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Fickle is a hollow heart
My sweet breath
catches the hell
that forms itself
on the tip of your tongue
Quick, pounds the blood
in life giving metamorphosis
as quicker wits brandish hard
splaying open
all the mystifying revelations
a night's essence offers
It grabs hold
pulls me in
fully encompassing with
it's own
dark gravity
blissfully weighted comfort
I love how you beautifully crush
our often weightless hearts
I've come to need the vacuous ache
relish it's particularly perfect pins and needles feel
take solace in every tingle
every tortured turn
Praying in accruing pain,
exhaling breathy sighs
majesty is this jazzy soundtrack
as you corner each proud bend
louder, as you veer
into the curvature
of my endless mewing truth
Nothing is left out,
I reveal my deepest secrets
even the ones
that I usually try to keep so well hidden
ones, that I say I've forgotten (but haven't)
perhaps when I needed to leave them
for a time, by the wayside
to allow out of sight to become
completely out of mind
Until you touched me
rubbed me
in such a perfect poignant way
with hands of magic
that to your genie
I became
an answered wish
fulfilled
catches the hell
that forms itself
on the tip of your tongue
Quick, pounds the blood
in life giving metamorphosis
as quicker wits brandish hard
splaying open
all the mystifying revelations
a night's essence offers
It grabs hold
pulls me in
fully encompassing with
it's own
dark gravity
blissfully weighted comfort
I love how you beautifully crush
our often weightless hearts
I've come to need the vacuous ache
relish it's particularly perfect pins and needles feel
take solace in every tingle
every tortured turn
Praying in accruing pain,
exhaling breathy sighs
majesty is this jazzy soundtrack
as you corner each proud bend
louder, as you veer
into the curvature
of my endless mewing truth
Nothing is left out,
I reveal my deepest secrets
even the ones
that I usually try to keep so well hidden
ones, that I say I've forgotten (but haven't)
perhaps when I needed to leave them
for a time, by the wayside
to allow out of sight to become
completely out of mind
Until you touched me
rubbed me
in such a perfect poignant way
with hands of magic
that to your genie
I became
an answered wish
fulfilled
Author's Note
İBlu2024
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Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 00:07am
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31st Jan 2024 00:09am
Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 00:25am
Goddamn that's a really hot, erotic poem. Your words make me melt. This last paragraph is divine writing!!
"Until you touched me
rubbed me
in such a perfect poignant way
with hands of magic
that to your genie
I became
an answered wish"
Brilliant. Executed with such precision and finesse. xoxo
"Until you touched me
rubbed me
in such a perfect poignant way
with hands of magic
that to your genie
I became
an answered wish"
Brilliant. Executed with such precision and finesse. xoxo
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Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 00:47am
I'm humbled...
This was a whim write that I was hesitant to publish but then decided to say 'fuck it' and publish anyway. I'm super stoked you found the nuances of eroticism within... I adore your thaw... lol.
Your feedback and continued readership is valued and deeply appreciated, K.
Huge thanks.
🌹💙
This was a whim write that I was hesitant to publish but then decided to say 'fuck it' and publish anyway. I'm super stoked you found the nuances of eroticism within... I adore your thaw... lol.
Your feedback and continued readership is valued and deeply appreciated, K.
Huge thanks.
🌹💙
Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 00:38am
Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 00:52am
Oh how I missed you.... You're far too kind but I'll take it! It's much needed.
Love seeing you here with me... - hugs-
Thank you thank you thank you.
🌹💙
Love seeing you here with me... - hugs-
Thank you thank you thank you.
🌹💙
Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 00:57am
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31st Jan 2024 6:17pm
Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 00:40am
Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 00:50am
Ohhh my.... There's something so sexy about being under hot lights on a cold night.... vava voom!!!
📸 💡 💦
haha...
Thanks for the encouragement, dear poet
*deliberate pose*
xo
📸 💡 💦
haha...
Thanks for the encouragement, dear poet
*deliberate pose*
xo
Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 1:23am
Hi dear Blue, your talented write never fails to evoke admiration from me. Hugs.
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Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
Oh, Grace!
Your admiration means the world, I can't thank you enough for those lovely, kind words of support. I have been gone for a few months, so getting back into the the swing of things is going a bit slower than I imagined. I really can't wait to catch up on my DUP reading... It's so inspiring and helpful in motivating my own pen!
