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Poetic Lessons
I tried
walking in beauty
like the night
All I got
was a
stubbed toe
and a
bruised shin
Lesson: turn the light on
How did I love him?
I counted all the ways.
On one finger.
Lesson: toss him back in the sea
I travelled
the two
diverged roads
To discover
they were
a cul de sac
Just spinning
round in circles
Lesson: stay home
Treading softly
so I wouldn’t stomp on
his dreams,
there were so many
I’d have to float
to avoid a collision
Lesson: live separately
To be or not to be,
I’d like to be
But, when he said,
“O’ Captain My Captain”
it confused me and
I decided not to be…
with him…
Lesson: listen to your mother
Published 30th Apr 2023
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30th Apr 2023 11:26am
Wonderful spill
i found it rather humorous (especially the 1st 2 stanzas)
It reads with a kind of wispy feel and tempo
i found it rather humorous (especially the 1st 2 stanzas)
It reads with a kind of wispy feel and tempo
2nd May 2023 11:12am
Dear T,
I’m really happy you got the humor of it and the tempo was ok. I appreciate that notice especially when I’m purposely trying to make something light. Thank you so much for your lovely comment.
H🌷
I’m really happy you got the humor of it and the tempo was ok. I appreciate that notice especially when I’m purposely trying to make something light. Thank you so much for your lovely comment.
H🌷
30th Apr 2023 1:51pm
I fucking love the homage to the greats. You summarized the epic love story with vignette allusions, and then titty-twisted them. You had, what, six of the most well know pieces, and each one ends not with the damsel swooning, but a middle finger. Brilliant. Utterly brilliant.
2nd May 2023 11:16am
Dear B,
LOL You nailed it. No argument these poems are great and are well placed in the poetic annals but…no swooning damsel over here. Thank you so much for this fabulous synopsis of the write. “titty-twist” (I’m still laughing) and generous RL! xo
H🌷
LOL You nailed it. No argument these poems are great and are well placed in the poetic annals but…no swooning damsel over here. Thank you so much for this fabulous synopsis of the write. “titty-twist” (I’m still laughing) and generous RL! xo
H🌷
30th Apr 2023 2:08pm
Betty said it best, and I completely agree! Wow, Honoria, this is amazing!!
Dear L,
Thank you kindly for this lovely comment and support. Truth be told we’re heading into the last week of NaPo and I was cutting holes in the bottom of my barrel for ideas. Where else to look for inspiration but the greats! 😊
Thank you so much once again.
H🌷
Thank you kindly for this lovely comment and support. Truth be told we’re heading into the last week of NaPo and I was cutting holes in the bottom of my barrel for ideas. Where else to look for inspiration but the greats! 😊
Thank you so much once again.
H🌷
30th Apr 2023 2:46pm
2nd May 2023 11:20am
Dear R,
Awww! Thank you so much for your read and sweet comment. They’re much appreciated. x
H🌷
Awww! Thank you so much for your read and sweet comment. They’re much appreciated. x
H🌷
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2nd May 2023 11:22am
Dear C,
So very true. The comfortable rut is the one we know best and then fear takes hold and what’s left? The same old, same old. Thank you very kindly for your read and thoughtful insight. I really appreciate it, thank you again. H🌷
So very true. The comfortable rut is the one we know best and then fear takes hold and what’s left? The same old, same old. Thank you very kindly for your read and thoughtful insight. I really appreciate it, thank you again. H🌷
30th Apr 2023 5:11pm
A long time coming... https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=fPr3yvkHYsE&pp=ygUSYSBsb25nIHRpbWUgY29taW5n 🌼
Dear AJ,
One of my favorite songs ever. The late great Sam Cooke, doesn’t get any better.
I’m really happy to see you and thank you for your constant support. H🌷
One of my favorite songs ever. The late great Sam Cooke, doesn’t get any better.
I’m really happy to see you and thank you for your constant support. H🌷
2nd May 2023 8:34pm
1st May 2023 1:32am
2nd May 2023 11:28am
Dear J,
Thank you for this super sweet comment. I was in great need of NaPo inspiration and who better to look to for that kind of juice? I’m ever so grateful for you kind and constant support. Thank you. H🌷
Thank you for this super sweet comment. I was in great need of NaPo inspiration and who better to look to for that kind of juice? I’m ever so grateful for you kind and constant support. Thank you. H🌷
1st May 2023 5:25pm
2nd May 2023 11:30am
Dear DG,
And I love your sweet comment! Thank you so much. It’s really appreciated and high praise coming from a master poet and baker/y chef. I swear just looking at those exquisite confections you made had my mouth watering and my waist line increasing! 😉
Thank you again for your wonderful comment and RL. H🌷
And I love your sweet comment! Thank you so much. It’s really appreciated and high praise coming from a master poet and baker/y chef. I swear just looking at those exquisite confections you made had my mouth watering and my waist line increasing! 😉
Thank you again for your wonderful comment and RL. H🌷
2nd May 2023 7:43am
There is much relatable here ... for me it would be Do NOT listen to mom lol ... excellent write, I like the format of course lol ... Bless and love ...
