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I heard you the first fucking time
i asked
if you
wanted
to be
in my life
and you
(never)
answered....
i heard that.
(never)
i heard it
loud and clear
Written by
Betty
Published 17th Jan 2024
| Edited 18th Jan 2024
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cry
17th Jan 2024 11:49pm
hello beautiful how are you doing today I love what you did here with the never by not giving you a response they answered or you did it for them with a finality... this one hurts 💕
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Re: cry
18th Jan 2024 10:01pm
Thank you for seeing that my lovely friend. Choosing not to decide is a choice. It hurts. Beyond words.
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Anonymous
18th Jan 2024 1:12am
It must feel like a shovel digging into someone's heart like firefighters do in forests to contain and shut off the flames. This is a sad one.
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MS
18th Jan 2024 1:25am
Re: MS
18th Jan 2024 10:06pm
Yeah. And that shit hurts. Even for girls. Our little girl wood is super sensitive, you know.
Re. I heard you the first fucking time
18th Jan 2024 2:31am
Ouch! That is some cold pain right there. Really tight bringing on the emotions
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Re: Re. I heard you the first fucking time
18th Jan 2024 10:09pm
Thank you darlings. I appreciate the remarks.
Fucking chilling. Left frostbite on my inhales.
Fucking chilling. Left frostbite on my inhales.
Re. I heard you the first fucking time
Re: Re. I heard you the first fucking time
18th Jan 2024 10:21pm
I believe that every other breath. But those in-between beats... fuuuuckk. Thank you my friend. I appreciate you.
Re. I heard you the first fucking time
18th Jan 2024 3:36am
Dear B,
Reading this sparked such a plethora of emotions because silence has always spoken louder than anything else. The formatting describing this situation underscores a feeling of fury and bereft-ness for me. What a putz. It makes me want to say “man up and just tell me the truth!” Alas…
Aside from all that, great write. H🌷
Reading this sparked such a plethora of emotions because silence has always spoken louder than anything else. The formatting describing this situation underscores a feeling of fury and bereft-ness for me. What a putz. It makes me want to say “man up and just tell me the truth!” Alas…
Aside from all that, great write. H🌷
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Re: Re. I heard you the first fucking time
18th Jan 2024 10:22pm
MAN UP AND JUST TELL ME THE TRUTH!
Right?!
Hon, you always see me. And I need that way more than I let on. Thank you. I appreciate the fuck out of you.
Right?!
Hon, you always see me. And I need that way more than I let on. Thank you. I appreciate the fuck out of you.
Re. I heard you the first fucking time
18th Jan 2024 9:37am
Mind blowing. That one unspoken word speaks volumes. This poem was a case of dynamite in its explosive brilliance.
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Re: Re. I heard you the first fucking time
18th Jan 2024 10:26pm
Thank you my friend.
BOOM.
It only took out the walls of my heart. Well worth the extra space!
BOOM.
It only took out the walls of my heart. Well worth the extra space!
Re. I heard you the first fucking time
18th Jan 2024 3:26pm
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18th Jan 2024 10:32pm
Re. I heard you the first fucking time
18th Jan 2024 5:57pm
Re: Re. I heard you the first fucking time
18th Jan 2024 10:33pm
You think?
I'm pretty sure he's relieved.
I'm waiting to feel that way, too.
I LOVE YOU!
I'm pretty sure he's relieved.
I'm waiting to feel that way, too.
I LOVE YOU!
Re. I heard you the first fucking time
1st Jun 2024 6:40pm
Re: Re. I heard you the first fucking time
1st Jun 2024 6:43pm
Thank you! I appreciate the way you really read through the contest entries. I find that to be really admirable, and I hope to follow your example.
I appreciate the read and review, and the reading list.
Good luck to you as well!
I appreciate the read and review, and the reading list.
Good luck to you as well!