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First Date
the 1st time we
met is etched in
my brains the
moment our
eyes locked
door left open
his coat left on
before i knew
it we attacked
each other like
starving beasts
holding onto the
other like our life
was on the line
kissing licking
grabbing while
we talked about
first having drinks
So far for intentions
met is etched in
my brains the
moment our
eyes locked
door left open
his coat left on
before i knew
it we attacked
each other like
starving beasts
holding onto the
other like our life
was on the line
kissing licking
grabbing while
we talked about
first having drinks
So far for intentions
Published 9th Jun 2024
Author's Note
Yet, we didn't have sex.
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9th Jun 2024 4:53pm
I like a first date without sex. I'm old fashioned in my older years.
I like - we attacked each other like starving beasts - awesome description.
I enjoyed your poem.
I like - we attacked each other like starving beasts - awesome description.
I enjoyed your poem.
10th Jun 2024 9:46am
Me too, it's so important to get to know each other first. Thanks for your comment :-)
9th Jun 2024 6:09pm
10th Jun 2024 9:50am
Exactly that, couldn't have said it better. Thanks heaps for your comment, Fia :-)
10th Jun 2024 9:43am
10th Jun 2024 9:53am
10th Jun 2024 3:33pm
That is some serious restraint there. Builds the tension & allows time for connection to deepen. Sequel should be explosive!
10th Jun 2024 3:53pm
Trust me, it took a lot of discipline. Thanks heaps for your comment, Confluence.
10th Jun 2024 4:47pm
Girl, you know I'm over here squealing in my chair! Tightening that bond with restraint is so hard & so worth it. Love it, sis 💖
11th Jun 2024 7:30am
Yes, I know :-) Hard as it is, it's so worth it. Thanks heaps for loving this piece, sis 💖
13th Jun 2024 5:19am
Dear D,
Amazing passion written with a sense of elegance. I enjoyed the sizzle in this piece and hope all good things bloom as the relationship develops. H🌷
Amazing passion written with a sense of elegance. I enjoyed the sizzle in this piece and hope all good things bloom as the relationship develops. H🌷
13th Jun 2024 9:48am
Dear H, so very honored you say this is passion written with a sense of elegance.
It was hard to restrain ourselves, but I learned from the past: nothing good comes from going too fast. Thanks heaps for your visit and comment, I appreciate you 💕
It was hard to restrain ourselves, but I learned from the past: nothing good comes from going too fast. Thanks heaps for your visit and comment, I appreciate you 💕
