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Bittersweet
as american as artificial sweetener
plastic pomegranate seeds
and desensitized pineapple grenades
sweating on the butcher's block
fat enough on undeserved decadence
to be a devout preacher of entitlement
praying
to the deities
of talks too much
spill enough beans
a seed is sure to sprout
given
enough fertilizer
and insecticides
the strong armed robbery
of diversity
will convince even sugar
to concede its sweet
all hail the maize gods syrup
as patriotic
as attention deficit
plastic pomegranate seeds
and desensitized pineapple grenades
sweating on the butcher's block
fat enough on undeserved decadence
to be a devout preacher of entitlement
praying
to the deities
of talks too much
spill enough beans
a seed is sure to sprout
given
enough fertilizer
and insecticides
the strong armed robbery
of diversity
will convince even sugar
to concede its sweet
all hail the maize gods syrup
as patriotic
as attention deficit
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Re: Bittersweet
14th Sep 2012 8:08pm
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14th Sep 2012 8:36pm
Nikkimoe..thank ya kindly...not familiar w monster food will do a lil looksee
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Anonymous
14th Sep 2012 8:15pm
Wonderful lightbaron....Strider

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14th Sep 2012 8:37pm
Re: Bittersweet
14th Sep 2012 8:41pm
Commenting like I do you run out of nice things to say! When it comes to the good poets. Anyways back to the point! I'll just from now on say "one" when I like it. (you know like one love :-)) or 6 for I don't like it! (devils #) lol ! Anyways 1
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re: Re: Bittersweet
14th Sep 2012 8:50pm
Ha...thought you say one-cause its that hood shit. Like when you hang up or say bye,its "one" or "bat"...ha,at least thats some philly hood shit..i digress..preciate your system,and your swingin through
Re: Bittersweet
Anonymous
- Edited 15th Sep 2012 00:15am
15th Sep 2012 00:14am
Okay, BFF. . .So I give this a "One"!
Aside from this poem being "Bittersweet", Lightbaron, I enjoyed your sugar-coated word play. Nicely done;)
Devlin
Aside from this poem being "Bittersweet", Lightbaron, I enjoyed your sugar-coated word play. Nicely done;)
Devlin

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re: Re: Bittersweet
15th Sep 2012 00:40am
Very good..i thank ya for your whimsical feedback.
Bff?
We can be best friends but cant promise forever
Bff?
We can be best friends but cant promise forever
Re: Bittersweet
15th Sep 2012 00:22am
Odd metaphors, but they work. Kind of a haunting sort of piece. Very interesting. x) I like.
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15th Sep 2012 00:37am
Re: Bittersweet
Anonymous
15th Sep 2012 1:42am
guess i'll have to throw a couple of ones at you as well then; nice idea, some grown-up observations without laying it on, clever word choices, tight little stanzas....and held on to it all the way.
back-pat moment.
dp
back-pat moment.
dp

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re: Re: Bittersweet
15th Sep 2012 3:40am
Feels good coming from your corner...very much appreciate your comment,thanks.
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15th Sep 2012 5:12am
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