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Dead Rhinestone
She's rubbing off
on you
just like
a cheap necklace,
she is the metal noose
around your neck
a green ring of jealousy
is all she leaves
when she is off
tainting the perception,
your perception.....
she's a dead rhinestone
worthless,
it does not shine
and makes the ones that do
seem like nothing special
time to remove
she who dangles
from the throat of humanity,
a gem no more
just an ugly reminder
of the beauty that once was
on you
just like
a cheap necklace,
she is the metal noose
around your neck
a green ring of jealousy
is all she leaves
when she is off
tainting the perception,
your perception.....
she's a dead rhinestone
worthless,
it does not shine
and makes the ones that do
seem like nothing special
time to remove
she who dangles
from the throat of humanity,
a gem no more
just an ugly reminder
of the beauty that once was
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Re: Dead Rhinestone
15th Mar 2013 3:11pm
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15th Mar 2013 3:16pm
Why Thank you K6!!!!
that was an awesome thing to say!!!
I'm pretty fond of your work too:)
that was an awesome thing to say!!!
I'm pretty fond of your work too:)
Re: Dead Rhinestone
15th Mar 2013 3:41pm
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15th Mar 2013 3:42pm
Re: Dead Rhinestone
15th Mar 2013 4:07pm
re: Re: Dead Rhinestone
15th Mar 2013 4:16pm
:) Thanks Atakti
I'm trying stuff out seeing what works and what does not :) I collect costume jewelery and when you have piece that has a dead rhinestone it renders the piece worthless
thanks for reading :)
I'm trying stuff out seeing what works and what does not :) I collect costume jewelery and when you have piece that has a dead rhinestone it renders the piece worthless
thanks for reading :)
Re: Dead Rhinestone
15th Mar 2013 4:42pm
Ooo, I especially enjoyed these bits:
"she is the metal noose
around your neck"
"it does not shine
and makes the ones that do
seem like nothing special"
Brilliant.
"she is the metal noose
around your neck"
"it does not shine
and makes the ones that do
seem like nothing special"
Brilliant.
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re: Re: Dead Rhinestone
15th Mar 2013 4:59pm
Re: Dead Rhinestone
15th Mar 2013 4:52pm
Re: Dead Rhinestone
15th Mar 2013 5:51pm
right, well, this is quite something. There is a lot of depth here, the confident voice makes it eerie to a degree I don't care to explain right now.
ok , some aspects could be changed a little, merely superficial bits like changing all the 'she is ' to 'she's'
all in though, very impressive. grand job Nikkiemoe
ok , some aspects could be changed a little, merely superficial bits like changing all the 'she is ' to 'she's'
all in though, very impressive. grand job Nikkiemoe
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re: Re: Dead Rhinestone
15th Mar 2013 5:53pm
Thanks Craic...
you are right about the she's and she is
thanks for reading my crizap
you are right about the she's and she is
thanks for reading my crizap
Re: Dead Rhinestone
15th Mar 2013 6:09pm
Fantastic read how mind must work.
Great write as always nikki
stay punk
Marcus
Great write as always nikki
stay punk
Marcus
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Re: Dead Rhinestone
15th Mar 2013 6:47pm
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15th Mar 2013 7:09pm
Re: Dead Rhinestone
Anonymous
15th Mar 2013 6:58pm
Another wonderful "gem"! Thanks Nikki! Mike
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Re: Dead Rhinestone
16th Mar 2013 3:15am
Re: Dead Rhinestone
Anonymous
16th Mar 2013 7:35pm
A wonderful powerful write by you, Nikki!
The things that fall from their pedestal, truth or dare...
The things that fall from their pedestal, truth or dare...
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