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The Written Word
The page is blank to the naked eye
To mine it’s covered in scribbles
Notes and thoughts, ideas and stories
Somehow all connected to each other
Within that tangled mess of words
There’s a bridge of how we came to be
I can’t seem to link the arcs
For their movement eludes me
Maybe I’m blinded by love,
no~
I’m engulfed in rage
I need to make this plausible
Everything feels so relevant
None so meaningful as our story
To mine it’s covered in scribbles
Notes and thoughts, ideas and stories
Somehow all connected to each other
Within that tangled mess of words
There’s a bridge of how we came to be
I can’t seem to link the arcs
For their movement eludes me
Maybe I’m blinded by love,
no~
I’m engulfed in rage
I need to make this plausible
Everything feels so relevant
None so meaningful as our story
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Re. The Written Word
1st May 2024 4:55am
I ended a 33 year hold that someone had had on my heart today.
Your poem speaks volumes.
Your poem speaks volumes.
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1st May 2024 5:19am
Dear H,
I feel like this is a good thing. Being subjected to “a hold” on one’s heart feels restrictive. (Usually in my case it’s unrequited) If this is good news I celebrate with and for you!
If not, reverse everything I wrote. I really hope this release feels liberating.
In any event, I’m sending hugs to you and thank you for your thoughtful comment and sharing that bit of news. I’m very grateful. H🌷
I feel like this is a good thing. Being subjected to “a hold” on one’s heart feels restrictive. (Usually in my case it’s unrequited) If this is good news I celebrate with and for you!
If not, reverse everything I wrote. I really hope this release feels liberating.
In any event, I’m sending hugs to you and thank you for your thoughtful comment and sharing that bit of news. I’m very grateful. H🌷
Re. The Written Word
1st May 2024 5:16am
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1st May 2024 5:51am
Dear S,
Thank you for your kind comment. I’m much obliged and very grateful. Thank you once again. H🌷
Thank you for your kind comment. I’m much obliged and very grateful. Thank you once again. H🌷
Re. The Written Word
1st May 2024 8:21am
Dear H,
First off: I'm delighted to see a new write on your page, I have been looking forward to it.
To me this reads as an unrequited love (sorry if I'm wrong) due to the "Within that tangled mess of words"
It's a good thing we have poetry to make some sense of this mess 💕
First off: I'm delighted to see a new write on your page, I have been looking forward to it.
To me this reads as an unrequited love (sorry if I'm wrong) due to the "Within that tangled mess of words"
It's a good thing we have poetry to make some sense of this mess 💕
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5th May 2024 11:04pm
Dear D,
Thank you very kindly for your wonderful comment. I think your take on this write is completely applicable. The beauty of poetry to me, is how and what it means to each reader. I’m very grateful for your insight and thank you again for your kindness. H🌷
Thank you very kindly for your wonderful comment. I think your take on this write is completely applicable. The beauty of poetry to me, is how and what it means to each reader. I’m very grateful for your insight and thank you again for your kindness. H🌷
Re. The Written Word
1st May 2024 9:09am
Hello, I really liked this a lot. In thinking of my own journal
of scribbles, notes, thoughts and ideas - it is a bridge of
how we came to be. An attempt to figure it all out.
I believe, everything is in some way relevant.
This was an awesome write, any writer can deeply relate with
Very nice!
of scribbles, notes, thoughts and ideas - it is a bridge of
how we came to be. An attempt to figure it all out.
I believe, everything is in some way relevant.
This was an awesome write, any writer can deeply relate with
Very nice!
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5th May 2024 11:06pm
Dear D,
I thank you for your lovely comment. Poetry has, indeed, become an intrinsic help to me in figuring things out and meeting all of you along the way an even greater help! Thank you again. H🌷
I thank you for your lovely comment. Poetry has, indeed, become an intrinsic help to me in figuring things out and meeting all of you along the way an even greater help! Thank you again. H🌷
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6th May 2024 00:34am
Re. The Written Word
1st May 2024 11:00am
Scribbles mean more then you think. When you revisit them years or months later, you uncover a world of thoughts & ideas of yourself at that period of time. Very well written. Perfect!!
