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The Lonliness
The loneliness
It grabs at my heart
The loneliness
An affair from the start
The loneliness
You pulled me in
The loneliness
I'm your broken sin
The loneliness
I hope and pray
The loneliness
You made me pay
Chorus
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
Never knew how to be strong
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
I'm no hero till I'm gone
You took me in
You gave me a pen
You showed me your bed
You gave me head
You fed me your food
Changed my dark mood
Washed my dirty shirt
Love songs I did blurt
I'm trying to change
But my heart is mange
I'm a dirty dog
My life in the bog
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
My loneliness a song
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
My heart beats long ....
It grabs at my heart
The loneliness
An affair from the start
The loneliness
You pulled me in
The loneliness
I'm your broken sin
The loneliness
I hope and pray
The loneliness
You made me pay
Chorus
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
Never knew how to be strong
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
I'm no hero till I'm gone
You took me in
You gave me a pen
You showed me your bed
You gave me head
You fed me your food
Changed my dark mood
Washed my dirty shirt
Love songs I did blurt
I'm trying to change
But my heart is mange
I'm a dirty dog
My life in the bog
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
My loneliness a song
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
My heart beats long ....
Published 9th Mar 2025
Author's Note
I never wrote a song before
Is this a song ?
I don't know
Maybe I should go
Inspired by Jason Isbell's new release "Foxes in the Snow"
Is this a song ?
I don't know
Maybe I should go
Inspired by Jason Isbell's new release "Foxes in the Snow"
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9th Mar 2025 7:47pm
9th Mar 2025 8:29pm
Thanks so much ID
It's my first attempt at song writing
Wrote it fast
Maybe that's the key
Appreciate your comment RL
Means a lot to me ..
It's my first attempt at song writing
Wrote it fast
Maybe that's the key
Appreciate your comment RL
Means a lot to me ..
9th Mar 2025 7:54pm
9th Mar 2025 8:31pm
Never wrote a song before
Maybe a new avenue for this old cowboy 🤠
BIG THANKS Fia
Maybe a new avenue for this old cowboy 🤠
BIG THANKS Fia
9th Mar 2025 8:28pm
9th Mar 2025 8:33pm
9th Mar 2025 9:18pm
9th Mar 2025 9:26pm
Thanks so much Keith
I wanted to do this one day and it it turned out to be today ...
Appreciate
I wanted to do this one day and it it turned out to be today ...
Appreciate
9th Mar 2025 9:43pm
Heck yeah! Nice job. Now you just need to sing it! Come on, I know you can...
❤️k
❤️k
IDK
I've got a singing voice like a open can of cat food left out in the sun.
Translation: unpleasant
Then again look at Dylan...
Thanks k 😍
:
I've got a singing voice like a open can of cat food left out in the sun.
Translation: unpleasant
Then again look at Dylan...
Thanks k 😍
:
9th Mar 2025 9:54pm
9th Mar 2025 9:57pm
Wow
I’m happy to hear that Willow
Do you ever listen to Jason Isbell ?
He really inspires me ..
Thanks !
I’m happy to hear that Willow
Do you ever listen to Jason Isbell ?
He really inspires me ..
Thanks !
9th Mar 2025 10:07pm
9th Mar 2025 10:24pm
BiG THANKS WENDY !!
Got these first line in my head and then was off to the races ..,
Stay tuned ..
Got these first line in my head and then was off to the races ..,
Stay tuned ..
I feel this is a song as This has deepness and depth and confidence and real evidence of emotions, for sure loneliness is a hard thing to deal with in life and love but yet we sometimes have to learn to navigate through the process of the storms of life 💪👊👍
9th Mar 2025 11:33pm
Yes
Absolutely Stoney
This is the trials and tribulations of romance.
Ebb and flow in a lyrical attempt …
Thank you Sir
Absolutely Stoney
This is the trials and tribulations of romance.
Ebb and flow in a lyrical attempt …
Thank you Sir
9th Mar 2025 11:44pm
Not bad at writing skills to create a song of loneliness, that has the depth and deepness built from inner emotions and genuine feelings ✍️👏💪👍👊💯
9th Mar 2025 11:48pm
It kind of wrote itself once I got going.
All these years listening the great songwriters finally is paying dividends ..
All these years listening the great songwriters finally is paying dividends ..
10th Mar 2025 12:21pm
Well Done 👍✅ thanks for sharing your thoughts for music is amazing when we can create a song that is inspiring and touches the very core of the mind and heart through sounds 🎸🎺🎷🎻🎹🪇🪗🪈
Anonymous
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10th Mar 2025 00:13am
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10th Mar 2025 00:29am
Poetspeak rebirth!
Hey, you never know what's buried beneath...
Thx for your comment and RL trophy
Wow !!
Hey, you never know what's buried beneath...
Thx for your comment and RL trophy
Wow !!
10th Mar 2025 00:28am
10th Mar 2025 7:53pm
10th Mar 2025 2:32am
10th Mar 2025 2:34am
10th Mar 2025 2:12pm
Loneliness makes us doubt ourselves.
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
Never knew how to be strong
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
“I'm no hero till I'm gone”
But we are hero’s all along.
Awesome poem, awesome song!
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
Never knew how to be strong
I was wrong, wrong, wrong
“I'm no hero till I'm gone”
But we are hero’s all along.
Awesome poem, awesome song!
10th Mar 2025 3:50pm
You are absolutely right about doubting one’s self !!
It’s great to see you here again NG
Yes, my first step into writing lyrics
It was a fun process.
And yes, we are heroes for so many reasons.
Fighting the fight .. always
Thank you for your comment and RL add !
It’s great to see you here again NG
Yes, my first step into writing lyrics
It was a fun process.
And yes, we are heroes for so many reasons.
Fighting the fight .. always
Thank you for your comment and RL add !
13th Mar 2025 2:42am
It's your song, Gary. It's awesome.
You're quite a guy here. No DUP without U. As I've told you!
You're quite a guy here. No DUP without U. As I've told you!
13th Mar 2025 2:49am
Many thanks Mark
There comes a time ....
Dup might be ending but I have a feeling many of us will meet again sometime in a literary paradise !!
Thanks brother Mark
Appreciate the RL AWARD !!
There comes a time ....
Dup might be ending but I have a feeling many of us will meet again sometime in a literary paradise !!
Thanks brother Mark
Appreciate the RL AWARD !!
13th Mar 2025 3:03am
13th Mar 2025 3:13am
Wow
Wouldn't that be something ?
Only won that once way back 8 years ago..
High Praise from you Betty and I L-O-V-E it Sister Sex !!
Thank you for the honor 🎖
Wouldn't that be something ?
Only won that once way back 8 years ago..
High Praise from you Betty and I L-O-V-E it Sister Sex !!
Thank you for the honor 🎖
22nd Mar 2025 2:12am
I get the feeling you'd pick up a guitar and play some chords to this.
Add lyricist to your list of skills.
Poet...never ceases to amaze.
BL
Add lyricist to your list of skills.
Poet...never ceases to amaze.
BL
22nd Mar 2025 11:18am
I was inspired by Broken Titanium, she's the power house here.
Being a lyricist and a poet are kissing cousins so it came pretty easy to write. It...
BIG APPRECIATE WALLY
THANKS
Being a lyricist and a poet are kissing cousins so it came pretty easy to write. It...
BIG APPRECIATE WALLY
THANKS