Hope your side of the world is treating you well, dear lady.
I adore seeing you 🦋
🌹💙 - B
Your admiration means the world, I can't thank you enough for those lovely, kind words of support. I have been gone for a few months, so getting back into the the swing of things is going a bit slower than I imagined. I really can't wait to catch up on my DUP reading... It's so inspiring and helpful in motivating my own pen!
Hope your side of the world is treating you well, dear lady.
I adore seeing you 🦋
🌹💙 - B
Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 1:28am
Nothing is left out,
I reveal my deepest secrets
If nothing is left out then everything is brought in...
Depth and substance...
(Sub)stance....
Fulfillment then is being completely acknowledged, validated, listened to....touched on every level...
Anything less than all would be less.
Aftercare.
I reveal my deepest secrets
If nothing is left out then everything is brought in...
Depth and substance...
(Sub)stance....
Fulfillment then is being completely acknowledged, validated, listened to....touched on every level...
Anything less than all would be less.
Aftercare.
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Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 7:14pm
The hope is to bring in and share that which one thought was impossible to share... the goal.
Confident in myself and in the care and consideration I have around me to strip myself of fear and doubt. Taking the reigns by relinquishing them, and in turn relinquishing my own phobias that might've being laying dormant... lol...
The kind of substance that makes me stronger within our bonds of sharing and partaking of one another, the depth of which continues to embolden me so that I am even stronger,
even when standing on my own... I can feel our strength, coursing.
Submitting.... the brevity of Substance
Every. Single. Fucking. Level.
Aftercare aftercare aftercare.... I'm a slut for aftercare.
Note*... I make sure I'm not topping from the bottom, although to be honesty, I may cross that line little bit, when I am bratty.... lol 😏
Thank you for being you, RT.
I'm deeply loving that you stopped in and found me and my writing worthy of your beautifully astute eye. You know just how much value and adoration I getting the opportunity to read your thoughts... it really made my day.
Hope you are doing well, healed up and healthy. I have thought about you many times over these past months and feel bad I haven't had time to reach out. Please know, I'll be rectifying that toot sweet!
Much love sent your way,
🌹💙
Confident in myself and in the care and consideration I have around me to strip myself of fear and doubt. Taking the reigns by relinquishing them, and in turn relinquishing my own phobias that might've being laying dormant... lol...
The kind of substance that makes me stronger within our bonds of sharing and partaking of one another, the depth of which continues to embolden me so that I am even stronger,
even when standing on my own... I can feel our strength, coursing.
Submitting.... the brevity of Substance
Every. Single. Fucking. Level.
Aftercare aftercare aftercare.... I'm a slut for aftercare.
Note*... I make sure I'm not topping from the bottom, although to be honesty, I may cross that line little bit, when I am bratty.... lol 😏
Thank you for being you, RT.
I'm deeply loving that you stopped in and found me and my writing worthy of your beautifully astute eye. You know just how much value and adoration I getting the opportunity to read your thoughts... it really made my day.
Hope you are doing well, healed up and healthy. I have thought about you many times over these past months and feel bad I haven't had time to reach out. Please know, I'll be rectifying that toot sweet!
Much love sent your way,
🌹💙
Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
1st Feb 2024 4:03am
Thank you.
4 months out: good.
Being as a state of existence, aloneness and reciprocity, unless nakedly shared, becomes an expressively resolving paradox.
Mortality is a given. The cost of living lies in our integration into our natural environment. And so, participation risks vulnerability. It is just THAT innocence that justifies emotional availability.
4 months out: good.
Being as a state of existence, aloneness and reciprocity, unless nakedly shared, becomes an expressively resolving paradox.
Mortality is a given. The cost of living lies in our integration into our natural environment. And so, participation risks vulnerability. It is just THAT innocence that justifies emotional availability.
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Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
Anonymous
31st Jan 2024 3:40am
Hey Blue, yep yep, touching the senses as always, wowzers, I was cold before I read this Lol! Perfect bedtime ink to read, enjoyed a lot. Purple luv & hugs 💜
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Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
1st Feb 2024 3:32pm
Awww... your purple essence and warm encouragements are felt and felt through and through.
