Breakup Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#breakup
breakup seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
AprylNovember
A.R.M.
A.R.M.
Poem Published
21st Nov 2024 11:35am
21st Nov 2024 11:35am
Was it something I said?
You are too much.
Yours will not do.
Be quiet, hush.
What is wrong with you?
What did I tell you?
Are you blind or something?
Get out of the way, shoo.
Are you good for nothing?
Just do what I say.
Go faster, slow down.
That's the wrong way.
Quit fooling around.
You never listen.
You had better change.
Be glad I have forgiven.
How many times do I have to say?
I can't believe she left.
Was it something that I said?
ARM
Yours will not do.
Be quiet, hush.
What is wrong with you?
What did I tell you?
Are you blind or something?
Get out of the way, shoo.
Are you good for nothing?
Just do what I say.
Go faster, slow down.
That's the wrong way.
Quit fooling around.
You never listen.
You had better change.
Be glad I have forgiven.
How many times do I have to say?
I can't believe she left.
Was it something that I said?
ARM
#apathy
#breakup
#disappointment
79 reads
2 Comments
Mars_August
Mars August
Mars August
Poem Published
20th Nov 2024 1:42pm
20th Nov 2024 1:42pm
For the Guest of Honor
#anger
#breakup
#grief
#heartbroken
#UnrequitedLove
162 reads
4 Comments
Artavious25
Taypen99
Taypen99
Poem Published
15th Nov 2024 3:15am
15th Nov 2024 3:15am
Thank You
I wonder if you see this loving man standing here in front of you
Does it cross your mind all the things I did to keep you happy
Do you even consider all I did to provide and care for you
You were my light
You were my sunshine
I gave you the key to my heart
Now this house is no longer a home
You took every opportunity to disrespect the love I had for you
The warm shoulder I used to lean on has turned cold on me
These tears I’m crying won’t stop falling
This heart of mine won’t stop grieving
Despite all the damage you’ve inflicted on...
Does it cross your mind all the things I did to keep you happy
Do you even consider all I did to provide and care for you
You were my light
You were my sunshine
I gave you the key to my heart
Now this house is no longer a home
You took every opportunity to disrespect the love I had for you
The warm shoulder I used to lean on has turned cold on me
These tears I’m crying won’t stop falling
This heart of mine won’t stop grieving
Despite all the damage you’ve inflicted on...
#breakup
#hurt
#jealousy
#sadness
#UnrequitedLove
121 reads
0 Comments
fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Poem Published
14th Nov 2024 11:13pm
14th Nov 2024 11:13pm
No Church Bells
We need to talk
Why do I feel my chest tighten or, like every nerve ending is firing at once
We need to talk
Nothing ever goes well with those types of words
I know what I told you
I should stop this. I know exactly where it's going, and my heart is slowly ripping apart.
I told you everything was over with me and her, but I also told you I would try to make it work.
Why is he still talking? I got it. I'm gone
I would like if we could still be friends
He would like it if we could...
Why do I feel my chest tighten or, like every nerve ending is firing at once
We need to talk
Nothing ever goes well with those types of words
I know what I told you
I should stop this. I know exactly where it's going, and my heart is slowly ripping apart.
I told you everything was over with me and her, but I also told you I would try to make it work.
Why is he still talking? I got it. I'm gone
I would like if we could still be friends
He would like it if we could...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#rejection #sadness
#rejection #sadness
265 reads
26 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
14th Nov 2024 11:05am
14th Nov 2024 11:05am
Say Farewell
I fooled you baby
you thought you've rolled the dice
you tried to break me and chain me down
but there's no tomorrow,
it's time to end that race
don't have time for wasted years
Leave me out
out from your selfish games
leave me out from your life
and watch me running free
Say farewell
not again to hypnotize me
not again to control me no more
say farewell
I won't let you mesmerize me
I won't dance the way you want no more
Still feel abhorrence because we lived in lies
you tried to praise me...
you thought you've rolled the dice
you tried to break me and chain me down
but there's no tomorrow,
it's time to end that race
don't have time for wasted years
Leave me out
out from your selfish games
leave me out from your life
and watch me running free
Say farewell
not again to hypnotize me
not again to control me no more
say farewell
I won't let you mesmerize me
I won't dance the way you want no more
Still feel abhorrence because we lived in lies
you tried to praise me...
#betrayal
#breakup
#lies
#love
#relationships
92 reads
6 Comments
DeaSiciliana
Poem Published
14th Nov 2024 6:24am
14th Nov 2024 6:24am
Blind
Someone told me I was blind
Because I could not see
The truth in front of me
But I do see the truth
It may not be what you see
But it’s what I see
And the truth to me is what I see is all that matters.
Because I could not see
The truth in front of me
But I do see the truth
It may not be what you see
But it’s what I see
And the truth to me is what I see is all that matters.
#breakup
71 reads
1 Comment
sgtvasquezg
G. Vasquez
G. Vasquez
Poem Published
10th Nov 2024 3:18am
10th Nov 2024 3:18am
Simply
I'm going to make this as simple, as simple as it can be.
