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A Writer's Duet
How interesting it would be
if you and I belonged to one another
this bond is too strong to betray
though I'd try not to hold too tight
smothering you within my grasp
I'd let you slip through my fingers
now and again
just enough so that you would live freely
and affections aren't tainted by constraint
I'm a relaxed lover, but Darling,
don't confuse that with disinterest
I lust for you, truly
your words written on the canvas of our creation
two souls bound on determination
it gives me a rush I can't describe
I can feel it between my thighs
aching for you as we share this load
You are my inspiration
and I, your muse
together pushing boundaries
new worlds at our fingertips
Gods in our own right
the seed of our intimacy
growing on dreams
if you and I belonged to one another
this bond is too strong to betray
though I'd try not to hold too tight
smothering you within my grasp
I'd let you slip through my fingers
now and again
just enough so that you would live freely
and affections aren't tainted by constraint
I'm a relaxed lover, but Darling,
don't confuse that with disinterest
I lust for you, truly
your words written on the canvas of our creation
two souls bound on determination
it gives me a rush I can't describe
I can feel it between my thighs
aching for you as we share this load
You are my inspiration
and I, your muse
together pushing boundaries
new worlds at our fingertips
Gods in our own right
the seed of our intimacy
growing on dreams
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Re: A Writers Duet
9th Feb 2013 8:31am
Re: A Writers Duet
9th Feb 2013 8:37am
Few punctuation issues. The title should have an apstrophe as "Writer" is possessive. "Gods" is plural; no apostrophe. And so on. Did Eamon get you to post this? :)
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Noted and edited. And no, I had my own inspiration for this piece, but I think that Lep will be satisfied with me coming through at my end of the challenge.
Thanks for stopping by.
Thanks for stopping by.
Re: A Writers Duet
9th Feb 2013 8:45am
Revvin' up your engine
Listen to her howlin' roar
Metal under tension
Beggin' you to touch and go
Listen to her howlin' roar
Metal under tension
Beggin' you to touch and go
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9th Feb 2013 8:49am
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9th Feb 2013 8:50am
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9th Feb 2013 9:01am
Haha, someone has said it! I enjoy my dark side too, but I was put to challenge, and even had a muse. ;)
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9th Feb 2013 9:13am
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Anonymous
9th Feb 2013 9:14am
Its always a thrill as a writer to develop new sides of yourself. A path untaken is always a challenge. Very nicely done Always!!!
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re: Re: A Writer's Duet
9th Feb 2013 9:19am
Thank you so much for stopping by Mourganna, your words are encouraging. :)
Re: A Writer's Duet
9th Feb 2013 9:31am
Descriptive and phrased beautifully. What more could I say?
Continue to bring it. Well done, Caliban.
Continue to bring it. Well done, Caliban.
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9th Feb 2013 9:36am
Nothing, what you said was perfect Evan. :) Thanks for being ever-present.
Re: A Writer's Duet
9th Feb 2013 5:41pm
Oh how Ive missed your INK! You are so amazingly talented, Annie!
You could write about paint drying on the wall and make it beautiful abstract art! :)
I love this! xoxo
You could write about paint drying on the wall and make it beautiful abstract art! :)
I love this! xoxo
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re: Re: A Writer's Duet
9th Feb 2013 10:47pm
I agree rain1courtel. You are talented. Great love piece here sweetie.
Keep spitting.
From Clio to Caliban
Keep spitting.
From Clio to Caliban
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10th Feb 2013 7:14am
i just might do that now! I can envision it in my head already. Thanks for stopping by and sharing love, doll xoxo
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10th Feb 2013 7:15am
Thank you, I wouldn't say it is a love piece at all, but it is one of affection. Thanks for stopping by <3
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10th Feb 2013 5:48am
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10th Feb 2013 7:15am
Re: A Writer's Duet
10th Feb 2013 7:03am
Relaxed lover!! Loved it.. Go Cali like how you went from I'll let you so you but you would be mine.. Perfect xoxox
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10th Feb 2013 7:16am
Yeah, that's how it should be, people are too possessive. Thanks for enjoying my write <3
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11th Feb 2013 1:05am
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Re: A Writer's Duet
17th Feb 2013 11:27pm
Ok, safe to say you've met the challenge head on and with a good confident voice. Admirable qualities in a writer to chop and change genres with some level of fluidity.
My own preference would like to see the bulk broken up into stanzas, that said the way you have it works well enough.
A fine job Miss Caliban. Hat tip to ya.
My own preference would like to see the bulk broken up into stanzas, that said the way you have it works well enough.
A fine job Miss Caliban. Hat tip to ya.
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Re: A Writer's Duet
23rd Feb 2013 9:26pm
Not sure what all this "Challenge" talk is about, but I am assuming from the other comments that this is not your particular style or genre? As someone not familiar with what you 'typically' write, all I can say is that I thought it lovely, a sensual inking with beautiful phrasing. If this is a great departure from your usual style, then you have done an even better job of it.
Lola
Lola
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Anonymous
13th Mar 2013 4:52pm
I loved it!
xo
xo
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Re: A Writer's Duet
29th Jun 2013 10:35am
I love the way you played with your words, how the picture you painting is open to the imagination, a blank canvas if you must
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17th Jul 2013 5:46am