Poems About Family Seeking Honest Critique
#family
Poems about family seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Nan’s Funeral
It was comforting to know
she spent her final days
in a place as lavish
and warm as this,
the care home off the motorway
and opposite a graveyard where
I went with her once to place flowers
across her second husband’s grave.
This lavish estate of houses and
a huge facility of rooms around
a central hexagon arranged,
alarms and nurses all about.
We went here on a hot March day,
like summer in truth, and filled
with a scent of cut grass, the warmth
a little much in our funeral clothes,
but oh so...
she spent her final days
in a place as lavish
and warm as this,
the care home off the motorway
and opposite a graveyard where
I went with her once to place flowers
across her second husband’s grave.
This lavish estate of houses and
a huge facility of rooms around
a central hexagon arranged,
alarms and nurses all about.
We went here on a hot March day,
like summer in truth, and filled
with a scent of cut grass, the warmth
a little much in our funeral clothes,
but oh so...
#death
#family
#funeral #love
#funeral #love
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You See Hustler's Latest Issue?
Dad has really gone nuts.
What makes you say that, Mindy Sue?
You see Hustler's latest issue?
Oh, yes. With Winona as its centerfold.
Now you know why I said that.
What makes you say that, Mindy Sue?
You see Hustler's latest issue?
Oh, yes. With Winona as its centerfold.
Now you know why I said that.
#dialogue
#family
#fiction
#friendship
#sex
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Sorrow's Well
In the spring of . . . my own winter,
sadness filled my empty cup,
overflowed upon the floor,
I watched in disbelief as rivers
of my tears ran out the door.
Is this river, yet unnamed, a river, raging,
never tamed,
reserved for mothers tears that fell.
Do all our tears reach Sorrow’s Well.
The twilight of my pretty days
has slipped away,
receding light of, hopeful, dreaming,
laughter’s love,
they chased away the,
warming coo of Mary’s dove.
I reach for you across the room,
you’re tired, hiding, ...
sadness filled my empty cup,
overflowed upon the floor,
I watched in disbelief as rivers
of my tears ran out the door.
Is this river, yet unnamed, a river, raging,
never tamed,
reserved for mothers tears that fell.
Do all our tears reach Sorrow’s Well.
The twilight of my pretty days
has slipped away,
receding light of, hopeful, dreaming,
laughter’s love,
they chased away the,
warming coo of Mary’s dove.
I reach for you across the room,
you’re tired, hiding, ...
#addiction
#family
#heroin #relationships
#heroin #relationships
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Mom Saw Megan Still Sleeping
Mom saw Megan still sleeping.
But Mom also saw Megan's panties gone.
Brian violated his sleeping sister.
But Mom also saw Megan's panties gone.
Brian violated his sleeping sister.
#corruption
#family
#fiction
#home
#sex
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Wouldn't you do the same thing?
If I was going to do it, I would do it right
I would take some guys wife and kids
Do the whole torture and mutilation thing
Kind of like the film "Henry, Portrait of a Serial Killer"
You know what I mean
Really party down with them and then the real fun begins
They'd be in for some wild sex and humiliation
Throw in some agony and mayhem
And then they'll be wishing for death
And I'm the guy who will grant their wishes
While this is happening
I'll be documenting the whole thing
I would have the sex, the torture and death...
I would take some guys wife and kids
Do the whole torture and mutilation thing
Kind of like the film "Henry, Portrait of a Serial Killer"
You know what I mean
Really party down with them and then the real fun begins
They'd be in for some wild sex and humiliation
Throw in some agony and mayhem
And then they'll be wishing for death
And I'm the guy who will grant their wishes
While this is happening
I'll be documenting the whole thing
I would have the sex, the torture and death...
#death
#family
#horror
#ShortStory
#violence
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Pedal to the Metal
California - Southbound One-O-One
Pedal to the medal, enjoying the scene
The Pacific Ocean is blue and sparkling
Top down, cool breeze, living the dream
The heart beats faster as the engine roars
But at top speeds it takes a lot of nerves
There’s a thrill that hangs in the balance
As tires screech on those treacherous curves
Though there may be warning signs everywhere
The driver may ignore them with a little smug
Because no matter what others will caution or say
The excitement of velocity is like a drug
...
Pedal to the medal, enjoying the scene
The Pacific Ocean is blue and sparkling
Top down, cool breeze, living the dream
The heart beats faster as the engine roars
But at top speeds it takes a lot of nerves
There’s a thrill that hangs in the balance
As tires screech on those treacherous curves
Though there may be warning signs everywhere
The driver may ignore them with a little smug
Because no matter what others will caution or say
The excitement of velocity is like a drug
...
