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Dead Eyes
This lisle strand of sanity is unweaving from the seams
Poignant regrets hounding me with chastise misery
My languid thoughts are consumed with insensitive memories
As it rains with stark insanity upon my turmoil of despair
Can I just drown in nightdreams with a chorus of whiskey lullabies?
I love the abuse of this tormented mental rape
Is nostalgia more than just an emotion?
Perhaps a melancholy way of life
Just a broken vinyl record repeating the same sentence
And the ecstasy attained from sagacious verses
Throw me into icy volcano oceans of yesterday
So I may thaw the bitterness that has crystallized my onyx soul
For reality has crept swiftly like the silhouette of a serial killer rapist
And I have succumbed into the calamity of noxious toxic abyss
It seems my perception of suicide is far greater than the mere concept of a physical death
Poignant regrets hounding me with chastise misery
My languid thoughts are consumed with insensitive memories
As it rains with stark insanity upon my turmoil of despair
Can I just drown in nightdreams with a chorus of whiskey lullabies?
I love the abuse of this tormented mental rape
Is nostalgia more than just an emotion?
Perhaps a melancholy way of life
Just a broken vinyl record repeating the same sentence
And the ecstasy attained from sagacious verses
Throw me into icy volcano oceans of yesterday
So I may thaw the bitterness that has crystallized my onyx soul
For reality has crept swiftly like the silhouette of a serial killer rapist
And I have succumbed into the calamity of noxious toxic abyss
It seems my perception of suicide is far greater than the mere concept of a physical death
Published 23rd Nov 2012
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23rd Nov 2012 10:08pm
wow this is great, every stanza is deep and I find myself relating to every part of this
well written piece!
:)
well written piece!
:)
23rd Nov 2012 10:21pm
Thank you nikki it's a bit vulnerable but I needed to let it out. (Glad?) you can relate and that you enjoyed it.
23rd Nov 2012 10:09pm
superb start to finish sixx. i'd quote every line.
i love the from poetic to almost scientific observation closer. well done.
i love the from poetic to almost scientific observation closer. well done.
23rd Nov 2012 10:27pm
Thank you sir, I'm honored you feel such a way about it. As a quiet spectator I tend to write what I have observed, from the nouns around me to myself.
23rd Nov 2012 10:20pm
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24th Nov 2012 9:18am
funny, i have a poem wit the same title, not here though, but hmmm. interesting.
i like the idea of whiskey lullabies, and noxious abyss. i'll bury those away in my word bank to use later :)
i like the idea of whiskey lullabies, and noxious abyss. i'll bury those away in my word bank to use later :)
24th Nov 2012 10:11pm
So w both have a messed up doll named Dorothy and a poem called dead eyes, I wonder what else we have in common wing haha.
And thanks, feel free to use it anytime.
And thanks, feel free to use it anytime.
26th Nov 2012 2:57am
wonderful metaphors (to many to quote. Dark and disturbing. I know what's it like to fall into the "toxic abyss" (mine was wine, lot's of it), and sit in apathy and dwell over better times. And again, you helped expand my vocab. I thought the second word of the poem was incorrect (I thought it should be "little" spelt incorrectly), but I looked it up before I commented and found the word you used. Thanks again.
26th Nov 2012 3:53am
Glad you can use me as a dictionary haha. Yes, this was a personal piece I was almost sure people would relate to. Your most welcome, and I thank you as well.
