Confessional Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#confessional
confessional seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Haiku-Sonnet
Storms are gathering.
In the cyber background we
furiously plan.
Collating the facts
means sifting through opinions,
by necessity.
Each viewpoint valid
though varied in emphasis;
such subtle shading.
Quite easy to write,
now must steel self to endure
that which lies ahead.
Yet, what am I e'er, if not
honest, faithful, true stalwart?
In the cyber background we
furiously plan.
Collating the facts
means sifting through opinions,
by necessity.
Each viewpoint valid
though varied in emphasis;
such subtle shading.
Quite easy to write,
now must steel self to endure
that which lies ahead.
Yet, what am I e'er, if not
honest, faithful, true stalwart?
#confessional
#conflict
#job #SelfReflection
#job #SelfReflection
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Aldebaran Taurus
At one point that old Altima was all I had
Finding a space where to park for the night
Watching the stars through the sunroof
Wondering how I got there
And if I’d ever get out of that plight
I hit a low point and there was nowhere else to go
But up
Yet I knew I was smarter than that
I just had too much pride
Until I learned that forgiving and asking for forgiveness…
…is a two-way street
I’ll never forget those nights in old “Christine”
Drifting in and out of sleep
Watching the night starry sky
71...
Finding a space where to park for the night
Watching the stars through the sunroof
Wondering how I got there
And if I’d ever get out of that plight
I hit a low point and there was nowhere else to go
But up
Yet I knew I was smarter than that
I just had too much pride
Until I learned that forgiving and asking for forgiveness…
…is a two-way street
I’ll never forget those nights in old “Christine”
Drifting in and out of sleep
Watching the night starry sky
71...
#confessional
#SelfReflection
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Back to Gemini
(Castor and Pollux 2)
Back to Gemini that space between him and I
When we see eye to eye in that dual personality
One’s a fly by and the other can be the fall guy
Like a balance act between absurdity and rationality
And perhaps this is why Gemini is my favorite constellation
As if the astrological sign is in line with that characterization
There are two temperaments but usually logic is at the helm
While the mad enthusiastic maniac wants to overwhelm
Castor and Pollux watch from their positions in the sky
It’s like their...
Back to Gemini that space between him and I
When we see eye to eye in that dual personality
One’s a fly by and the other can be the fall guy
Like a balance act between absurdity and rationality
And perhaps this is why Gemini is my favorite constellation
As if the astrological sign is in line with that characterization
There are two temperaments but usually logic is at the helm
While the mad enthusiastic maniac wants to overwhelm
Castor and Pollux watch from their positions in the sky
It’s like their...
#confessional
#identity
#myself
#stars
#universe
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renunciate ( or a few last words)
What if I where to tell you, that I am nothing more than the concept imputed within mind. Some stoned junkie perhaps?
Or a contentious retarded cunt ( cunts are useful).
The notion of others whatever that may be.
Stopped giving a fuck about what society thinks
Threw my clippers and hairbrush away, let it grow let it grow. Before too long a wookie greeted me in the mirror.
Got asked if I was a rastah on account of my locks, to which I replied, nah just lazy
Parenting is akin to dancing one legged through a minefield. Knowing you will end...
Or a contentious retarded cunt ( cunts are useful).
The notion of others whatever that may be.
Stopped giving a fuck about what society thinks
Threw my clippers and hairbrush away, let it grow let it grow. Before too long a wookie greeted me in the mirror.
Got asked if I was a rastah on account of my locks, to which I replied, nah just lazy
Parenting is akin to dancing one legged through a minefield. Knowing you will end...
#confessional
#LifeChangingMoment
#SelfReflection
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Morning Rituals
I lie awake
about ten minutes before the first alarm goes off
thinking about what I’m going to do that day
before I force myself to put on my running shoes
and go into the darkness
after an hour
or about when Clockwork Angels is coming to a close
the feeling of accomplishment Rushes through me
I notice I’m getting slower
and the distances are shorter
but I’m OK with it
after breakfast
after doing the dishes
I down my hot cup of coffee
(with my blood pressure meds)
but my body temperature goes up again ...
about ten minutes before the first alarm goes off
thinking about what I’m going to do that day
before I force myself to put on my running shoes
and go into the darkness
after an hour
or about when Clockwork Angels is coming to a close
the feeling of accomplishment Rushes through me
I notice I’m getting slower
and the distances are shorter
but I’m OK with it
after breakfast
after doing the dishes
I down my hot cup of coffee
(with my blood pressure meds)
but my body temperature goes up again ...
#confessional
#LifeAsAWriter
#LifeCycle
#myself
#SelfReflection
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A poem in bed
The sheets fold like paper,
soft against skin, heavy with dreams.
A book rests in open palms,
its spine breathing in the hush of midnight.
Words spill like ink across the quiet,
syllables curling into candlelight,
each line a bridge between waking
and the endless drift into thought.
