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Walls
Take your
Judgement
Let it rest
My heart
On sleeve
Represents
Drink my flaws
Here right now
I'll break
These walls
Someway
Somehow
Judgement
Let it rest
My heart
On sleeve
Represents
Drink my flaws
Here right now
I'll break
These walls
Someway
Somehow
Published 22nd Jan 2025
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22nd Jan 2025 10:49am
Dear P,
I like the pluck and determination in this piece. Its staccato rhythm means business for me. Lets me know there’s a dependability in your character. I really dig that. H🌷
I like the pluck and determination in this piece. Its staccato rhythm means business for me. Lets me know there’s a dependability in your character. I really dig that. H🌷
22nd Jan 2025 9:25pm
Aww Thank You Honoria for your kind words and yes it's my middle name haha 🙃♥️
22nd Jan 2025 11:46am
Those last three lines are simply stunning. So many have walls, the challenge is to tear them down.
Yet another awesome piece, Pete 🖤
Yet another awesome piece, Pete 🖤
22nd Jan 2025 12:33pm
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22nd Jan 2025 6:28pm
The idea of infusing one's self with another's flaws is actually beautiful. How better to understand them? Brilliant!
22nd Jan 2025 8:38pm
22nd Jan 2025 9:59pm
Powerful write, Pete. I liked this a lot my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
Damian
23rd Jan 2025 00:36am
23rd Jan 2025 1:08am
Drink my flaws..That is powerful. Letting someone in to see it is nerve wracking but to ingest it to know how it feels is a whole different level. Like this.
23rd Jan 2025 10:10am
