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Sudden
Sixth graders watching the Guiness Book of World Records'
longest conga line of dogs
because it's five minutes before dismissal on a Friday
and why not?
Two simultaneous responses
one from a girl
one from a boy
"Aww, it's a puppy choo choo train!"
"Yeah, they's doin' it doggie style"
Cusp of twelve:
the hold of innocence tenuous
against gale force winds
longest conga line of dogs
because it's five minutes before dismissal on a Friday
and why not?
Two simultaneous responses
one from a girl
one from a boy
"Aww, it's a puppy choo choo train!"
"Yeah, they's doin' it doggie style"
Cusp of twelve:
the hold of innocence tenuous
against gale force winds
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Re. Sudden
13th Apr 2024 6:25am
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Re. Sudden
13th Apr 2024 10:43am
The innocence of childhood is getting seemingly less innocent.
This was a good write.
A deep thinker.
This was a good write.
A deep thinker.
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13th Apr 2024 6:32pm
Thank you, Debbie. It's sad to see kids robbed of their childhoods earlier and earlier.
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13th Apr 2024 11:17am
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Re. Sudden
13th Apr 2024 4:09pm
Interesting. At the 6th grade level, the boy or girl may have said either. Cool poetry.
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13th Apr 2024 6:38pm
Thank you. I agree with the could be either. I had one girl in my class say pussy willow, apropos of nothing, about 20 times one day.