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Murder of Crows
We are all made of bloodclay
at one with the earth
warm with all directions
wherever they may lead
Molded by measures of love
and the presence of hate
baked by life and
a cob oven sun
My sand brown eyes
with tearless vision
watch them form
circles of oblivion
hovering above my head
A halo of crows
coloring a black witch sky
waiting for me
to trip and shatter
But they misunderstand
the air and the beat
of the sun on their wings
and I wonder if they
realize I am not the prey
And in some ways
we are alike
both meant to roam
rummaging for signs and nests
searching for food, for life
Prompting me to be steadfast
fearless in my Spanish stance
armed with terracotta skin
and wrapped in my hair's
longest blackest cloak
Withering life into the wind
signaling the start to
the quickest deathblow
between the fate of my flesh
and the hunger of a
Murder of Crows
at one with the earth
warm with all directions
wherever they may lead
Molded by measures of love
and the presence of hate
baked by life and
a cob oven sun
My sand brown eyes
with tearless vision
watch them form
circles of oblivion
hovering above my head
A halo of crows
coloring a black witch sky
waiting for me
to trip and shatter
But they misunderstand
the air and the beat
of the sun on their wings
and I wonder if they
realize I am not the prey
And in some ways
we are alike
both meant to roam
rummaging for signs and nests
searching for food, for life
Prompting me to be steadfast
fearless in my Spanish stance
armed with terracotta skin
and wrapped in my hair's
longest blackest cloak
Withering life into the wind
signaling the start to
the quickest deathblow
between the fate of my flesh
and the hunger of a
Murder of Crows
Author's Note
Just trying something a little dark.
Wrote while listening to - It's an awesome song!!!
It totally kicked my ass! - hahaha
Wolf Alice - Visions of a Life
https://youtu.be/bD5VkunwzZg
Wrote while listening to - It's an awesome song!!!
It totally kicked my ass! - hahaha
Wolf Alice - Visions of a Life
https://youtu.be/bD5VkunwzZg
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Re. Murder of Crows
16th Sep 2024 00:11am
Re: Re. Murder of Crows
16th Sep 2024 00:28am
Hi LDF:)
I redo line breaks all the time!! LOL
I'm stoked you enjoyed the write - it came in flashes
of pictures.
Thanks for the RL and stopping by!
I redo line breaks all the time!! LOL
I'm stoked you enjoyed the write - it came in flashes
of pictures.
Thanks for the RL and stopping by!
Re. Murder of Crows
16th Sep 2024 00:30am
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16th Sep 2024 00:32am
Re. Murder of Crows
16th Sep 2024 00:34am
Re: Re. Murder of Crows
16th Sep 2024 00:40am
Hi Tams!
Thank you. I edited this all day.
I'm so happy you dug this!
The first time I heard them called
a murder of crows - I had to use that as a title!!
Thanks for the RL too!
Thank you. I edited this all day.
I'm so happy you dug this!
The first time I heard them called
a murder of crows - I had to use that as a title!!
Thanks for the RL too!
Anonymous
- Edited 19th Dec 2024 5:45pm
16th Sep 2024 00:47am
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Re: Re. Murder of Crows
18th Sep 2024 00:58am
Hey Tim!
I must have just logged off after you posted this comment!!
Sorry I missed ya.
Intrigue is a must in writing - otherwise
it's hard to get people to read it. I'm so happy you
decided to stop by for a read:)
Thanks for your snaps on this write!
I must have just logged off after you posted this comment!!
Sorry I missed ya.
Intrigue is a must in writing - otherwise
it's hard to get people to read it. I'm so happy you
decided to stop by for a read:)
Thanks for your snaps on this write!
Re. Murder of Crows
16th Sep 2024 1:16am
Re: Re. Murder of Crows
18th Sep 2024 1:03am
Hey Joe!
I gotta ask - why Average Joe???
Anyone who uses the word esoteric is not average. LOL
I seriously looked it up to see what it means.
So thank you for that wonderful comment. Anyone who writes
to the beat of their own drum - for me - what an enormous compliment:)
I'm glad you enjoyed the write amigo!
I gotta ask - why Average Joe???
Anyone who uses the word esoteric is not average. LOL
I seriously looked it up to see what it means.
So thank you for that wonderful comment. Anyone who writes
to the beat of their own drum - for me - what an enormous compliment:)
I'm glad you enjoyed the write amigo!
Re: Re. Murder of Crows
18th Sep 2024 11:13pm
Why Average Joe?