The best poem waits in whispers,
threading itself through fingertips,
drawing the mind deeper
into the lull of imagined echoes.
The letters pulse, alive in their rhythm,
the room shrinking to...
soft against skin, heavy with dreams.
A book rests in open palms,
its spine breathing in the hush of midnight.
Words spill like ink across the quiet,
syllables curling into candlelight,
each line a bridge between waking
and the endless drift into thought.
The best poem waits in whispers,
threading itself through fingertips,
drawing the mind deeper
into the lull of imagined echoes.
The letters pulse, alive in their rhythm,
the room shrinking to...
#confessional
#mirror
#MyInspiration
#myself
#WritingPoetry
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Petals and Stars
Under the void stars crumble to dust,
hands tremble as petals tear softly,
the air hums with the weight of endings.
One by one, petals fall like faint whispers.
Counting stars that flicker on borrowed time.
The heavens bleed with quiet inevitability.
Breath tightens as skies fracture apart,
petals scatter, unanswered prayers to the abyss.
The apocalypse looms patient and cruel.
Counting, plucking, waiting in silence...
Hope burns like a distant fading ember
and the world waits, fragile and undone.
hands tremble as petals tear softly,
the air hums with the weight of endings.
One by one, petals fall like faint whispers.
Counting stars that flicker on borrowed time.
The heavens bleed with quiet inevitability.
Breath tightens as skies fracture apart,
petals scatter, unanswered prayers to the abyss.
The apocalypse looms patient and cruel.
Counting, plucking, waiting in silence...
Hope burns like a distant fading ember
and the world waits, fragile and undone.
#confessional
#meditation
#patience #silence
#patience #silence
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Feel more at peace
As another day slowly comes to an end and night shadows the world 🌍 when do you feel more comfortable, in your own personal, quite atmosphere of no time, just empty space. FOR your own thoughts to roam around free, from the negativity and drama and confusion, and madness and chaos even of some people's. 🤔 For sure it's necessary to understand that sometimes, we have to learn to separate, things in our lives in order to THINK. Rational with an focus of understanding, that we all need that moment of peace and tranquility. For sure it could be music 🎶🎵 it could be...
#confessional
#SelfDiscovery
#SelfReflection
#SelfWorth
#StreamOfConsciousness
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Drafts of a confession
It's me again the story teller of unspoken words ✍️ Let's dive into the truth about a confession of the deepness, that lingers in the heart and spiritual soul touching, the deepness of your soul and mind. For this precious story will go deeper than deep, into the process of being able to share your silent, whispers of your tears that have been created by the hurt and pain. That goes to the reason, why you wear a mask as a disguise, to hide from preying eyes. 👁️👁️ But yet beneath the surface of your mind thoughts, you wonder how much you need and want...
#confessional
#SelfDiscovery
#SelfReflection
#SelfWorth
#StreamOfConsciousness
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Genesis
I welcome them
by opening a gate,
unlock doors after
long stretch of day
as large pots stir
they pick up the
ladle, wondering,
asking what it is,
they chow down
as steam covers
their faces, their
mouths speak
in a common
language we
all know.
Later, I rinse suds
off steel as a doll
kisses the back
of my head,
America and Japan
wrap their arms
around my
tiny island
as Genesis...
by opening a gate,
unlock doors after
long stretch of day
as large pots stir
they pick up the
ladle, wondering,
asking what it is,
they chow down
as steam covers
their faces, their
mouths speak
in a common
language we
all know.
Later, I rinse suds
off steel as a doll
kisses the back
of my head,
America and Japan
wrap their arms
around my
tiny island
as Genesis...
#confessional
#symbolism
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1 Comment
Damian asking me...
Damian, you're a fantastic interviewer.
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/538989-spotlight---par/
Inviting everyone to read us in SpotLight.
Big hugs to you all.
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/538989-spotlight---par/
Inviting everyone to read us in SpotLight.
Big hugs to you all.
#confessional
#dialogue
#happiness
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What is This
When fingertips hover over the keys
Or twirl the barrel of the pen
Trying to force the expression
A frustration sets in
Even though the emotion lingers
The words are stuck at the dam
Suddenly
Like a gentle breeze coming through the door
A thought crosses the mind
A key word
Like a tiny spark of invention that makes you ask
What is this?
It’s the muse
Awakened
Gentle hands on your shoulder
Whispering
58 Unique Word
74 Total
Or twirl the barrel of the pen
Trying to force the expression
A frustration sets in
Even though the emotion lingers
The words are stuck at the dam
Suddenly
Like a gentle breeze coming through the door
A thought crosses the mind
A key word
Like a tiny spark of invention that makes you ask
What is this?
It’s the muse
Awakened
Gentle hands on your shoulder
Whispering
58 Unique Word
74 Total
#confessional
#LifeAsAWriter
#WritersBlock #WritingPoetry
#WritersBlock #WritingPoetry
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