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nice so far but try to put more description and feeling into it

Show them how you feel about these lies emotionally

Ill show you an example once I write mine

Thank you for your input. I look forward to seeing your example.

I love the way you have packed so much deeply felt sentiment into this short verse. You still gave it an end that tied it all together and perhaps the brevity also adds to the power of the piece. i know the frustration of people who don't know saying those cliche words and phrases but keep in mind that many are cliche because they are true-even when the simplistic feel of them creates real doubt. Things always change, life does get better if you are willing to make the effort to change it..but, either way-It's a long, hard ride sometimes and all we can do in the midst of times like that is hang on and wait for better times.
i enjoyed this a lot, keep writing
and welcome to DUP

Thank you for the wonderful compliment.