#family
#MentalHealth
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It's My Decision
Look, Dad. I know that
you would not like which
path to take in my own
life. But it's my decision
to appear naked in those
porn flicks with Jason.
you would not like which
path to take in my own
life. But it's my decision
to appear naked in those
porn flicks with Jason.
#dialogue
#family
#fiction
#FreeVerse
#sex
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Saturday Morning
I looked out my front door
On the other side of the street
I saw a man open up his trunk
He yelled for his kid in the house
The kid came outside, and to his joy there was a puppy dog wagging it's tail
The child who was no more then 5, lost his balance when the puppy jumped on him
The kid fell to the ground and on his ass
The dog was licking and nibbling the boy until he got a taste of the kids mouth and bit the kid's lip right off
Must have tasted the chocolate chip cookies the kid was eating while outside
There was screaming and blood everywhere...
On the other side of the street
I saw a man open up his trunk
He yelled for his kid in the house
The kid came outside, and to his joy there was a puppy dog wagging it's tail
The child who was no more then 5, lost his balance when the puppy jumped on him
The kid fell to the ground and on his ass
The dog was licking and nibbling the boy until he got a taste of the kids mouth and bit the kid's lip right off
Must have tasted the chocolate chip cookies the kid was eating while outside
There was screaming and blood everywhere...
#children
#dogs
#family #satirical
#family #satirical
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The Start Of A Great Weekend
I looked out my window just before
On the other side of the street
I saw a man put a gun to a dog's head and blow the dog's brains all over the place
He bought his kid out next, placed the gun to his temple and shot his tiny head all over his driveway
Personally, I think it's alright
The kid was constantly shitting on my lawn and the dog was making way too much noise
Good Riddance!
On the other side of the street
I saw a man put a gun to a dog's head and blow the dog's brains all over the place
He bought his kid out next, placed the gun to his temple and shot his tiny head all over his driveway
Personally, I think it's alright
The kid was constantly shitting on my lawn and the dog was making way too much noise
Good Riddance!
#family
#happiness
#LifeChangingMoment
#satirical
#ThrillSeeking
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The Last Thing One Needs On Date Night
Tom went to Lauren's house.
He wanted to take her out dancing.
That's before she walked in.
She's wearing a black dress.
She smiled and asked "You like it?"
Tom answered with a kiss.
That's before Kara came home.
She insisted that the lovebirds leave soon.
Kara and Lauren's dad's outside.
He also brought their mom.
They insisted on meeting Lauren's newfound date.
They also wanna talk marriage.
Tom and Lauren snuck out the back.
They were gone before her parents showed.
He wanted to take her out dancing.
That's before she walked in.
She's wearing a black dress.
She smiled and asked "You like it?"
Tom answered with a kiss.
That's before Kara came home.
She insisted that the lovebirds leave soon.
Kara and Lauren's dad's outside.
He also brought their mom.
They insisted on meeting Lauren's newfound date.
They also wanna talk marriage.
Tom and Lauren snuck out the back.
They were gone before her parents showed.
#family
#fiction
#home
#love
#lover
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The Violence Continues
She had enough. Many times her father would could home staggering drunk, and force himself onto her. He didn't care. He had no regret when he would sober up. Her mother knew that if she ever said a word she'd be beaten & thrown out into the streets. She cared about her own hide and not her own flesh & blood. She came into this marriage with nothing and will leave the marriage with nothing.
Her daughter is now dependent on drugs. Any drugs to release her from this horror. Pills, heroin, meth, alcohol, anything to get her fucked up and to drown these memories.
...
Her daughter is now dependent on drugs. Any drugs to release her from this horror. Pills, heroin, meth, alcohol, anything to get her fucked up and to drown these memories.
...
#abuse
#anger
#family
#prison
#ShortStory
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my so called "Mother"
I forgive you
I will never understand
I still even love you
even though you dont deserve it
Yet you gave me life
For that, I thank you
Without you
my own kids wouldnt exist
nor my marriage
So, thank you....
But at the same time, fuck you...
I will never understand
I still even love you
even though you dont deserve it
Yet you gave me life
For that, I thank you
Without you
my own kids wouldnt exist
nor my marriage
So, thank you....
But at the same time, fuck you...
#family
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DU Poetry : Poems About Family Seeking Honest Critique