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Alone
Play with me like a slave.
Tell me, we're the same.
Amuse me with your games.
I'm not alone.
Train me to behave.
Ill take all your lies and praise.
Offer me hypnotic ways.
I'm not alone.
Invite me to the stage.
Ill just pace inside the cage.
Entice me with your plague.
I'm not alone.
Ill act with no pay.
I'm the light; a distant ray.
Like a mime, ill never say,
"I'm not alone"
Tell me, we're the same.
Amuse me with your games.
I'm not alone.
Train me to behave.
Ill take all your lies and praise.
Offer me hypnotic ways.
I'm not alone.
Invite me to the stage.
Ill just pace inside the cage.
Entice me with your plague.
I'm not alone.
Ill act with no pay.
I'm the light; a distant ray.
Like a mime, ill never say,
"I'm not alone"
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Re. Alone
15th Nov 2024 6:18pm
I like the angst and lust angle.
Got a rough and ready vibe a man like me searches for....
BIG LIKE
Got a rough and ready vibe a man like me searches for....
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15th Nov 2024 7:20pm
Re. Alone
15th Nov 2024 6:36pm
your great ink explores themes of isolation and the complex dynamics of control and performance. The repetition of "I'm not alone" contrasts with the feelings of confinement and manipulation, creating a haunting sense of longing for connection. The imagery of the cage and the stage evokes a vivid emotional landscape. It’s a thought-provoking piece that captures the struggle between vulnerability and the desire for companionship. Well done!
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Re: Re. Alone
Thank you! Your insight captured exactly what I hoped people would feel from this. It's exactly how I feel. And how i hope others will connect to it and be inspired. <3
Re. Alone
15th Nov 2024 7:08pm
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15th Nov 2024 7:22pm
Re. Alone
15th Nov 2024 8:15pm
I'm glad your not alone. I was going to tell you that you are alone in this big bad world. Nice poem. I like.
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Re: Re. Alone
15th Nov 2024 8:25pm
Mr nice guy ^^^ is supposed to save me but I had to save myself. What a dick. Hmpf!
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15th Nov 2024 11:12pm
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16th Nov 2024 2:01am
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Re. Alone
15th Nov 2024 9:38pm
You got me with “I’ll just pace inside the cage.”
Both metaphorically and realistically.
I love this.
Both metaphorically and realistically.
I love this.
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16th Nov 2024 00:48am
Re. Alone
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Re. Alone
22nd Nov 2024 1:21pm
'Tell me we're the same'. Hehm, that may be difficult unless he is a slave too. A slave to your vulnerability maybe? 😉
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22nd Nov 2024 2:53pm
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