money
I chose the dumpsters behind Old Navy & Michael's
Most of their garbage is fabrics, soft materials and other plush & cozy things
I want my family member to have a relaxing stay inside one of these dumpsters
I'm always thinking of everyone but myself
You won't have to see all those relatives that you hate
You won't have to fake being upset
Let the public sanitation engineers worry about it
You've got it hard enough
Besides, who needs all that strenuous bullshit ...
Place the body in a dumpster
Saves you money
I chose the dumpsters behind Old Navy & Michael's
Most of their garbage is fabrics, soft materials and other plush & cozy things
I want my family member to have a relaxing stay inside one of these dumpsters
I'm always thinking of everyone but myself
You won't have to see all those relatives that you hate
You won't have to fake being upset
Let the public sanitation engineers worry about it
You've got it hard enough
Besides, who needs all that strenuous bullshit ...
#death
#family
#funeral #satirical
#funeral #satirical
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Such a great blow for a day job
The dude at the counter said that he had gotten the job
He was to go downstairs and meet the boss, get his apron and get briefed on the rules and regulations of the restaurant
He went downstairs to meet his boss
He walked to the threshold of the door and knocked gently
The boss looked up from the desk and told him to come in and sit down
He asked him how bad he wanted the job
He told him that he really likes the place and he thought that he could really...
The boss cut him off and asked him what he can do to get the job
He didn't know what he...
He was to go downstairs and meet the boss, get his apron and get briefed on the rules and regulations of the restaurant
He went downstairs to meet his boss
He walked to the threshold of the door and knocked gently
The boss looked up from the desk and told him to come in and sit down
He asked him how bad he wanted the job
He told him that he really likes the place and he thought that he could really...
The boss cut him off and asked him what he can do to get the job
He didn't know what he...
#anxiety
#family
#fiction
#job
#manipulation
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Cannibalism
Cannibalism...
Don't try this at home!
Especially if there is...
questionable hygiene...
and don't eat Uncle Mark!
But when you do cook...
always wash the fowl and foul!
Make enough of everyone...
Uncle Mark loves leftovers!
Mom won't be eating tonight...
she's just so stuffed!
I'll tell you why - after dinner!
Don't try this at home!
Especially if there is...
questionable hygiene...
and don't eat Uncle Mark!
But when you do cook...
always wash the fowl and foul!
Make enough of everyone...
Uncle Mark loves leftovers!
Mom won't be eating tonight...
she's just so stuffed!
I'll tell you why - after dinner!
#dark
#death
#family #food
#family #food
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Love is…
An obligation carved across
the leaves of stone, genetic book
of life, sometimes diluted by a loss
of love given by those supposed to look
to your development, give care.
I can’t say my genetic book will close.
I still receive its meanings now, for those
I’ve long since disavowed, would soak
in time, indifference. We don’t deserve
but neither are we unworthy of love.
It glows in darkness like a bellied stove,
its heat sometimes a secret thing.
the leaves of stone, genetic book
of life, sometimes diluted by a loss
of love given by those supposed to look
to your development, give care.
I can’t say my genetic book will close.
I still receive its meanings now, for those
I’ve long since disavowed, would soak
in time, indifference. We don’t deserve
but neither are we unworthy of love.
It glows in darkness like a bellied stove,
its heat sometimes a secret thing.
#aging
#family
#love #memories
#love #memories
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Olaf And A Possible Relative
Hey, Anna! Come
here and quick!
I found my lost
grandfather!
here and quick!
I found my lost
grandfather!
#dialogue
#family
#fiction
#FreeVerse
#funny
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Devotional Radicals
Little Kenny Dewitt was barely 5 years old when he found out by his parents that his heart was wicked
His parents were religious fanatics, who read the good book each and every hour
They isolated little Harry from the rest of the world
His father worked on the farm producing milk & meat to sell in town
His mother was a stay at home mom, strict and overbearing
Many of the locals didn't even know Harry Sack existed
His parents taught him that in order to be faithful to the lord, you must do what we say or want
Harry was given chores from...
His parents were religious fanatics, who read the good book each and every hour
They isolated little Harry from the rest of the world
His father worked on the farm producing milk & meat to sell in town
His mother was a stay at home mom, strict and overbearing
Many of the locals didn't even know Harry Sack existed
His parents taught him that in order to be faithful to the lord, you must do what we say or want
Harry was given chores from...
#children
#family
#memories
#religion
#violence
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Got Conned Into Performing In A Movie
Jill
told Mom
and Dad she
was going to
California
for spring break. The truth is
she got conned by Kate into
performing naked in a porn
movie with her. I ought to know this
because someone mailed a copy of it.
told Mom
and Dad she
was going to
California
for spring break. The truth is
she got conned by Kate into
performing naked in a porn
movie with her. I ought to know this
because someone mailed a copy of it.
#corruption
#dialogue
#family
#fiction
#sex
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DU Poetry : Poems About Family Seeking Honest Critique