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Anonymous
26th Nov 2012 00:20am
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26th Nov 2012 3:27pm
26th Nov 2012 11:24am
Ophie
brilliance in your calculated words again!
I can go on interpreting in detail ...cos you offer that much scope to a reader in me..though as one always say, perception varies & that's even better for creativity, the slight open-ended ness one aims at!
breathing eclipsed by longing so much that you showcase two things out of it..one in L2 where it is shows as a sort of non-primary event felt as a disturbing activity; the other in the title,"don't forget", flashing a warning to a deeply lost subject in pining.
am reminded of succint couplets (like to say, the epic thirukkural, in Tamil literature..where I had come across such styles)
thanxx again for this read:)
brilliance in your calculated words again!
I can go on interpreting in detail ...cos you offer that much scope to a reader in me..though as one always say, perception varies & that's even better for creativity, the slight open-ended ness one aims at!
breathing eclipsed by longing so much that you showcase two things out of it..one in L2 where it is shows as a sort of non-primary event felt as a disturbing activity; the other in the title,"don't forget", flashing a warning to a deeply lost subject in pining.
am reminded of succint couplets (like to say, the epic thirukkural, in Tamil literature..where I had come across such styles)
thanxx again for this read:)
26th Nov 2012 3:29pm
Uma, im very interested in your interpretation. Thank you for your brilliant insight. Yes breathing is felt like a disturbing activity which is almost forced into the speaker.
29th Nov 2012 11:28am
22nd Dec 2012 2:30am
I wonder if instead of a "burden," the awareness of taking breaths is not a wonder, quite mysterious even. As I've said, for what it matters, I really like your shorter poetry, which is, incidentally, harder to do, to pull off: but you do it well.
marcella1
marcella1
22nd Dec 2012 7:17pm
you're absolutely right, breathing is such a mischievous thing after all.
thank you Marcella. The fact that you consider my poetry as worth reading is, truly, an honour.
thank you Marcella. The fact that you consider my poetry as worth reading is, truly, an honour.
11th Mar 2013 2:12am
I love the simplistic of this poem. It told a story in such few words that I exhaled
Wonderful!
Much Love
G
Wonderful!
Much Love
G
11th Mar 2013 2:06pm
Anonymous
7th Apr 2013 2:04pm
Really like this..one to ponder. Nice pen
7th Apr 2013 8:13pm
14th Dec 2013 8:55pm
i once wrote
epicurial poetry
then sliced them afresh
now i hate reading more than seven lines
but you i admire
as you say so much
in so little
like a touch on an elbow
i gave a class gal
years ago
a German
till today I recall her say
....Miss see...
then she wiped off her lips
no smile
no frown
but silence came over her
she knew i did not do it on purpose
i learned then and there
i am and will always be miss -understood
as i always am
now and till today
epicurial poetry
then sliced them afresh
now i hate reading more than seven lines
but you i admire
as you say so much
in so little
like a touch on an elbow
i gave a class gal
years ago
a German
till today I recall her say
....Miss see...
then she wiped off her lips
no smile
no frown
but silence came over her
she knew i did not do it on purpose
i learned then and there
i am and will always be miss -understood
as i always am
now and till today
Anonymous
6th Sep 2017 10:42pm
you power lines- excellent poems.