Because I'm no one special, nothing to write home about. There's no mysterious back story. I'm not an "influencer." I live simply. I'm just me and that's good enough for me.
Because I'm no one special, nothing to write home about. There's no mysterious back story. I'm not an "influencer." I live simply. I'm just me and that's good enough for me.
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Re. Murder of Crows
Anonymous
16th Sep 2024 2:13am
This is so full of powerful imagery!
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Re: Re. Murder of Crows
18th Sep 2024 1:05am
Hi Con:)
I always like to show people a unique image when writing.
It's challenging and feeds me in a way. I heard the definition of a murder of crows and had to use it for at title.
Thanks for stopping by for a read.
Glad you enjoyed the scenery.
I always like to show people a unique image when writing.
It's challenging and feeds me in a way. I heard the definition of a murder of crows and had to use it for at title.
Thanks for stopping by for a read.
Glad you enjoyed the scenery.
Re. Murder of Crows
16th Sep 2024 3:25am
Dear A,
“And in some ways
we are alike
both meant to roam
rummaging for signs and nests
searching for food, for life”
This is poetic gold to me, so’s the rest but that just grabbed both my shoulders and shook my head until my eyes spun like pinwheels. Some days replicate this behavior to a T.
As per, I enjoyed each stanza for all the incredible imagery you create by the flick of your pen. Each stanza stands alone and together creates a story line that is darkly fab. H🌷
“And in some ways
we are alike
both meant to roam
rummaging for signs and nests
searching for food, for life”
This is poetic gold to me, so’s the rest but that just grabbed both my shoulders and shook my head until my eyes spun like pinwheels. Some days replicate this behavior to a T.
As per, I enjoyed each stanza for all the incredible imagery you create by the flick of your pen. Each stanza stands alone and together creates a story line that is darkly fab. H🌷
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Re: Re. Murder of Crows
18th Sep 2024 1:09am
Hi H!
I worked on this write for about two days. I edited it multiple times and this is what I came up with. That stanza was added later in the poem after I had the imagery down and I felt it.
You know that feeling when you find a little nugget of gold in your writing - so thank you for noticing and pointing it out:)
It's always a blessing and a gift when you leave
a comment and a RL!!!
Thanks you so much for all of your continued support chica!
I worked on this write for about two days. I edited it multiple times and this is what I came up with. That stanza was added later in the poem after I had the imagery down and I felt it.
You know that feeling when you find a little nugget of gold in your writing - so thank you for noticing and pointing it out:)
It's always a blessing and a gift when you leave
a comment and a RL!!!
Thanks you so much for all of your continued support chica!
Re. Murder of Crows
16th Sep 2024 3:37am
Brilliantly written, Adelphina. Great dark poem. Into the list it belongs. Appreciate you.
DL
DL
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Re: Re. Murder of Crows
18th Sep 2024 1:13am
Hi Damien!
Aww, thank you. It's that time of season. I like dabbling in all sorts of genre. Expanding the mind is a must in writing. The last thing I want to be is predictable!! LOL
thanks for the RL amigo and stopping by for a comment
Aww, thank you. It's that time of season. I like dabbling in all sorts of genre. Expanding the mind is a must in writing. The last thing I want to be is predictable!! LOL
thanks for the RL amigo and stopping by for a comment
Re. Murder of Crows
16th Sep 2024 2:00pm
It's already said above, but the imagery is breathtakingly beautiful.
Really dig the dark vibe - I can imagine how the song inspired this piece.
Really dig the dark vibe - I can imagine how the song inspired this piece.
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Re: Re. Murder of Crows
18th Sep 2024 1:17am
Hi Duende!
Thank you so much. I am planning to take some digital
art classes in the end of October. I'd love to give it a professional try in that department and match what I'm seeing with my poetry.
I'm duper super excited about it.
I'm so happy you enjoyed it!!
Thanks for the RL and stopping by!!
Thank you so much. I am planning to take some digital
art classes in the end of October. I'd love to give it a professional try in that department and match what I'm seeing with my poetry.
I'm duper super excited about it.
I'm so happy you enjoyed it!!
Thanks for the RL and stopping by!!
Re: Re. Murder of Crows
19th Sep 2024 9:40am
Digitual art classes, that sounds amazing. I can imagine you're super excited about it. Like you music is often the inspiration to my poetry, but I see images too - I'm really visually orientated. Curious what those art classes lead to.
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Re. Murder of Crows
17th Sep 2024 2:09am
And I still have no RLs available! What the hell?!
This is very strong poem. It's like showing a glimpse of your underlying willpower.