Thank you for taking a moment to leave your thoughts with me, fg. I'm so very grateful too have... missed you, lady. I hope you visit DUP more in 2024, I'll definitely keep an eye out
Much love and warmest appreciations
🌹-💜💜
Thank you for taking a moment to leave your thoughts with me, fg. I'm so very grateful too have... missed you, lady. I hope you visit DUP more in 2024, I'll definitely keep an eye out
Much love and warmest appreciations
🌹-💜💜
Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 6:24am
Enchantingly sensual without being anatomically explicit. Favourite verse for its illustrating of the magic of touch between lovers
Until you touched me
rubbed me
in such a perfect poignant way
with hands of magic
that to your genie
I became
an answered wish
Also love your present avatar. The poem would go well with it as an accompanying picture with its look of desire waiting to be fulfilled.
Until you touched me
rubbed me
in such a perfect poignant way
with hands of magic
that to your genie
I became
an answered wish
Also love your present avatar. The poem would go well with it as an accompanying picture with its look of desire waiting to be fulfilled.
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Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
Solomon!
It's been ages since I've had the pleasure of your company on my page... good to see you 🦋
That's my confident and comfortable wheelhouse, not being overly explicit but still conveying that sensual lust or even a gritty and heady desire but all in your mind's eye to imagine, nothing so in your face blatant ... Being gratuitous has a place and I definitely don't knock it for anyone, but for me, it's more challenging to try and utilize language in a different and (hopefully) alluring way that's similar, yet miles different... if that makes sense.
My avatar I thought was more incognito, dammit! ... haha.. I appreciate that sentiment, thank you
Your selected favorite portion is the climax of the poem, for sure... and I'm glad it stirred something for you.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me and as always, for taking the time you have.
Be well and be safe out there, my DUP friend
🌹B
It's been ages since I've had the pleasure of your company on my page... good to see you 🦋
That's my confident and comfortable wheelhouse, not being overly explicit but still conveying that sensual lust or even a gritty and heady desire but all in your mind's eye to imagine, nothing so in your face blatant ... Being gratuitous has a place and I definitely don't knock it for anyone, but for me, it's more challenging to try and utilize language in a different and (hopefully) alluring way that's similar, yet miles different... if that makes sense.
My avatar I thought was more incognito, dammit! ... haha.. I appreciate that sentiment, thank you
Your selected favorite portion is the climax of the poem, for sure... and I'm glad it stirred something for you.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me and as always, for taking the time you have.
Be well and be safe out there, my DUP friend
🌹B
Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 8:24am
Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
Hey there sweet, A
Seeing your much needed and deeply appreciated blessings grace my poem, almost made me teary... Thank you for still seeing me, feeling me and for finding something here that you continue to enjoy like you do ... It's such a wonderful feeling to know your out there partaking, my friend.... truly.
Many returned blessings ✨
Much love,
🌹💙
Seeing your much needed and deeply appreciated blessings grace my poem, almost made me teary... Thank you for still seeing me, feeling me and for finding something here that you continue to enjoy like you do ... It's such a wonderful feeling to know your out there partaking, my friend.... truly.
Many returned blessings ✨
Much love,
🌹💙
Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 8:40am
Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
1st Feb 2024 3:51pm
Wow... I'm blown away by your deeply felt response, dear dear Willow!!
Holy cow, that makes stand a bit prouder with my shoulders back and posture lifted!!! Hell yeah....
I can't thank you enough for the read, the list add and the killer comment. You're a lovely soul, here... I'm so stoked that you found something moving or effective here... sincerely.
Much love and warmest appreciation
🌹💙 - B
Holy cow, that makes stand a bit prouder with my shoulders back and posture lifted!!! Hell yeah....
I can't thank you enough for the read, the list add and the killer comment. You're a lovely soul, here... I'm so stoked that you found something moving or effective here... sincerely.
Much love and warmest appreciation
🌹💙 - B
Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 4:17pm
Oh Genie!
Vulnerable sensuality
this one
revealing dark secrets
with jazzy soundtrack
❣️❣️❣️
🙏
Vulnerable sensuality
this one
revealing dark secrets
with jazzy soundtrack
❣️❣️❣️
🙏
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Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 7:20pm
Can you hear the piano clinking and perhaps Billie Holiday or some Thelonious Monk in the background?.... Mmmm... those thoughts give rise, for sure.
Like minds, indeed.
🌹🎺 🎹 👠 😉
Like minds, indeed.
