Poems About Family Seeking Honest Critique
#family
Poems about family seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Pontiac Safari: Second Owner
Summoned by Grandma
to her Redding, CA home
for a visit and heartbreaking task
asked to assume ownership
of Grandpa's prized possession
his precious ‘72 Pontiac
though I needed the ride
the sad circumstances
wounded Grandad's pride
and truly tore me up inside
feeling like his jailer
Imprisoning him
in his double wide trailer.
I drove that beautiful, twenty foot,
golden, barge-like wagon
for at least five years.
with it's space age, curved rear window
seating capacity
for a maximum of 10 friends ...
to her Redding, CA home
for a visit and heartbreaking task
asked to assume ownership
of Grandpa's prized possession
his precious ‘72 Pontiac
though I needed the ride
the sad circumstances
wounded Grandad's pride
and truly tore me up inside
feeling like his jailer
Imprisoning him
in his double wide trailer.
I drove that beautiful, twenty foot,
golden, barge-like wagon
for at least five years.
with it's space age, curved rear window
seating capacity
for a maximum of 10 friends ...
#aging
#family
#happiness
#memories
#sadness
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Treasured Scents
Lit match ignites incense stick
sandalwood aroma
wafts over my face
fond and mysterious
childhood memory incites
What was the prevalent fragrance
In my grandparents' home?
In the sacred smoke
a mystery made known
when mixed with the scent-remembrance
of coffee percolating in a pot
inviting boyish morning glee
contemplating what days adventure might be
Or paired with ginger snaps
baking in the oven
I remember grandma’s smile
as I bit into the warm, spicy cookie
secret ingredient, lots of love’n ...
sandalwood aroma
wafts over my face
fond and mysterious
childhood memory incites
What was the prevalent fragrance
In my grandparents' home?
In the sacred smoke
a mystery made known
when mixed with the scent-remembrance
of coffee percolating in a pot
inviting boyish morning glee
contemplating what days adventure might be
Or paired with ginger snaps
baking in the oven
I remember grandma’s smile
as I bit into the warm, spicy cookie
secret ingredient, lots of love’n ...
#childhood
#family
#happiness #memories
#happiness #memories
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Pontiac Safari: First Owner
Department of Motor Vehicles
tells grandpa
“ You're no longer fit to drive”
and to grandma they advise
“Get rid of your vehicle m’am”
so gramps won't be tempted
to go for a spin
for old time's sake
and endanger his and other's lives
a devastating decision she had to make
grandad spent his career
working in auto manufacturing
his gold, Pontiac station wagon,
that he meticulously maintained,
was the last vestige of his livelihood
to lose it was emasculating
tells grandpa
“ You're no longer fit to drive”
and to grandma they advise
“Get rid of your vehicle m’am”
so gramps won't be tempted
to go for a spin
for old time's sake
and endanger his and other's lives
a devastating decision she had to make
grandad spent his career
working in auto manufacturing
his gold, Pontiac station wagon,
that he meticulously maintained,
was the last vestige of his livelihood
to lose it was emasculating
#aging
#family
#memories #sadness
#memories #sadness
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Talk About Bad Timing
Could you please do me a favor?
I wish I could right now, Mark.
Could you get off me and dressed?
One guess. Your parents are home. Right?
I wish I could right now, Mark.
Could you get off me and dressed?
One guess. Your parents are home. Right?
#dialogue
#family
#fiction
#home
#sex
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The Wrinkles of Time
Like a star from the past she regaled us with stories
A lesson in each and every one of them
With love and patience she guided us
Even when we didn’t want to listen or understand
But after so many laps around the sun
I began to appreciate more of what she done
For all the sacrifices she made
All the sufferings she must’ve endured
I saw more of her light
Now at ninety-five
She only whispers
A fog has come over memory
Hands that once worked so hard
Show the wrinkles of time
Her faces lights up
Like a...
A lesson in each and every one of them
With love and patience she guided us
Even when we didn’t want to listen or understand
But after so many laps around the sun
I began to appreciate more of what she done
For all the sacrifices she made
All the sufferings she must’ve endured
I saw more of her light
Now at ninety-five
She only whispers
A fog has come over memory
Hands that once worked so hard
Show the wrinkles of time
Her faces lights up
Like a...
#family
#hope
#love
#mother
#stars
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3 Comments
Sister, I'm a Poet
Tenderly, you cradled me through
every skin-storm and hurricane
No school-bell bully
ever laid their finger on me
I watched your children weep
swept their tears into paper-cups
When we held Dad’s hand for the final time
dementia ‘s shotgun held the final bullets
bang! bang! we were all dead ,
blood on our slippers was merely truths
every skin-storm and hurricane
No school-bell bully
ever laid their finger on me
I watched your children weep
swept their tears into paper-cups
When we held Dad’s hand for the final time
dementia ‘s shotgun held the final bullets
bang! bang! we were all dead ,
blood on our slippers was merely truths
#family
#love
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Please Do Come In And Join Us
Lincoln opened the basement door.