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5th May 2024 11:08pm
Dear V,
Agreed! Of course, this is only helpful if I remember why it is I wrote something in the first place. My memory is dodgy on a good day. 😏
Thank you very much for your wonderful comment. I’m ever so grateful. H🌷
Agreed! Of course, this is only helpful if I remember why it is I wrote something in the first place. My memory is dodgy on a good day. 😏
Thank you very much for your wonderful comment. I’m ever so grateful. H🌷
Re. The Written Word
1st May 2024 12:56pm
Love... rage... and everything being relevant - that sounds a lot like the tangled mess of my thoughts. Keep striving to write it out, we love reading it.
Congrats on the NaPo finish! 🥳
❤️k
Congrats on the NaPo finish! 🥳
❤️k
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5th May 2024 11:11pm
Dear K,
A torrential gambit of emotional bliss is what this can feel like some days. And then I shop 😊. Another successful Napo put to rest. I’m very proud of all of us. It’s really quite fun when I’m not biting my nails to the stub. Thank you so much for the constancy of your support. xx
H🌷
A torrential gambit of emotional bliss is what this can feel like some days. And then I shop 😊. Another successful Napo put to rest. I’m very proud of all of us. It’s really quite fun when I’m not biting my nails to the stub. Thank you so much for the constancy of your support. xx
H🌷
Re. The Written Word
1st May 2024 1:57pm
The frustrations of cerebral and literary logistics are real, but rarely in the spotlight outside of philosophical circles and literary criticism.
Those "tangle bridges" are the very fabric of the collective human experience.
Your pursuit of it will most certainly make its way clear since few things are as liberating as the discovery of the purpose or direction of one's own voice.
Those "tangle bridges" are the very fabric of the collective human experience.
Your pursuit of it will most certainly make its way clear since few things are as liberating as the discovery of the purpose or direction of one's own voice.
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5th May 2024 11:15pm
Dear MS,
This is such lovely insight. Writing has provided a clearer path as of late and the way you’ve phrased this is poetry itself. I’m so appreciative of your kind comment I can’t begin to tell you. Thank you. H🌷
This is such lovely insight. Writing has provided a clearer path as of late and the way you’ve phrased this is poetry itself. I’m so appreciative of your kind comment I can’t begin to tell you. Thank you. H🌷
Re. The Written Word
2nd May 2024 00:26am
A good vent followed by ice cream usually helps me...or strong whiskey and a path of destruction. Just a thought. 🌼
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5th May 2024 11:17pm
Dear AJ,
Hmmmmm, I pick the ice cream one. I have to drive later…the whiskey’ll have to wait. But the venting, it’s my super power.
Thank you for these awesome options.
H🌷
Hmmmmm, I pick the ice cream one. I have to drive later…the whiskey’ll have to wait. But the venting, it’s my super power.
Thank you for these awesome options.
H🌷
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5th May 2024 11:20pm
Dear BC,
It’s crazy, right? So many mixed feelings at the same time. Emotional tender is wild. Thank you so much for your sweet comment. I’m extremely grateful to you.
Thank you again. H🌷
It’s crazy, right? So many mixed feelings at the same time. Emotional tender is wild. Thank you so much for your sweet comment. I’m extremely grateful to you.
Thank you again. H🌷
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Anonymous
- Edited 4th May 2024 2:10pm
3rd May 2024 2:19pm
This reminded me of a lyric essay that I read recently called Satellite. It's in an anthology called The Harp in the Stars. I'll have to look up the author when I get home.
Anyway, my blank pages always look like scribbles in my head. Sorting it all out is harder than writing the poem. In my experience. Keep going. You managed this one quite well!
Edited to add: The author of the essay is Sarah Perry. I can't find the essay online, but if you want to read it let me know and I can send a photo of it. 😊
Anyway, my blank pages always look like scribbles in my head. Sorting it all out is harder than writing the poem. In my experience. Keep going. You managed this one quite well!
Edited to add: The author of the essay is Sarah Perry. I can't find the essay online, but if you want to read it let me know and I can send a photo of it. 😊
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5th May 2024 11:25pm
Dear DG,
Some days trying to sort out the mess would only be tolerable if I had one of your gorgeous cakes! But…I’ll keep trying.