🌹🎺 🎹 👠 😉
Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 8:01pm
Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 9:15pm
I love Coltrane, too... I think I'm an old soul, as I'm playing Billie Holiday right now. I know she's maybe technically, I guess, more Blues but damn how I love Lady Day's killer style... That voice, it sends me.
Anything that Duke Ellington was involved with has me checking it out...
*I take a small puff off of someone's smoke in that room, just for the atmosphere, adding ambiance as I sip my highball... (Im a total non-smoker but can't resist feeling that need in the smokey room moment)
🍹cheers!
Anything that Duke Ellington was involved with has me checking it out...
*I take a small puff off of someone's smoke in that room, just for the atmosphere, adding ambiance as I sip my highball... (Im a total non-smoker but can't resist feeling that need in the smokey room moment)
🍹cheers!
Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
1st Feb 2024 3:33am
Ella, Billie, Duke great oldies.
Here's a more contemporary artist who brings up the tears.
This was recorded in Amsterdam, so probably not tobacco smoke 😜
https://youtu.be/UEHwO_UEp7A?si=qWI0c6KOzHUO2M4n
Here's a more contemporary artist who brings up the tears.
This was recorded in Amsterdam, so probably not tobacco smoke 😜
https://youtu.be/UEHwO_UEp7A?si=qWI0c6KOzHUO2M4n
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Playing it on Spotify right now... her voice...Damn... she also has this rich soulful old soul sound... beautiful timbre that just makes me want to dance or snuggle.... or... yeah, you get it
Awesome recommendation, KP
Thank you.
shades of Janis Joplin...
Awesome recommendation, KP
Thank you.
shades of Janis Joplin...
Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
Anonymous
- Edited 31st Jan 2024 6:49pm
31st Jan 2024 6:40pm
Your poems are always thought-provoking or provacative in some way. There's a sensual side and a subserviant side to the pleasure involved. Always satisfying to see a new one from you, Blue.
Tim.
Tim.
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Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 7:23pm
Hey there Dragon 🐲 Blood!!
That's a cool new start/name... love it.
Thank you, my dear friend.
I love the support and your insightfulness, always.
I'll have to take note and stop by your newest DUP incarnation!
See you soon,
Much appreciated, T
🌹 💙
That's a cool new start/name... love it.
Thank you, my dear friend.
I love the support and your insightfulness, always.
I'll have to take note and stop by your newest DUP incarnation!
See you soon,
Much appreciated, T
🌹 💙
Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
31st Jan 2024 9:33pm
Fantastic as usual by the beautiful and talented lady. My heart sings in Cadance with your words. Hugs and love, Oral
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Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
1st Feb 2024 4:07pm
I can here your heart's beautiful song across the cyber distances.... how lovely it sounds.
Thank you for listening and for singing along with me, dear Oral.
Love that you visit with such verve,
I'm lucky, indeed
🌹💙
Thank you for listening and for singing along with me, dear Oral.
Love that you visit with such verve,
I'm lucky, indeed
🌹💙
Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
1st Feb 2024 4:51pm
Oh, my precious and amazing friend you are the toucher of my heart. Hugs and love, Oral
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Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
1st Feb 2024 3:01am
You are my strong beautiful smart sexy genie and I'm going to rub you the right way. Keep on writing you strong beautiful smart sexy woman.
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Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
1st Feb 2024 4:09pm
Hahaha....
Thanks for feeling the ink, dear Francisco
It's always a joy to connect through the idea of fantasy via poetry... You're a charmer, indeed!
Much obliged, my friend.
🌹B
Thanks for feeling the ink, dear Francisco
It's always a joy to connect through the idea of fantasy via poetry... You're a charmer, indeed!
Much obliged, my friend.
🌹B
Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
1st Feb 2024 3:14pm
your words always excite the mind
provide wonder and amazement ...
each stanza offers a chair,
for me to sit,
reading and re reading each line
each word.
and as if,
on the last line,
the chair that has provide the comfort,
allows me to close my eyes,
rehearsing the spell...
in which i have been placed.
i so enjoy
provide wonder and amazement ...
each stanza offers a chair,
for me to sit,
reading and re reading each line
each word.
and as if,
on the last line,
the chair that has provide the comfort,
allows me to close my eyes,
rehearsing the spell...
in which i have been placed.
i so enjoy
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Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
To gather you up and warmly entice with my written charms is the best case scenario I could hope for... I adore you and the way you've described being affected, it truly makes for this icing on the cake feeling. I'm humbled and so excitedly pleased you found contemplative pleasure on my page
There's just something about taking it all in wave after wave and allowing it to roll over you in the way it's meant or maybe how you choose, as the reader... Whew a completely sexy, notion!!