Yeah it's catchy in several lines, with very clever images that you brought forth. But it's obviously the message that you nailed down here. Of resilience and perhaps a bit of bravery?
Well crafted. And the edits that you did are really well thought.
Excellent write, pal.
So here, a neutral comment. Lol. I'm not letting your sly wickedness effect me!
This is very strong poem. It's like showing a glimpse of your underlying willpower.
Yeah it's catchy in several lines, with very clever images that you brought forth. But it's obviously the message that you nailed down here. Of resilience and perhaps a bit of bravery?
Well crafted. And the edits that you did are really well thought.
Excellent write, pal.
So here, a neutral comment. Lol. I'm not letting your sly wickedness effect me!
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Re: Re. Murder of Crows
18th Sep 2024 1:29am
Hi Baby!
Looks like you are getting the shaft in the RL department.
No worries. Your comments are like gold so there. Problem solved!!
Yes, we are all animals with the basic instinct for food and survival. In that way we are the same.
We just happen to know how to read, write, join poetry websites, and fall in love:)
Also, did you know they mate for life in most cases?
I told you last week I wanted to use that title for something and welp - here it is. In all its dark glory! I'm so happy you enjoyed and caught the underlying theme in this.
Love you!
thanks for the comment big sexy!
Looks like you are getting the shaft in the RL department.
No worries. Your comments are like gold so there. Problem solved!!
Yes, we are all animals with the basic instinct for food and survival. In that way we are the same.
We just happen to know how to read, write, join poetry websites, and fall in love:)
Also, did you know they mate for life in most cases?
I told you last week I wanted to use that title for something and welp - here it is. In all its dark glory! I'm so happy you enjoyed and caught the underlying theme in this.
Love you!
thanks for the comment big sexy!
Re: Re. Murder of Crows
18th Sep 2024 2:26am
Crows are rated in the top ten of most intelligent animals.
And hey, I love you Jeckle!
Smooches!
Signed,
Heckle.
Lol
And hey, I love you Jeckle!
Smooches!
Signed,
Heckle.
Lol
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Re: Re. Murder of Crows
18th Sep 2024 2:33am
Yes, I even read they do a funeral
kind of thing around the fellow dead crow!
Like a warning for all - danger is close.
I love you too!!
Nice pic!!
kind of thing around the fellow dead crow!
Like a warning for all - danger is close.
I love you too!!
Nice pic!!
Re. Murder of Crows
17th Sep 2024 9:37pm
There's a feel of grounding in this, despite its dark tone. Or maybe because of it. Whichever way it works, this is brilliantly written
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Re: Re. Murder of Crows
18th Sep 2024 1:34am
Hi Willow,
You are absolutely right. There is a grounding effect to this.
Also, a kill or be killed kind of vibe and is it wrong to strike first instead of waiting to be a victim.
Thanks for catching that too:)
thanks for stopping by:)
You are absolutely right. There is a grounding effect to this.
Also, a kill or be killed kind of vibe and is it wrong to strike first instead of waiting to be a victim.
Thanks for catching that too:)
thanks for stopping by:)
Re: Re. Murder of Crows
18th Sep 2024 1:45am
hahaha
Dude - the season is just around the corner!
I love a good dark poem - thanks for stopping by amigo!
Dude - the season is just around the corner!
I love a good dark poem - thanks for stopping by amigo!
Re. Murder of Crows
19th Sep 2024 11:45pm
This is so good. this is something new you're trying? well you succeeded. Fia xoxo
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Re: Re. Murder of Crows
21st Sep 2024 10:39pm
Hi Fai:)
Thank you so much for the read.
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I've actually written dark multiple times but usually in September and October because of the seasons:)
thanks again!
Thank you so much for the read.
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I've actually written dark multiple times but usually in September and October because of the seasons:)
thanks again!
Re. Murder of Crows
21st Sep 2024 4:21am
We make our own fate good or bad. Keep on writing and listening to the music.
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21st Sep 2024 10:41pm
Re. Murder of Crows
26th Oct 2024 5:46am
Maybe because it's October, the days are getting shorter, the nights are getting colder, but I found this perfect for the season with a kickass song.
Great stuff.
Great stuff.
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Re: Re. Murder of Crows
27th Oct 2024 1:38am
Hey Wally!
Dude! I love when October rolls around and writing on darker topics. It's good to stretch into different topics. And the song helped me amplify my vision into words.
Thanks for checking this out!
Dude! I love when October rolls around and writing on darker topics. It's good to stretch into different topics. And the song helped me amplify my vision into words.
Thanks for checking this out!