With Eyes to See

Dear A,

There’s much to admire here. I so enjoyed the your depiction of life and nature around you. It’s these little bits of people that allow us a peek
inside and know we’re all similar and those similarities far outnumber the differences. That’s what I think is so magical about your write. I wish you all the best this comp. H🌷

Thanks so much, Honoria. I appreciate the RL honor as well as your thoughtful comments. xo

Brilliantly written. Appreciate you.





DL

Thank you, Damian.

Relatable indeed, Ahavati 😊

Thank you, Grace.

Sigh...I wish my bones didn't agree so wholeheartedly with this. Even my calico saw the reality in this one 😂

Thank you, Willow, and for the RL honor. Ah! So you have a Calico too! I love them. They are like spare parts cats created with all the leftovers from other cats. xo

Her picture is up with my '2 chonks & a granny.' I call her my showgirl! 😂

😂

"Braille across the heart"
Nice line!  
This is a great, solid poem that would fit in any book of poems out there.  
Well written, Ahavati.

Thank you, Styxian. I lie in bed in the morning and never have to open my eyes to see the world. I think that's a beautiful thing about aging.

Thank you also for the RL honor, it's deeply appreciated.

What a great entry, the imagery is simply amazing. The part about your calico cat made me smile, cats have such epic personalities, each their own own, and often huge ones :-D

Thank you, Duende! Kali ( named after the goddess Kali ) is a force to be reckoned with! But listening to her purr in her dreams is soothing. xo

To paint such a serene picture of nature the wonders of life...

This is such a great ink

Thank you, Poet.

Thank you, Zelle_mirna. I haven't seen you before, so welcome to the Deep Side. :-)

It feels quite epic. The choice of vocabulary and sentence/phrases really builds up a sense of grandeur, plus element of storyteller.

Thank you, Lozzamus! As a talented writer, I deeply appreciate your observations.

You opened and I threw a fit. Holy shot! Sticky as an egg yolk was such a boss move. I fell in love with your first stanza and forgot to move on for a long moment.

You make magic here as you describe the big picture of the mountains and then narrow the camera lens to the dreams of your cat. You are making a mental film here more than a poem and I’m here for it.
 
“Across this distant room  
my cat purrs    
 
In her dreams    
she is once again Egyptian    
a goddess worshiped    
by thin fingers of light  
through the window  
stroking her calico fur  “

Thin fingers of light… stroking her fur?! It’s so good! I’m pissed I’ve never written about my cat like this.
 
You connect back outside…
 I know each voice by heart  
 


 
I love this so much. The acknowledgment that we devalue humans like we do cars, as soon as the shine wears off we don’t want them.
“This is the fingerprint  
of daily aging    
the physicality of wearing out  
and losing value”
 
And this is such a big closing:
 
“Without any further need    
to open our eyes to see”


You didn’t wake up, you rode a drone through your eyes and brought the reader with you. You started with you, went outside of your home, came back to your yard, came back to your innerself and closed your travels with wisdom

So. Good.

I absolutely LOVE your replies, Betty. They are as if not MORE poetic than the freaking poems. I always had a sneaking suspicion that you were a Gemini because of your intellect ( Mercury ) and ability to weave words into stunning tapestries of verbal art!

I love you, my friend. XO

You never ever disapoint Ahavati.

Not sure how I can ever follw the words of Betty. Her brillance is to be highly admired as you have said here so honeslty.

I found this writing vivid and chalk full of imaginary and realistic imagery. You truly are a master of words, I am humble and take my hat off to you, absolutely brilliant!
Jackie 👍🏻

Right out the gate you invite the reader in—

Beyond the orange lid of my eyes  
lies a summer sunrise    
sticky as an egg yoke  
ready to burst    

Wow and wow some more.
I see and feel all of this like a painting.

Thank you, Jackie! I truly appreciate your perspective and have been thinking of you and hoping you are well of late?

xo

I am very well thanks hope u are too ♥️

You are simply brilliant! Great work ,dear Ahavati ❣️

Thank you, beautiful lady! ❣️

"This is the fingerprint  
of daily aging    
the physicality of wearing out"
Dealing with the acceptance that times gives us the wrinkles, weight and a long list of ailments, it was hard for me a first to accept that I could no longer run the distances or spring up out of bed suddenly without pulling something that I had to start laughing at myself a bit.
Wonderful work.

Isn't that the truth, Wally. I have lived such a blessed life I have no complaints nor regrets for those things that have made me me.

Thank you.

Nice