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Bittersweet Madness (Spoken)
Take me back to that sweet place,
Where I felt your sweet embrace.
When all the promises felt real,
And time wasn't required to heal.
Take me back to late night calls,
To long wandering wilderness strolls,
So I can hear the sound of laughter,
Not the sobs that came after.
Take me back to before you hated me,
Before either of us were tired & angry,
When running away wasn't a choice,
And, in your presence, I had a voice.
I don't want to be who we've become,
Running in avoidance, to stay numb,
With retrospect, I can overcome,
Just don't take me back to being dumb.
Where I felt your sweet embrace.
When all the promises felt real,
And time wasn't required to heal.
Take me back to late night calls,
To long wandering wilderness strolls,
So I can hear the sound of laughter,
Not the sobs that came after.
Take me back to before you hated me,
Before either of us were tired & angry,
When running away wasn't a choice,
And, in your presence, I had a voice.
I don't want to be who we've become,
Running in avoidance, to stay numb,
With retrospect, I can overcome,
Just don't take me back to being dumb.
Published 25th Mar 2024
Author's Note
Re-read of a poem from a couple years ago.
This was take 2, I couldn't get through it the first time.
I took a deep breath and did my best to smile.
This was my first posted recording, please be kind.
This was take 2, I couldn't get through it the first time.
I took a deep breath and did my best to smile.
This was my first posted recording, please be kind.
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25th Mar 2024 6:52pm
25th Mar 2024 7:16pm
Thank you for reading and for being so kind for my first recording. <3
25th Mar 2024 6:59pm
The emotion in your voice is palpable, yet it was very well-read. It's nice to see a face to the read.
25th Mar 2024 7:23pm
Thank you, Ahavati!!
Your encouragement means a lot to me.
My nose was a little stuffy from the first try at recording, I hope it didn't ruin the delivery too much.
Reading old poems opens up old wounds, it was a needed cry, though.
Your encouragement means a lot to me.
My nose was a little stuffy from the first try at recording, I hope it didn't ruin the delivery too much.
Reading old poems opens up old wounds, it was a needed cry, though.
25th Mar 2024 7:23pm
Amazing... so much feeling in the reading... you brought these couplets to life...
25th Mar 2024 7:28pm
25th Mar 2024 8:03pm
26th Mar 2024 2:29am
25th Mar 2024 8:42pm
Wow! That reading brought tears to my eyes.
Thank you for such a heartfelt reading.
Richard
Thank you for such a heartfelt reading.
Richard
25th Mar 2024 10:14pm
Thank you, Richard.
With it being my one and only reading, I was nervous on how it would be received.
With encouragement with yours, I feel better about working through the newbie struggles to create a few, more put together bits.
With it being my one and only reading, I was nervous on how it would be received.
With encouragement with yours, I feel better about working through the newbie struggles to create a few, more put together bits.
25th Mar 2024 11:42pm
I have had the same trials with recording but take your time and if it has gaps or mispronunciations just do it again.
Try reading just the words as a sound file and get used to hearing your voice, that is how I started I thought , "Is that what I sound ilke", but keep on until you can read without pause. It will flow then and help you to get used to your recorded voice.
Richard
Try reading just the words as a sound file and get used to hearing your voice, that is how I started I thought , "Is that what I sound ilke", but keep on until you can read without pause. It will flow then and help you to get used to your recorded voice.
Richard
26th Mar 2024 00:25am
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25th Mar 2024 10:17pm
Thank you for the award & love & hugs, Oral.
Many loves & hugs back at you.
❤️❤️❤️❤️
❤️❤️❤️❤️
❤️❤️❤️❤️
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Many loves & hugs back at you.
❤️❤️❤️❤️
❤️❤️❤️❤️
❤️❤️❤️❤️
❤️❤️❤️❤️
25th Mar 2024 11:04pm
25th Mar 2024 9:08pm
A moving reading. I could sense the wistfulness of memory and the regret of having split.
25th Mar 2024 10:40pm
Yeah, there's a lot of regret in those memories.
I was wrong (a lot).
But, I had never been more in love
with another human being.
Definitely nothing like that.
It was reckless, unquenchable, & blinding to reality.
It was terrifying, to be completely honest.
Thank you for your kind thoughts, SS. ❤️
I was wrong (a lot).
But, I had never been more in love
with another human being.
Definitely nothing like that.
It was reckless, unquenchable, & blinding to reality.
It was terrifying, to be completely honest.
Thank you for your kind thoughts, SS. ❤️
25th Mar 2024 11:46pm
You did a beautiful job! (Maybe I'll get the courage to do one someday...??)
Lovely smile too!
Lovely smile too!
26th Mar 2024 00:26am
26th Mar 2024 12:14pm
11th Jun 2024 00:33am
A poignant write delivered with real emotion. Nicely penned! Although I lecture for a living, reading my own prose, but especially poetry that has real significance for me, is always a difficult task. But I find that hearing poetry connects in a different way with readers than simply reading it oneself. That is why I persist, even if I am less than happy with my own reading of my work in the hope that perhaps a few listeners may connect with the words in a different, more personal way than simply reading them in a book or post.
Thank you for sharing.
Thank you for sharing.
17th Jun 2024 6:47pm
