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Who Am I To Judge?
I write from my center
Where hopefully creativity is found
Preferring silence's grip
When there is no other around
Sometimes what I write is naughty
On some occasions even mean
Touches on topics not spoken
Deemed taboo or not to be seem
I write about an injustice
Maybe handed down in time
That history's books have glossed over
Wanting to erase from the mind
Take to keyboard sometimes in lust
Focused on the opposite sex
My words might be messy
Not even sure what will come out next
From time to time I might be funny
Untended as a goal
The constant is my words
Are coming from the soul
So you don't need to attack me
If those words aren't your cup of tea
For words come from thoughts
They are connected don't you see?
We go down a dangerous slope
When we appoint ourselves to judge
What is and isn't art
Instead try a polite nudge
And if you truly dislike
You are free not to read
Won't catch me being a censor
So much an anathema to my creed
Where hopefully creativity is found
Preferring silence's grip
When there is no other around
Sometimes what I write is naughty
On some occasions even mean
Touches on topics not spoken
Deemed taboo or not to be seem
I write about an injustice
Maybe handed down in time
That history's books have glossed over
Wanting to erase from the mind
Take to keyboard sometimes in lust
Focused on the opposite sex
My words might be messy
Not even sure what will come out next
From time to time I might be funny
Untended as a goal
The constant is my words
Are coming from the soul
So you don't need to attack me
If those words aren't your cup of tea
For words come from thoughts
They are connected don't you see?
We go down a dangerous slope
When we appoint ourselves to judge
What is and isn't art
Instead try a polite nudge
And if you truly dislike
You are free not to read
Won't catch me being a censor
So much an anathema to my creed
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wow
20th May 2012 4:00pm
This is amazing!
I never thought of writing from this perspective..
But it's great (:
Thanks for insight, and a great read!
I never thought of writing from this perspective..
But it's great (:
Thanks for insight, and a great read!
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re: wow
20th May 2012 4:24pm
Thanks; this is basically the result of discussion from yesterday with one poet being perhaps a common link to a stern critique I was given a few months ago. (Long story)
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Anonymous
20th May 2012 4:17pm
I love this-I feel it could be my theme song as I preach this sermon more than all others. I really like the way you wrote this and I agree with Kristany-it's a nice perspective to write on and from..Peace, Miki
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re: Re: Who Am I To Judge?
20th May 2012 4:29pm
As I mentioned to Kristany this was my answer to a discussion. I really didn't feel like getting involved in that debate and crafted my reply here. I was trying to respond the way McCartney did to Lennon's observation that Paul always came up with "silly love songs", but just didn't feel like writing an erotic poem.
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20th May 2012 4:38pm
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20th May 2012 5:24pm
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Anonymous
20th May 2012 6:42pm
I love this and I just got done reading your comment on my last poem and your mentioning of Bob Dylan about turning the tables...
This is for you:
"Oh the history books tell it
They tell it so well
The cavalries charged
The Indians fell
The cavalries charged
The Indians died
Oh the country was young
With God on its side
Oh the Spanish-American
War had its day
And the Civil War too
Was soon laid away
And the names of the heroes
l’s made to memorize
With guns in their hands
And God on their side"
Love it x
This is for you:
"Oh the history books tell it
They tell it so well
The cavalries charged
The Indians fell
The cavalries charged
The Indians died
Oh the country was young
With God on its side
Oh the Spanish-American
War had its day
And the Civil War too
Was soon laid away
And the names of the heroes
l’s made to memorize
With guns in their hands
And God on their side"
Love it x
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re: Re: Who Am I To Judge?
Wow very impressive; I am fairly certain I am older then you and I know for a fact that the lyrics you mentioned were composed before I was born!
I can't always say I have appreciated Dylan's voice but the writing is typically top notch!
Thanks for the comment!
I can't always say I have appreciated Dylan's voice but the writing is typically top notch!
Thanks for the comment!
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Anonymous
21st May 2012 00:41am
He can get away with singing Like a Rollin Stone and maybe even the aforementioned (in your comment to me) You gonna serve somebody!
Most great singers do justice to his astonishing writing though!
Most great singers do justice to his astonishing writing though!
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re: re: re: Re: Who Am I To Judge?
21st May 2012 3:59am
Yeah and I have to say when he is singing, I always know it his him, although many have tried to sound like him!
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Anonymous
21st May 2012 1:46am
Dear Poet
Thank you for your writing
This is positive feedback
Keep up the good work
I look forward to reading you
Remember that with every submission
You increase your experience
Just a hello...on the Internet
From so far away
Who knows, we may meet
Face to face, one day
Peace
Kitty
Thank you for your writing
This is positive feedback
Keep up the good work
I look forward to reading you
Remember that with every submission
You increase your experience
Just a hello...on the Internet
From so far away
Who knows, we may meet
Face to face, one day
Peace
Kitty
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re: Re: Who Am I To Judge?
Kitty as far as I am concerned most feedback even the negative type can be used in a positive way. I think that is what we agree on; it is one thing to critique a writer's work but quite another to dismiss it categorically as bereft of any value.
Hi Jazz
Anonymous
21st May 2012 4:47am
You see this is the reason why I follow your work. I am speechless:)
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re: Hi Jazz
You are kind but it could be that there is no possible response to the stuff(crap) floating around in my head!
Re: Who Am I To Judge?
23rd May 2012 6:58pm
Not only does this have a good word choice and rhym scheme but it just puts so much into perspective and what goes through a writer's head. Well done!
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23rd May 2012 10:58pm
Gracias! Much of the credit goes to somelikeithot; who related to me the "debate" that took place here.
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13th Aug 2013 7:15pm
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14th Aug 2013 6:49am
Thank you! You just made my night! It always feels good to know an older poem still has interest!