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Found You Lost
I knew you for a long time, but don't know you anymore.
Something happened in the middle;
you're too depressed to be beautiful again -
someone's left you with sad smiles.
When it's booming with tourists, nothing
is more dead than the colosseum,
and nothing is as dead as Rome and words,
so I stayed quiet. Watching. I saw
you'd discovered that the stars, sun and moon are burlesqued
by poets and artists. It's a cheap varnish
on a striking elm, but the tree isn't seeable yet.
Sometimes it's impossible to see right.
You look too hard and take everything apart
until you're left with a mound of worthless fibres.
You can't understand the heart; we're too smart.
Know that sophistication kills passion
and know it soon. These little towns don't drag you down,
places don't depress people; It's consensual.
Hurry. The winters are cold and the summer's windy
and there's not enough time to curse the weather.
(Forgive my incongruous addressing,
only the free
can target names. Only the free
and the careless.)
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Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 12:53pm
People so easily become lost, I do it often but manage to find myself again quickly.
Much truth in the fourth stanza, my favourite.
A great piece MrA. :)
Much truth in the fourth stanza, my favourite.
A great piece MrA. :)
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re: Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 1:17pm
Personal escape is a great thing. Turn you into a monster if you can't escape somehow.
Thank you for the praise, Magdalena. :)
Thank you for the praise, Magdalena. :)
Re: Found You Lost
Anonymous
20th Mar 2013 1:43pm
Jesus H christ. This made me fucking cry. That is all. I really need to stop putting your poems in my reading list.
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re: Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 7:46pm
I love crying women, don't ask me why. :) if you have to, then you have to. Comments are always welcome.
Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 2:43pm
"places don't depress people; It's consensual.
Hurry. The winters are cold and the summer's windy
and there's not enough time to curse the weather."------
ha, yeh, baby--eye no fckn cry / i'takes it on'th'fly
My Consents Unto The Great Depressions of Evermore !
anOther topknotchedy Alptrauma
Hurry. The winters are cold and the summer's windy
and there's not enough time to curse the weather."------
ha, yeh, baby--eye no fckn cry / i'takes it on'th'fly
My Consents Unto The Great Depressions of Evermore !
anOther topknotchedy Alptrauma
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re: Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 7:52pm
Haha, it's all self infliction, or the inability to say 'fuck that'.
Cheers, saxman. As ever.
Cheers, saxman. As ever.
Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 4:00pm
love the little spots of rhyme because it reminds me of your music roots, and altogether, even though it contains these matters-of-fact and serious, nearly proverb-like lines, it manages to stay light. sort of reminds me of the feeling i get off a haiku.
in the first line, i'd probably, personally, remove the "know you" from the second half, just because it feels unnecessary.
and here:
"on a striking elm, but the *tree isn't seeable yet." - again, naught but personal preference. [:
much enjoyed, Mr A. i intend to catch up on these, your offerings unto the DUPixies. [:
in the first line, i'd probably, personally, remove the "know you" from the second half, just because it feels unnecessary.
and here:
"on a striking elm, but the *tree isn't seeable yet." - again, naught but personal preference. [:
much enjoyed, Mr A. i intend to catch up on these, your offerings unto the DUPixies. [:
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re: Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 7:57pm
Wow, look who's in these dark woods again. You read it wonderfully too. Tree? Fuck. Why didn't I think of that?
See your eyes are still sharp. Thank you muchly for gracing the page, Jest.
See your eyes are still sharp. Thank you muchly for gracing the page, Jest.
Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 6:16pm
re: Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 7:59pm
Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 6:32pm
I really needed to read this. It's written beautifully and a real eye opener. The second stanza really caught my eye. Sorry for such a lame comment, just felt I should regard it somehow.
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re: Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 8:02pm
Definitely not lame. If you can't express yourself however you can then we're all fucked. Glad you found some light in there.
Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 6:44pm
Beautiful write, very soft and solemn. Makes me think of those hauntingly chilling times where you are not physically lost, but spiritually. Nothing seems to have the same sparkle anymore. Reading list entry. Thanks for writing.
Caliban
Caliban
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re: Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 8:11pm
Glad to rupture such feelings, even though they're not the nicest. You're far too kind, Miss Caliban.
Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 7:20pm
i'll take this another direction... how bout a most respectful fuck you...and a most kind fuck you for laying this one out so simply...it's great.
Yeah, I agree,feels a bit light. but just in the wording, the heaviness is right there without the wording deluding it.
that fourth stanza is one that would stick out for me, even if it was in a book of the good shit...nice Mr.A
Yeah, I agree,feels a bit light. but just in the wording, the heaviness is right there without the wording deluding it.
that fourth stanza is one that would stick out for me, even if it was in a book of the good shit...nice Mr.A
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re: Re: Found You Lost
20th Mar 2013 8:16pm
Sometimes fuck you, are the best words in the world.
Was sceptical with the wording after recent spouts of dumbing it down, so I'm glad it worked. Appreciate your thoughts, lb, and thank you for the good words man.
Was sceptical with the wording after recent spouts of dumbing it down, so I'm glad it worked. Appreciate your thoughts, lb, and thank you for the good words man.