I tried finding the essay you mention. The we author is very interesting and so accomplished. If you have a spare sec and can send a pic of the essay I’d like that at your convenience. Thank you so much for your lovely comment. H🌷
Some days trying to sort out the mess would only be tolerable if I had one of your gorgeous cakes! But…I’ll keep trying.
I tried finding the essay you mention. The we author is very interesting and so accomplished. If you have a spare sec and can send a pic of the essay I’d like that at your convenience. Thank you so much for your lovely comment. H🌷
Re. The Written Word
Awesome! The first two lines capture us, the readers. The rest of it nudges us between light and dark. The dilemma we face as writers, mixed with battling the emotions of others that influence us....
We win when we write, every time.
Good to see you posting new material !!!!!
(The dumb ass RL limit is in effect for me. I pay good money to do what I want! LOL)
We win when we write, every time.
Good to see you posting new material !!!!!
(The dumb ass RL limit is in effect for me. I pay good money to do what I want! LOL)
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5th May 2024 11:29pm
Dear S,
Phew! I was getting worried you were too busy to bust my chops about not posting more timely. 😉
I really appreciated your insight, all of it in this mix is true. So much is at stake when we bare all for the sake of free speech and sharing a piece of ourselves. All of it worth it when I receive the gifts of these comments from all of you. The support is monumental. Thank you.
H🌷
Phew! I was getting worried you were too busy to bust my chops about not posting more timely. 😉
I really appreciated your insight, all of it in this mix is true. So much is at stake when we bare all for the sake of free speech and sharing a piece of ourselves. All of it worth it when I receive the gifts of these comments from all of you. The support is monumental. Thank you.
H🌷
Re. The Written Word
7th May 2024 4:13am
Oh how I love this:
"Maybe I’m blinded by love,
no~
I’m engulfed in rage
I need to make this plausible"
Great write, H. I don't want to rush you and say it's about time, but thanks for posting. I do check your page occasionally and ask "where's the next poem, H??????"
LJ
"Maybe I’m blinded by love,
no~
I’m engulfed in rage
I need to make this plausible"
Great write, H. I don't want to rush you and say it's about time, but thanks for posting. I do check your page occasionally and ask "where's the next poem, H??????"
LJ
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8th May 2024 4:38am
Dear LJ,
Have you been in cahoots with Styxian? 😂
Now I’ve got two of you nudging me along. (I’m secretly grateful 😘)
I could ramble on how busy I am, how napo zapped my strength, how the moon was in Aquarius, but I’ll just say thank you for your lovely comment. Im very humbled. H🌷
Have you been in cahoots with Styxian? 😂
Now I’ve got two of you nudging me along. (I’m secretly grateful 😘)
I could ramble on how busy I am, how napo zapped my strength, how the moon was in Aquarius, but I’ll just say thank you for your lovely comment. Im very humbled. H🌷
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8th May 2024 5:43am
Hehe no, no nudging. Sorry sorry, but yeah Napo... definitely takes a lot of a person.
LJ
LJ
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Re. The Written Word
8th May 2024 2:24pm
A good elaboration of the emotional writing process. You capture the passion of it well.
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9th May 2024 3:03am
Dear CR,
You’re very kind and I really appreciate your read and lovely comment. It’s made me feel very smart 😊 thank you.
H🌷
You’re very kind and I really appreciate your read and lovely comment. It’s made me feel very smart 😊 thank you.
H🌷
Re. The Written Word
9th May 2024 5:01am
Searching for the right words among the internal scribbles, because the meaning is so important, can in itself be maddening if the emotions are strong enough. We write, we revise, then we put it all out there, much like conversation. Sometimes it's pleading, sometimes it angry, sometimes both.
Poetry is a vehicle for the mind to go where it feels comfortable. To express and make sense out of those jumbled scribbles.
Glad to see a new one from you, H. Excellent poem.
Poetry is a vehicle for the mind to go where it feels comfortable. To express and make sense out of those jumbled scribbles.
Glad to see a new one from you, H. Excellent poem.
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9th May 2024 5:26am
Dear DB,
The poetic process is still very new to me and the idea of baring it all for the world to see. Feels cold sometimes.
“ Poetry is a vehicle for the mind to go where it feels comfortable. To express and make sense out of those jumbled scribbles.“ so perfectly defined!! Thank you very much for your lovely comment. I’m flattered and humbled. H🌷
The poetic process is still very new to me and the idea of baring it all for the world to see. Feels cold sometimes.
