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5-4-3-2-1
I see:
a stack of boxes of unwanted responsibility
a calm, new-moss green wall
artwork from a child now grown
a disarray of important papers
a thirsty spider plant
I hear:
a ringing whine that is mine alone
the faint sound of Metallica
a bathroom fan
the scratch of my pen on paper
I feel:
a cozy armchair hugging my body
a hamstring that’s begging for stretching
the tickle of anxiety deep in my core
I smell:
burnt crumbs in the toaster
the early morning sweat of my own warm body
I taste:
a little too much soy milk in my coffee
I am grounded
firmly
within this murky pit
where nothing comes without emotion attached
and the thoughts never cease
their tumbling.
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Author's Note
#3 of 30
I'm not sure this practice works for me... what if I don't WANT to be grounded where I am?!
I'm not sure this practice works for me... what if I don't WANT to be grounded where I am?!
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Re. 5-4-3-2-1
3rd Apr 2024 12:14pm
I was JUST talking to someone here about this very same technique - the most important skill in my tool box.
I use it when self-defeating thoughts creep back because I know they’re rooted in anxiety.
Maybe if you try to find a different angle it will work for you.
I use it when self-defeating thoughts creep back because I know they’re rooted in anxiety.
Maybe if you try to find a different angle it will work for you.
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Re: Re. 5-4-3-2-1
3rd Apr 2024 12:39pm
I know it's a great tool... I just need to practice NOT attaching meaning to everything I sense. To see those papers as just papers, and not as evidence of my failure to be organized... etc etc etc. My anxious thoughts are strong and deep, and I'm not even sure what exists without them...
Ahem, anyway... thanks for the therapy! And thanks for reading and stopping by to comment. I appreciate you.
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Ahem, anyway... thanks for the therapy! And thanks for reading and stopping by to comment. I appreciate you.
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Re. 5-4-3-2-1
3rd Apr 2024 1:28pm
Being a poet we automatically are writing poems out of ordinary everyday occurrences. I wouldn't fight it, there's probably songs being formed too ...
Lift off !
BIG
Lift off !
BIG
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Re: Re. 5-4-3-2-1
5th Apr 2024 8:10pm
No songs have come yet this year, but the month is young.... At least I have a solid writing habit that's EARLY in the day instead of 11:45pm.
Thanks for the cheering! Nice pompoms.
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Thanks for the cheering! Nice pompoms.
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Re. 5-4-3-2-1
3rd Apr 2024 2:41pm
That last stanza just stopped coffee cup from moving to lips...damn! I'll be revisiting this...
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Re: Re. 5-4-3-2-1
5th Apr 2024 8:11pm
Haha, glad you liked it! I mean, being grounded is good and all, but sometimes it's easier to just stay lost in your head...
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Re. 5-4-3-2-1
This read like liquefied slides of
mental snapshots.
I'm always intrigued and amazed at
what reality looks, feel, smell, sound and taste like
from another's creative expression.
this hits the senses lovely BT
mental snapshots.
I'm always intrigued and amazed at
what reality looks, feel, smell, sound and taste like
from another's creative expression.
this hits the senses lovely BT
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Re: Re. 5-4-3-2-1
5th Apr 2024 8:16pm
Thank you, kind sir! I was attempting to use this sensory grounding technique to get ready for writing... decided it WAS the writing after all. Sometimes good things happen when I get out of my head.
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Re. 5-4-3-2-1
3rd Apr 2024 3:31pm
This was a methodical peek into your life in that moment, a vulnerable share, thank you for writing.
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Re: Re. 5-4-3-2-1
5th Apr 2024 8:17pm
Thank you... I realized that many of my supposedly "neutral" sensory observations were coming with self-judgement attached, and suddenly it didn't seem like such a great practice.
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Re. 5-4-3-2-1
4th Apr 2024 9:47am
I think that perpetual movement
can be both beautiful and hideous...
I have been self reflecting
and realize I seek to eternalize moments...
The form rocks...
You really have a knack for bringing pieces
together, like in the last stanza...
can be both beautiful and hideous...
I have been self reflecting
and realize I seek to eternalize moments...
The form rocks...
You really have a knack for bringing pieces
together, like in the last stanza...
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Re: Re. 5-4-3-2-1
5th Apr 2024 8:18pm
Thank you... I like to try and make sense of it all, in the end. That's mostly my purpose for writing.
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Re. 5-4-3-2-1
10th Apr 2024 12:18pm
This is a delightful read full if insight and that sense of everything having a back story or something left unsaid gives the poem a depth that kept me engaged from start to finish. What a start this is. Best Keith
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Re: Re. 5-4-3-2-1
10th Apr 2024 9:11pm
Thank you! I can never, ever just think one simple thing at a time. Everything has backstories and layers in my spaghetti brain. I'm glad you found it engaging!
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Re. 5-4-3-2-1
19th May 2024 9:59pm
" a stack of boxes of unwanted responsibility" this is how I am right now with piles of paper, I've been scanning and getting rid of old things trying to be more of a minimalist. This and the third line about a child's artwork are also tough decisions to make. What do you keep? What do you let go? Heck, do they care?
Relatable piece dear broken.
Great work.
Relatable piece dear broken.
Great work.
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Re: Re. 5-4-3-2-1
20th May 2024 6:19pm
Thanks! The boxes are my mom's papers that I'm required to keep as executor of her estate - unwanted on many levels! My kids are old enough that the remaining artwork is only the stuff I've already decided to keep. Ugh, trying to minimize the "stuff" in our lives is so hard...
Thanks for reading
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Thanks for reading
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