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It doesn't matter
It doesn't matter what I say
nor what I've said
or how many times I've walked in your shoes
to get a glimpse of you
I tried
but never did get to feel
all that you've felt
but I cried anyway
when I said goodbye
nor what I've said
or how many times I've walked in your shoes
to get a glimpse of you
I tried
but never did get to feel
all that you've felt
but I cried anyway
when I said goodbye
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Re: It doesn't matter
28th Nov 2012 3:40am
To stand in each other's shadow is to feel the light of the shade...that which we touch is touched by us and touches us back...our tears are the proof.
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re: Re: It doesn't matter
28th Nov 2012 3:41am
Re: It doesn't matter
28th Nov 2012 3:43am
Gigi.
wonderful sentiments, nice come back write.
I reckon the picture might have knocked your structure off a little. It'll only take a sec to sort that:
It doesn't matter what I say
nor what I've said
or how many times I've walked in your shoes
to get a glimpse of you
I tried
but never did get to feel
all that you've felt
but I cried anyway
when I said goodbye
good job Gigi, welcome back.
wonderful sentiments, nice come back write.
I reckon the picture might have knocked your structure off a little. It'll only take a sec to sort that:
It doesn't matter what I say
nor what I've said
or how many times I've walked in your shoes
to get a glimpse of you
I tried
but never did get to feel
all that you've felt
but I cried anyway
when I said goodbye
good job Gigi, welcome back.
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re: Re: It doesn't matter
28th Nov 2012 3:44am
Re: It doesn't matter
28th Nov 2012 5:46am
Hey mama..indeed a fine comeback.
Simple and concise writing with a heavy hanging vibe... Honest, a bit sad, very easy to empathize with this author...
Cheers m'dear, great write
Simple and concise writing with a heavy hanging vibe... Honest, a bit sad, very easy to empathize with this author...
Cheers m'dear, great write
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re: Re: It doesn't matter
28th Nov 2012 6:00am
Re: It doesn't matter
28th Nov 2012 2:07pm
Re: It doesn't matter
29th Nov 2012 1:47pm
Re: It doesn't matter
30th Nov 2012 1:19pm
You are strong :) I've been away as well and delighted to see you sharing bits and pieces of your depths.
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