“ Poetry is a vehicle for the mind to go where it feels comfortable. To express and make sense out of those jumbled scribbles.“ so perfectly defined!! Thank you very much for your lovely comment. I’m flattered and humbled. H🌷
Re. The Written Word
10th May 2024 3:22pm
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11th May 2024 3:07am
Dear V,
I am flattered and humbled by your lovely comment. Its made my night. Thank you very much once again.
H🌷
I am flattered and humbled by your lovely comment. Its made my night. Thank you very much once again.
H🌷
Re. The Written Word
12th May 2024 11:54am
Dear H,
Great work. I love the honesty of your words! The ending line is so powerful in summing up your feelings. I really like this.
F
Great work. I love the honesty of your words! The ending line is so powerful in summing up your feelings. I really like this.
F
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13th May 2024 2:24am
Dear F,
Thank you so much. I am perpetually grateful for your insight and kindness. It motivates me to keep trying. Thank you.
xo H 🌷
Thank you so much. I am perpetually grateful for your insight and kindness. It motivates me to keep trying. Thank you.
xo H 🌷
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13th May 2024 8:50am
Re. The Written Word
24th May 2024 10:32pm
Sets a tone.
I love the switch in mood here:
"Maybe I’m blinded by love,
no~
I’m engulfed in rage
I need to make this plausible"
I love the switch in mood here:
"Maybe I’m blinded by love,
no~
I’m engulfed in rage
I need to make this plausible"
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Re: Re. The Written Word
25th May 2024 1:22am
Dear L,
Thank you, I appreciate your perceptiveness. Sometimes the emotions are completely polar and at the same time. Thank you so much for your kind comment. H🌷
Thank you, I appreciate your perceptiveness. Sometimes the emotions are completely polar and at the same time. Thank you so much for your kind comment. H🌷
Re. The Written Word
25th May 2024 4:57am
I was hooked by the first two stanzas... I call myself paperstains, how could I not be? And if you'd stopped at the third, I'd have been quite satisfied with that as a poem, because those three say so much. Then you brought me into the last three, and I resonated so much with them, too. It really ticked a lot of boxes for me, and I like this write a lot. :-)
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27th May 2024 6:02am
Dear PS,
I loved the comparison of poem to your poetic name. That was fabulous. And what a spirit boost to read your lovely thoughts about this write, I’m so grateful. Thank you very much for your kindness and wonderful comment. H🌷
I loved the comparison of poem to your poetic name. That was fabulous. And what a spirit boost to read your lovely thoughts about this write, I’m so grateful. Thank you very much for your kindness and wonderful comment. H🌷
Re. The Written Word
4th Jun 2024 11:21am
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4th Jun 2024 11:08pm
Dear L,
You didn’t miss it. You’re here😊
Thank you very much for your sweet reply. H🌷
You didn’t miss it. You’re here😊
Thank you very much for your sweet reply. H🌷
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Anonymous
4th Jul 2024 7:00pm
Whew H, you’ve pulled every heart string. Absolutely amazing what scribbles inspire. In every line you’ve let the ink spill out your soul. Tipping my pen to you in admiration and in thankfulness you’ve shared this with us. Outstanding! Purple luv & hugs 💜
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5th Jul 2024 2:29pm
Dear FG,
Geez F you’re gonna make me cry with this beautiful comment. Thank you. I have all of you to thank for anything I might conjure up and dare to post. Thank you again for lifting me up this morning.
H🌷
Geez F you’re gonna make me cry with this beautiful comment. Thank you. I have all of you to thank for anything I might conjure up and dare to post. Thank you again for lifting me up this morning.
H🌷
Re. The Written Word
13th Jul 2024 6:48am
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13th Jul 2024 11:53pm
Dear W,
Thank you for your kindness. I appreciate you digging around for this. Time moves lightening fast and the fading memory even faster, I’d forgotten about this write. Your lovely comment is all the sweeter.
H🌷
Thank you for your kindness. I appreciate you digging around for this. Time moves lightening fast and the fading memory even faster, I’d forgotten about this write. Your lovely comment is all the sweeter.
H🌷