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What a world...
Plastic people,
in a delicate world,
duct-taped by perfection.
Seeking immortality,
and skin without inflection.
in a delicate world,
duct-taped by perfection.
Seeking immortality,
and skin without inflection.
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Hellooo! :)
27th Aug 2010 5:54am
I wrote this short little poem a LONG time ago, I finally decided to post it. Lol, please tell me what you think, I take all comments and critisism gladly! :) Thanks for reading. ~ Jade
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27th Aug 2010 10:02am
i have to say i like this one alot
could be taken in many different direction i enjoy that in poetry takes a good mind to do that
could be taken in many different direction i enjoy that in poetry takes a good mind to do that
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27th Aug 2010 10:03am
Aw, thanks so much! :) I enjoyed your poem too. Thanks again for reading, I appreciate it! :)
hell O
27th Aug 2010 10:55am
liked very much the use of words such as Plastic, Duct-tape, Immortality and Skin!
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re: hell O
27th Aug 2010 10:58am
cool
28th Aug 2010 1:00am
"...duck-taped by perfection.."
This piece is short, but hits a lot of notes! It reminds me of how most this world is held down, trying to alter the inevitable. Very good!
This piece is short, but hits a lot of notes! It reminds me of how most this world is held down, trying to alter the inevitable. Very good!
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re: cool
28th Aug 2010 3:36am
Thank you so much! I am glad you were captured by the essence in my tiny little poem. I am very thankful! :)
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28th Aug 2010 12:40pm
Amazing!
19th Sep 2010 4:10am
re: Amazing!
19th Sep 2010 4:59am
Thanks so much for checking my little piece out. It's not nearly as awesome as the one you did but I'd like to think it's close enough. :D Thanks again. :)