Wow, thanks for the uplifting comments, they've wholly motivated me... -xo
🌹💙 💙
There's just something about taking it all in wave after wave and allowing it to roll over you in the way it's meant or maybe how you choose, as the reader... Whew a completely sexy, notion!!
Wow, thanks for the uplifting comments, they've wholly motivated me... -xo
🌹💙 💙
Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
2nd Feb 2024 8:17pm
Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
2nd Feb 2024 9:48pm
Thanks for the visit and these incredibly kind words of feedback. It's deeply appreciated Richard.
-really.
I'm going to venture into reading more, so I'll be looking in on your vampire ink as soon as I have time!
🌹B
-really.
I'm going to venture into reading more, so I'll be looking in on your vampire ink as soon as I have time!
🌹B
Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
2nd Feb 2024 11:58pm
Please do read
I have had input from two other poets that I need to apply so that my writing uses less words and makes more impact
I am using third person (imperfectly) so I need to hone my penmanship
I have had input from two other poets that I need to apply so that my writing uses less words and makes more impact
I am using third person (imperfectly) so I need to hone my penmanship
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Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
Very clever clever girl. Erotic bdsm; plagiarism, as you copy the details of being interrogated to being the submissive in a bdsm poetic adventure. I picked up on the nuisances. How you crave to display your shrouded secrets, or better yet, forced to. Your inhibitions, no longer relevant, and with a clear conscience, you can now reveal the surreptitious truths you knowingly and unknowingly conceal.
I should add, a captivating and "informative" read. The genie reference used brilliantly in your text. A fair transaction, liberation in exchange for granting mutual pleasure. I think you win on both sides of the ledger.
I should add, a captivating and "informative" read. The genie reference used brilliantly in your text. A fair transaction, liberation in exchange for granting mutual pleasure. I think you win on both sides of the ledger.
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3rd Feb 2024 9:10pm
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8th Feb 2024 6:09am
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Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
7th Feb 2024 2:00am
The luscious vibrato of your words encapsulates me in timeless bliss. Each emotional sensation is a pill designed to release my deepest need. I am fulfilled through the language of love you present with unabashed giving and receiving. There is gold in this that even the most lovelorn can find. I am an acolyte who has found his priestess once again. Thrilled to read you again my friend. You write like an abbess whose powers smolder like the tender corpuscles in my heart and the heat of my incarnation on earth.
many caresses to your soul and breathed clay my darling,
John
many caresses to your soul and breathed clay my darling,
John
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Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
16th Feb 2024 5:51pm
"to allow out of sight to become
completely out of mind"
So I read this very slowly, imagining your voice from previous spoken word and I was like yep. There was something about these two lines that offer both the metaphorical and literal sense.
This is one many of us choosing to go back to over and over again.
Amazing work.
completely out of mind"
So I read this very slowly, imagining your voice from previous spoken word and I was like yep. There was something about these two lines that offer both the metaphorical and literal sense.
This is one many of us choosing to go back to over and over again.
Amazing work.
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Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
18th Feb 2024 11:57pm
The Human heart is the funniest creature in existence.
It allows us to seek and reject love at the same moment. No wonder the so much poetry about the damm subject.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
It allows us to seek and reject love at the same moment. No wonder the so much poetry about the damm subject.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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Re: Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
19th Feb 2024 4:43am
You've really hit the nail on the head.... That damn heart will always keep me guessing...
Thanks for the visit, bk, your awesome words of wisdom and the RL adds along the way.... it means a lot to me.
🌹💙 💙
-B
Thanks for the visit, bk, your awesome words of wisdom and the RL adds along the way.... it means a lot to me.
🌹💙 💙
-B
Re. Fickle is a hollow heart
26th Feb 2024 6:02am
Oh my; what heavenly words I've missed from you, Lady Blue❣ Your very first passage sent reeling...I can feel the hot, sweet breath on my face. Breathe in it's intoxicating, comforting scent. And I thrill at this passage,
"as you veer
into the curvature
of my endless mewing truth"
Bravissima🐻💞🐰
"as you veer
into the curvature
of my endless mewing truth"
Bravissima🐻💞🐰
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