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Perfect
I went car shopping today
Seen my favorite car parked on the first lot I stopped at
perfect timing
Mirror image blue it was
My favorite color
Perfect luck
The sun was beaming on it's frame
Looked like last nights sky from where I stood
The price was in my limit
perfect
leather seats
With a sunroof
Fully loaded
Perfectly perfect
But when I walked up to her
She was empty
Just a beautiful object
Too Perfectly familiar
Seen my favorite car parked on the first lot I stopped at
perfect timing
Mirror image blue it was
My favorite color
Perfect luck
The sun was beaming on it's frame
Looked like last nights sky from where I stood
The price was in my limit
perfect
leather seats
With a sunroof
Fully loaded
Perfectly perfect
But when I walked up to her
She was empty
Just a beautiful object
Too Perfectly familiar
Published 24th Jul 2012
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24th Jul 2012 5:47am
24th Jul 2012 6:07am
Thank you very much. I thought it was a bit cheesy but I didn't care so I went with it,
24th Jul 2012 7:40am
Cheesy not even close...
If ones not reading it
proper they will miss
The entire point of it... =)
Keep doing what you do
My friend I look forward
To it... =)
If ones not reading it
proper they will miss
The entire point of it... =)
Keep doing what you do
My friend I look forward
To it... =)
24th Jul 2012 2:56pm
24th Jul 2012 8:57am
Ha, I know some people who are like this.
Two things:
L1, I think you meant "went"
Last line, "too"
sorry, it's all I could add for way of honest critique :)
Two things:
L1, I think you meant "went"
Last line, "too"
sorry, it's all I could add for way of honest critique :)
24th Jul 2012 2:57pm
24th Jul 2012 12:07pm
A world of empty pretties to ooh and aah over.
That kind of shopping will wear your ass out. :)
That kind of shopping will wear your ass out. :)
24th Jul 2012 2:58pm
24th Jul 2012 5:09pm
24th Jul 2012 5:20pm
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24th Jul 2012 10:32pm
Woah, GiGi. . .what to say, what to say? I'm twiddling my thumbs 'cause I have nothing to say except. . .WOW!!
25th Jul 2012 00:21am
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11th Aug 2012 12:54pm
The sun was beaming on it's frame
Looked like last nights sky from where I stood
The price was in my limit
Love that part. Really spoke volumes.
Nice to meet ya!
Looked like last nights sky from where I stood
The price was in my limit
Love that part. Really spoke volumes.
Nice to meet ya!
11th Aug 2012 2:16pm