I've loved you since we were kids and still now at forty-three.
What more can I say, other than, I'd like you to be here with me.
I've loved you since we were kids and still now at forty-three.
What more can I say, other than, I'd like you to be here with me.
#breakup
#emotions
#FallingInLove
#love
#relationships
71 reads
0 Comments
DeaSiciliana
Poem Published
8th Nov 2024 7:06am
8th Nov 2024 7:06am
Petals
I am the petal you pluck
Petal by petal by petal
Til nothing is left
But I will not be that last petal no more.
I will stand up for myself
And be me and me and me
Til I am whole
And I will flower and get back my petals .
Petal by petal by petal
Til nothing is left
But I will not be that last petal no more.
I will stand up for myself
And be me and me and me
Til I am whole
And I will flower and get back my petals .
#breakup
52 reads
2 Comments
sgtvasquezg
G. Vasquez
G. Vasquez
Poem Published
7th Nov 2024 4:07am
7th Nov 2024 4:07am
If You Want/ Si Tu Quieres
If you really want to leave me.
Deveras quieres a ir de aqui.
Then go ahead and get the fuck on.
Vete de la chingada de aqui, puta.
Because you had the greatest man.
Por que tu tiene el mejor mexican.
But you had to believe them instead.
Pero querias creer tu pinche gente tambien
I'm not too sure what your friends done said,
No se que su amigos dicen.
But their all are crazy in their fucking heads.
Son locos en los pinche mentes.
Fuck you and...
Deveras quieres a ir de aqui.
Then go ahead and get the fuck on.
Vete de la chingada de aqui, puta.
Because you had the greatest man.
Por que tu tiene el mejor mexican.
But you had to believe them instead.
Pero querias creer tu pinche gente tambien
I'm not too sure what your friends done said,
No se que su amigos dicen.
But their all are crazy in their fucking heads.
Son locos en los pinche mentes.
Fuck you and...
#anger
#breakup
#heartbroken #relationships
#heartbroken #relationships
108 reads
1 Comment
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
1st Nov 2024 7:45pm
1st Nov 2024 7:45pm
My Eternal Flame
I’m reaching out for you
Feel my warmth come through
Screaming out your name
My love is driving me insane
Walking in the rain
Feel the touch of my face
You’re not here – to dry my tears away
How can I make you see
I am the other half
That reflects your eyes
Weren't you the love of my life?
My heart will never find peace
I always feel that something’s missing
Something’s missing....
My eternal flame
Feel my warmth come through
Screaming out your name
My love is driving me insane
Walking in the rain
Feel the touch of my face
You’re not here – to dry my tears away
How can I make you see
I am the other half
That reflects your eyes
Weren't you the love of my life?
My heart will never find peace
I always feel that something’s missing
Something’s missing....
My eternal flame
#breakup
#conflict
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#love
107 reads
10 Comments
cabcool
Poem Published
30th Oct 2024 2:46am
30th Oct 2024 2:46am
October Poems 2024 >> broken
October Poems 2024
A poem for each day of the month in which I was born
DAY 27
broken
if e’er the broken vessel
could bear the healing balm,
i own me, then, the trestle
whose groans become the psalm.
a broken reed low bowing
beside a well-trod path,
passersby scarcely knowing
their whim has bared its wrath.
a honey bee flip-flopping
by one exhausted wing,
where idle boys, hip-hopping,
have trampled on its sting.
a...
A poem for each day of the month in which I was born
DAY 27
broken
if e’er the broken vessel
could bear the healing balm,
i own me, then, the trestle
whose groans become the psalm.
a broken reed low bowing
beside a well-trod path,
passersby scarcely knowing
their whim has bared its wrath.
a honey bee flip-flopping
by one exhausted wing,
where idle boys, hip-hopping,
have trampled on its sting.
a...
#birthday
#breakup
#fate
#LifeAsAWriter
#LifeCycle
63 reads
3 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
25th Oct 2024 7:14pm
25th Oct 2024 7:14pm
These are the days
Smell the rain and watch the sky
This is what i give you
Touch the skin and taste the lips
This is what i have given you
The sand is warm and so are you
Swirl in the water that lick the shores
I have no light to guide you
So make your way by strife
I have nothing else to give you
But an ending life
Never ask why daylight dies
Why the herds head for higher ground
Never ask why i thought you to lie
And to hurt the one you love
Never ask why the night is cold
And why the wind tears in your soul
Never ask...
This is what i give you
Touch the skin and taste the lips
This is what i have given you
The sand is warm and so are you
Swirl in the water that lick the shores
I have no light to guide you
So make your way by strife
I have nothing else to give you
But an ending life
Never ask why daylight dies
Why the herds head for higher ground
Never ask why i thought you to lie
And to hurt the one you love
Never ask why the night is cold
And why the wind tears in your soul
Never ask...
#betrayal
#breakup
#conflict
#relationships
#sadness
125 reads
4 Comments
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