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I want to kiss you
I crave to taste his tongue
miss the playful way
he sucks on my bottom lip
and how he moans
to the rhythm of our tongue dance
It's erotic enough to make me wet
and I can't help
but want more
of him
need more
of his seductive ways
they caress my inner goddess
without a single touch
from his hands
all he needs to do is look at my lips
and I feel that kiss
the sloppy wet
filled with passion
kiss we share
takes me to where I love to be
in his arms
with him kissing me
and I know our pain
has rode out a million miles
but strength never fades
watching the sun set alone
my spirit slowly dies
this heavy heart
filled with pang hurts
just because
I want to kiss you
every morning and every night
be there, so I can kiss you ..please
( thank you very much leppie bear xoxo)
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18th Jan 2013 4:32pm
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Re: I want to kiss you
18th Jan 2013 4:48pm
This just feels so warm.......what's gotten into you today? I know, it's his *kiss*. : )
Mmmmm Gg. I feel your words, my oldest friend.
Mmmmm Gg. I feel your words, my oldest friend.
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re: Re: I want to kiss you
18th Jan 2013 4:55pm
Re: I want to kiss you
18th Jan 2013 7:53pm
I like it... but you start out in the third person with "his" and "he" then halfway you switch to the second person...
Would you consider doing it all in one form? I would personally prefer the first. Just a suggestion for you to consider. :)
Would you consider doing it all in one form? I would personally prefer the first. Just a suggestion for you to consider. :)
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re: Re: I want to kiss you
18th Jan 2013 8:10pm
Re: I want to kiss you
18th Jan 2013 10:46pm
Wow this is really sexy. I like this a lot. I'm adding it to my list.
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Re: I want to kiss you
19th Jan 2013 5:30pm
Gigi, I think we are in the same place, I feel like you took those words out of my mind. I loved it, very heartfelt. MilkyS
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re: Re: I want to kiss you
20th Jan 2013 1:42am
Re: I want to kiss you
Anonymous
19th Jan 2013 7:26pm
Beautiful...xoxo, Bff.
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Re: I want to kiss you
20th Jan 2013 1:41pm
I love the flow, the quiet sincerity, and the images you evoke.
The transition of tense from telling of 'him,' though, and the talking to 'you' in the single stanze hitches just a bit. I think you totally pulled it off, but consider dropping the lines down with a space ... takes me to a new...
Other than that, chica, it's awesome.
The transition of tense from telling of 'him,' though, and the talking to 'you' in the single stanze hitches just a bit. I think you totally pulled it off, but consider dropping the lines down with a space ... takes me to a new...
Other than that, chica, it's awesome.
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re: Re: I want to kiss you
Yes I'm in a mess with the hers he's lol. I'm going to continue to work on it.. Ty Betty xoxox
re: Re: I want to kiss you
22nd Jan 2013 1:52pm
Re: I want to kiss you
4th Feb 2013 4:03am
I like that you spent time on just the kiss ... since sometimes that's all there need be, yep yep.
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4th Feb 2013 4:11am