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intimacy
as soon as he saw his reflection in my eyes
colorful rivers rose on my cheeks
as soon as he put his head on my shoulder
i became like an evening even in the middle of the day
as soon as he moved his brush laden with hot ink on my lips
i scattered on his chest like the colours of a rainbow
as soon as he pressed my muffins,
i bowed down like a plant in shame
as soon as he licked my honey-roasted thighs
fragrant lychee drops flowed from me
as soon as his rough tongue kissed my roots
a new world adorned with sweet sin came into existence...
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Yesterday 5:39pm
Sweet sin came into existence. What a great line to a great poem. That's the kind of sin I'll never turn down. I wish I could be him tasting you. I'm sure he was in nirvana.
Today 4:50am
liked your words very much... there is a hunger hidden in them... stay tuned, may be your wish will come true soon...
Yesterday 6:50pm
I could visualise the embraced meeting in these verse:
as soon as he put his head on my shoulder
i became like an evening even in the middle of the day
as soon as he moved his brush laden with hot ink on my lips
i scattered on his chest like the colours of a rainbow
as soon as he pressed my muffins,
i bowed down like a plant in shame
as soon as he put his head on my shoulder
i became like an evening even in the middle of the day
as soon as he moved his brush laden with hot ink on my lips
i scattered on his chest like the colours of a rainbow
as soon as he pressed my muffins,
i bowed down like a plant in shame
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Today 2:36am
I do notice your sincere effort to make this truly "poetic", and you did it well. It's a very tender and not too vivid write. Great word choices. Well done, Dimpy. Great write.
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