Both he and Khloe saw his mom.
She was naked with Seth.
Mom smiled at both Khloe and Lincoln.
She invited them while Seth humped her.
Both he and Khloe saw his mom.
She was naked with Seth.
Mom smiled at both Khloe and Lincoln.
She invited them while Seth humped her.
#family
#fiction
#friendship
#home
#sex
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A New Way Of Saying The Engagement Is Off
Grant drove to San Francisco.
He went there to visit Cousin Nicole.
But he got surprised instead.
Grant walked into Nicole's apartment.
He saw her naked with some guy.
That guy isn't her fiancé.
He was humping her hard.
That's before he spotted Grant looking shocked.
He asked Nicole "Who's that?"
She looked up at Grant.
Nicole's working at Mitchell Brothers O'Farrell theatre.
Her lover's name is Zachary.
Both he and Helena are Nicole's co-workers.
Helena ran off to Cancun with Edward.
He went there to visit Cousin Nicole.
But he got surprised instead.
Grant walked into Nicole's apartment.
He saw her naked with some guy.
That guy isn't her fiancé.
He was humping her hard.
That's before he spotted Grant looking shocked.
He asked Nicole "Who's that?"
She looked up at Grant.
Nicole's working at Mitchell Brothers O'Farrell theatre.
Her lover's name is Zachary.
Both he and Helena are Nicole's co-workers.
Helena ran off to Cancun with Edward.
#betrayal
#family
#fiction
#lover
#sex
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Argonne Rebels
Go, you Rebels!
The summers of youth are a distant memory
Hot days under the sun
Endless rehearsals
Drill after drill
But at night under the stadium lights
The screams and applause from the crowds
Had an electric energy
Oh those must’ve been some glorious days
There is an echo that travels throughout time
The wall of sound from brass
The thunder of drums
Flags waving in the wind
Rifles tossed in the air
But what reverberates aside from the music and sight
More than the color and pageantry
Is the...
The summers of youth are a distant memory
Hot days under the sun
Endless rehearsals
Drill after drill
But at night under the stadium lights
The screams and applause from the crowds
Had an electric energy
Oh those must’ve been some glorious days
There is an echo that travels throughout time
The wall of sound from brass
The thunder of drums
Flags waving in the wind
Rifles tossed in the air
But what reverberates aside from the music and sight
More than the color and pageantry
Is the...
#art
#family
#friendship
#music
#tradition
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6 Comments
Cemetery
Practically everyday I walk through my local cemetery
Peaceful, tranquil, relaxing and time stands still
I have respect when entering
I always remember not to point at a grave, it will make your finger rot
Also, do not count the cars in a funeral procession,
for the amount of cars you count, will be the day that you perish sometime during that year
As I heard these superstitions from my elders, I never dared to explore these wise tales
One day as I awoke from my restful sleep, I began shivering uncontrollably
I just could not shake this feeling ...
Peaceful, tranquil, relaxing and time stands still
I have respect when entering
I always remember not to point at a grave, it will make your finger rot
Also, do not count the cars in a funeral procession,
for the amount of cars you count, will be the day that you perish sometime during that year
As I heard these superstitions from my elders, I never dared to explore these wise tales
One day as I awoke from my restful sleep, I began shivering uncontrollably
I just could not shake this feeling ...
#curse
#death
#family
#graveyard
#philosophical
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10 Comments
Over the Mon
I’m absolutely over the mo⁰n for her
The way she looks at me she makes me smi)e
And though time flies by quickly all around us
My heart is happy I got to see my grandchild
Luna makes me wonder about who she’ll be
Which roads she’ll take to reach her destination
What she’ll discover about herself in her journey
Where she will find her fire and motivation
Moonshine’s eyes are like the stars in the sky
They make you wonder how far she’ll go
Because the future belongs to her, to them
The promising hopeful generation of...
The way she looks at me she makes me smi)e
And though time flies by quickly all around us
My heart is happy I got to see my grandchild
Luna makes me wonder about who she’ll be
Which roads she’ll take to reach her destination
What she’ll discover about herself in her journey
Where she will find her fire and motivation
Moonshine’s eyes are like the stars in the sky
They make you wonder how far she’ll go
Because the future belongs to her, to them
The promising hopeful generation of...
#children
#family
#moon
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If My Mom And Dad Find Out
Only you and I should know that I'm
posing nude for Hustler, Sydney.
If my mom and dad find out
about it, they'll come here
to Baldwin Wallace
and drag me back
to Scottsdale
by the
hair.
posing nude for Hustler, Sydney.
If my mom and dad find out
about it, they'll come here
to Baldwin Wallace
and drag me back
to Scottsdale
by the
hair.
#dialogue
#family
#fiction
#school
#sex
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