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REAL STRENGTH IS LENIENT.
REAL STRENGTH IS LENIENT.
Strength, you are a sublime feeling
that surprises thoughtful.people.
When a person is so brawny,
he will have the kindest nature.
Power makes a giant pity
weakest creatures and forgive them.
He will cry despite his power
as revenge for him is painful.
Nothing makes the strongest heroes
surrender except their passion.
They will fear their severe sorrow
will endow them lots of torment.
When the hit is truly hurting,
you should know that its performer
is a weakling and a coward
and he strikes for his survival.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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Strength, you are a sublime feeling
that surprises thoughtful.people.
When a person is so brawny,
he will have the kindest nature.
Power makes a giant pity
weakest creatures and forgive them.
He will cry despite his power
as revenge for him is painful.
Nothing makes the strongest heroes
surrender except their passion.
They will fear their severe sorrow
will endow them lots of torment.
When the hit is truly hurting,
you should know that its performer
is a weakling and a coward
and he strikes for his survival.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
________________________________
Published 8th Oct 2023
| Edited 9th Oct 2023
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9th Oct 2023 2:47pm
9th Oct 2023 3:27pm
Very dear Oral,
Thank you very much, Oral. I like your point of view. It is always deep and correct. Thank you for your read and valued comment. J.Z.
Thank you very much, Oral. I like your point of view. It is always deep and correct. Thank you for your read and valued comment. J.Z.
9th Oct 2023 3:33pm
You have so much wisdom to pour into our empty minds;, hope we can be as strong
as our words . words are easy, but actions ???? Amen..
thanks my friend
as our words . words are easy, but actions ???? Amen..
thanks my friend
9th Oct 2023 4:20pm
My dearest P.D.,
Thank you very much for your comment. Of course you can do what is much better than my poetry. Thank you very much for your read. J.Z.
Thank you very much for your comment. Of course you can do what is much better than my poetry. Thank you very much for your read. J.Z.
9th Oct 2023 5:08pm
Sorry, but every claim made here is nonsense
“Strength, you are a sublime feeling”
Strength is a property of mind or body. It is not a feeling, let alone a sublime one. Yes, one may say “I feel strong”, but all that means is that one is asserting that he/she is in possession of that property.
“that surprises thoughtful.people”.
Unless you are saying that people are surprised by how strong a person who seemed to be weak is, strength does not surprise anyone. Moreover, the implication of your claim is that strength does not surprise people who are not thoughtful.
“When a person is so brawny,
he will have the kindest nature.”
leaving aside the question of just how muscular a person is if and when he is “so brawny”, the claim that very muscular people always have the kindest nature or that gaining great muscularity leads to possessing a nature that is kind, is nonsense, let alone not true.
“Power makes a giant pity
weakest creatures”
Power often makes people despise and even harm those the powerful perceive as weak.
“and forgive them”.
Leaving aside the question of whether “weakest creatures” need forgiveness, your claim here raises a question that you should have answered if it is to be regarded as in any way true, namely, what is it that giants forgive the weakest creatures of?
“He will cry despite his power
as revenge for him is painful”.
And your evidence for this claim is what? And when did you mention that this brawny person you were writing about was entertaining the idea of seeking revenge or in need of it?
“Nothing makes the strongest heroes
surrender except their passion.
Surrender to what? And passion for what?
And isn’t it true that what makes heros cease resistance to an enemy or opponent and submit to their authority. is nor their passions, but their being defeated by even stronger heroes (ala Hector to Achilles)
“They will fear their severe sorrow”
When will they feel sorrow?
“will endow them [SIC] lots of torment.”
Leaving aside that once again you have ignored the fact that for the use of “endow to be grammatically correct, the verb needs to be accompanied by “with”, your claim has no evidence to back it up.
“When the hit is truly hurting,”
What hit?
“you should know"
Who are you addressing as in need of knowing what you say he/she should know?
"that its performer
is a weakling and a coward
and he strikes for his survival.”
I should think that hitting someone as a way of saving one’s life when one’s life is in jeopardy is hardly what a weakling does or is an act of cowardice.
In any case, if you meant to say that showing leniency can be a sign of strength, you have not done so. Nor have you shown that showing more mercy or forgiveness than someone deserves is what “weakest creatures” need.
“Strength, you are a sublime feeling”
Strength is a property of mind or body. It is not a feeling, let alone a sublime one. Yes, one may say “I feel strong”, but all that means is that one is asserting that he/she is in possession of that property.
“that surprises thoughtful.people”.
Unless you are saying that people are surprised by how strong a person who seemed to be weak is, strength does not surprise anyone. Moreover, the implication of your claim is that strength does not surprise people who are not thoughtful.
“When a person is so brawny,
he will have the kindest nature.”
leaving aside the question of just how muscular a person is if and when he is “so brawny”, the claim that very muscular people always have the kindest nature or that gaining great muscularity leads to possessing a nature that is kind, is nonsense, let alone not true.
“Power makes a giant pity
weakest creatures”
Power often makes people despise and even harm those the powerful perceive as weak.
“and forgive them”.
Leaving aside the question of whether “weakest creatures” need forgiveness, your claim here raises a question that you should have answered if it is to be regarded as in any way true, namely, what is it that giants forgive the weakest creatures of?
“He will cry despite his power
as revenge for him is painful”.
And your evidence for this claim is what? And when did you mention that this brawny person you were writing about was entertaining the idea of seeking revenge or in need of it?
“Nothing makes the strongest heroes
surrender except their passion.
Surrender to what? And passion for what?
And isn’t it true that what makes heros cease resistance to an enemy or opponent and submit to their authority. is nor their passions, but their being defeated by even stronger heroes (ala Hector to Achilles)
“They will fear their severe sorrow”
When will they feel sorrow?
“will endow them [SIC] lots of torment.”
Leaving aside that once again you have ignored the fact that for the use of “endow to be grammatically correct, the verb needs to be accompanied by “with”, your claim has no evidence to back it up.
“When the hit is truly hurting,”
What hit?
“you should know"
Who are you addressing as in need of knowing what you say he/she should know?
"that its performer
is a weakling and a coward
and he strikes for his survival.”
I should think that hitting someone as a way of saving one’s life when one’s life is in jeopardy is hardly what a weakling does or is an act of cowardice.
In any case, if you meant to say that showing leniency can be a sign of strength, you have not done so. Nor have you shown that showing more mercy or forgiveness than someone deserves is what “weakest creatures” need.
I wonder if it’s true
that thoughtful persons are surprised
when seeing that
the nature of a brawny man
is kindliness.
I think they know, surmise,
what’s plainly evident
to anyone who's wise
that having muscles
does not circumvent
possession of
the kind of heart
that is from birth disposed
intent
to show the weak
benignity, benevolence.
that thoughtful persons are surprised
when seeing that
the nature of a brawny man
is kindliness.
I think they know, surmise,
what’s plainly evident
to anyone who's wise
that having muscles
does not circumvent
possession of
the kind of heart
that is from birth disposed
intent
to show the weak
benignity, benevolence.
