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Ashes Out To Sea
Here by the ocean is where I love to be....
So when I die...do send my ashes out to sea....
For in that jar...there's no rest for me....
So when I die...do send my ashes out to sea....
For in that jar...there's no rest for me....
Published 11th Sep 2024
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11th Sep 2024 5:49am
Dear SW,
The return to earth, or water in this case, seems the ultimate circle. The final freedom. I like how you’ve rhymed the last word of each line. Great flow. H🌷
The return to earth, or water in this case, seems the ultimate circle. The final freedom. I like how you’ve rhymed the last word of each line. Great flow. H🌷
11th Sep 2024 4:36pm
11th Sep 2024 4:43pm
H,
What are your thoughts on the ward jar vs urn. I recently pondered the two.
For me as the poem states : " there's no rest for me". Portraying the feeling of darkness and confinement and the coldness of just a jar. Wanting to be free from entrapment.
Vs
An urn, which many relate to as a holding place for a loved one. Still being confined to a space but most of them are beautiful and we don't think of them being a place of no rest.
If I'm overthinking this please let me know 🙃
SW 🌻
What are your thoughts on the ward jar vs urn. I recently pondered the two.
For me as the poem states : " there's no rest for me". Portraying the feeling of darkness and confinement and the coldness of just a jar. Wanting to be free from entrapment.
Vs
An urn, which many relate to as a holding place for a loved one. Still being confined to a space but most of them are beautiful and we don't think of them being a place of no rest.
If I'm overthinking this please let me know 🙃
SW 🌻
I think jar works better. It speaks to coldness of the container. While urn has its place I always see that word as “urine” which I know it isn’t but my mind twists it and it takes up valuable head room.
😊
H🌷
😊
H🌷
12th Sep 2024 2:52pm
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