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Just you
We fucked
not anything pretty
nothing you ever seen on tv
he came in looking as good as he always does
shirt unbuttoned
pants laying low on his waist
a tease
knows what I like
and how I like it
just looked at me
with his head cocked
and licked his lips
made me wet
wanting his hands to touch
explore
as only they know how
no words can do this to me
just that look
the one that wakes me up in a cold sweat
while griping my sheets
screaming in ecstasy
from him
patting my bed
come sit with me
fill me with your voice
tell me your dreams
and then we can fly away
together
touch the heavens
and fall back to hell
together
be my forever
stay here with me
look into me
as only you can do
make me your whore
and I'll bend to your needs
I don't want to be your lover
I'll be your very best friend
and you can keep me
as long as you continue to look at me
just like that
not anything pretty
nothing you ever seen on tv
he came in looking as good as he always does
shirt unbuttoned
pants laying low on his waist
a tease
knows what I like
and how I like it
just looked at me
with his head cocked
and licked his lips
made me wet
wanting his hands to touch
explore
as only they know how
no words can do this to me
just that look
the one that wakes me up in a cold sweat
while griping my sheets
screaming in ecstasy
from him
patting my bed
come sit with me
fill me with your voice
tell me your dreams
and then we can fly away
together
touch the heavens
and fall back to hell
together
be my forever
stay here with me
look into me
as only you can do
make me your whore
and I'll bend to your needs
I don't want to be your lover
I'll be your very best friend
and you can keep me
as long as you continue to look at me
just like that
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Re: Just you
10th Feb 2013 6:34am
Perfect, romantic, sensual, and sweet.
"the one that I wakes me up in a cold sweat"
I think you have an unwanted "I" there, otherwise a sublime write.
Love
Caliban
"the one that I wakes me up in a cold sweat"
I think you have an unwanted "I" there, otherwise a sublime write.
Love
Caliban
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Re: Just you
10th Feb 2013 7:07pm
Sensuous and romantic write. One error: the phrase "griping my sheets" should surely be "gripping". (Griping in English vernacular roughly means "bellyaching" or "whinging".)
Like your profile pic - heard of the Paloma Faith song "Upside Down"? (Nothing to do with Australia!)
Like your profile pic - heard of the Paloma Faith song "Upside Down"? (Nothing to do with Australia!)
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10th Feb 2013 9:15pm
"Like yours as well very plain" - assuming you are talking about my pic I am waiting for a friend to crop a pic out of group photo (only ones I have on cyberspace) to use as profile pic. (Other people would be embarrassed to have their faces in this!)
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10th Feb 2013 10:11pm
No shame in my game.. I am who I am . Writing or as a person. I won't hide :-) looking forward to seeing it
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