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bittersweet memories (Michael)
1.
You don't even deserve a poem
you manipulative little fuck
2.
Thanks for the dildo
You don't even deserve a poem
you manipulative little fuck
2.
Thanks for the dildo
Published 10th Jun 2024
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10th Jun 2024 11:32am
(Haha) The end changed the tempo. For a short poem to have two affects it went well
10th Jun 2024 11:37am
10th Jun 2024 5:39pm
11th Jun 2024 4:17am
I don't read humor here, though the drastic tonal shift presents to me as astutely raw in a way that Bukowski managed to capture on a page in kind. I think I'm already following you but if I'm not I'll check out more of your work.
In Kind Regards, Write On
-Alois
In Kind Regards, Write On
-Alois
11th Jun 2024 4:50am
I appreciate your take on this. I hadn't intended humour. This piece is what happens when I write a poem about someone I had no real desire to write about, but still felt compelled to, as part of a larger series.