2nd May 2023 11:33am
Dear F,
LOL! Do “not” listen to mom. Yes, absolutely hear you on that. That’s always gonna be a roll of the dice in that one. Thank you so much for getting the humor behind this and liking the format, and putting this on your RL. Trifecta for me 😊xx
H🌷
LOL! Do “not” listen to mom. Yes, absolutely hear you on that. That’s always gonna be a roll of the dice in that one. Thank you so much for getting the humor behind this and liking the format, and putting this on your RL. Trifecta for me 😊xx
H🌷
5th May 2023 3:32am
gods, the second stanza had me bloody cackling...
throw the whole man away indeed
... this is such devilishly clever writing, H
throw the whole man away indeed
... this is such devilishly clever writing, H
5th May 2023 6:37am
Dear S,
It’s so wonderful to see you! You look fabulous as per! Thank you so much for this lovely comment and generous RL. I’m very grateful for your read and happy to see you. H🌷
It’s so wonderful to see you! You look fabulous as per! Thank you so much for this lovely comment and generous RL. I’m very grateful for your read and happy to see you. H🌷
6th May 2023 3:16pm
Ironically, as I was reading this, (I'm on my back patio), one of the wind chimes" strings broke and it came crashing down. It's a sign I tell ya!
Your poem is advice via you "leading by example", but in a much smoother way. It makes me think of a narration at the ending of a movie. A slight hint of bitterness/bittersweet within the beauty of the author's exit. Yeah?
The ache of mistakes becomes knowledge. Not always wisdom. Sometimes just a shield.
The kind we can choose to set down, when we're ready.
Like our writings, at times being self-warnings.
Awesome write, Honoria. I always get smiley when I see you've posted something.
Your poem is advice via you "leading by example", but in a much smoother way. It makes me think of a narration at the ending of a movie. A slight hint of bitterness/bittersweet within the beauty of the author's exit. Yeah?
The ache of mistakes becomes knowledge. Not always wisdom. Sometimes just a shield.
The kind we can choose to set down, when we're ready.
Like our writings, at times being self-warnings.
Awesome write, Honoria. I always get smiley when I see you've posted something.
Dear S,
A broken wind chime string is a sign! It means it was faulty and I hope you have a manufacturers guarantee. 😊
I dig the idea of narration at the end of a movie. Very cool thought. And what totally caught my attention was knowledge is not always wisdom. For sure! Sometimes knowledge is just intel and that’s that.
You get smiley when I post? Aawwwww shucks! That is super sweet! Thank you. And thank you for this wonderful comment and the coveted RL. Sheesh! What a to do with these things. I didn’t realize there was a limit. I’m scrambling to figure out how to get more. Thank you.
H🌷
A broken wind chime string is a sign! It means it was faulty and I hope you have a manufacturers guarantee. 😊
I dig the idea of narration at the end of a movie. Very cool thought. And what totally caught my attention was knowledge is not always wisdom. For sure! Sometimes knowledge is just intel and that’s that.
You get smiley when I post? Aawwwww shucks! That is super sweet! Thank you. And thank you for this wonderful comment and the coveted RL. Sheesh! What a to do with these things. I didn’t realize there was a limit. I’m scrambling to figure out how to get more. Thank you.
H🌷
8th May 2023 8:31pm
Dear Honoria,
You are right. Don't try and experiment, but listen to real experience from the people who love you, your Mother, who will never tell you lies.
You are right. Don't try and experiment, but listen to real experience from the people who love you, your Mother, who will never tell you lies.
9th May 2023 1:43am
Dear JZ,
Mother knows best and will always shoot from the hip. It’s a delight to see you tonight. Thank you very much for your read and insightful comment. H🌷
Mother knows best and will always shoot from the hip. It’s a delight to see you tonight. Thank you very much for your read and insightful comment. H🌷
Honoria, my dear sweet woman. You are stronger than you think. Sometimes though we become complacent because its easier than starting new or even over. I truly emphasize with your pain. It sucks to be where you don’t wanna be, with someone you don’t want to be with. I mean not to be mean or anything it’s just it is what it is. Great expression. I believe you will get there one way or another. Hopefully sooner rather than later.
Loves you keep writing ✍️
Jackie 🌺
Loves you keep writing ✍️
Jackie 🌺
16th May 2023 3:29am
Dear J,
I really appreciate your support and encouragement. It’s such a lovely boost. I’ll get wherever it is I’m supposed to be, eventually. 🙄 it would appear I’m in no rush as I keep making the same mistakes. Alas.
Thank you so much for your sweet comment and RL on this write. I’m completely indebted. xo H🌷
I really appreciate your support and encouragement. It’s such a lovely boost. I’ll get wherever it is I’m supposed to be, eventually. 🙄 it would appear I’m in no rush as I keep making the same mistakes. Alas.
Thank you so much for your sweet comment and RL on this write. I’m completely indebted. xo H🌷
16th May 2023 5:00am
18th May 2023 4:11am
Dear J,
Maybe no lessons were learned. Who knows? But I’ve decided to take on a new career. I’m going to re-write all the classics. Thank you for reading. 😊
H🌷
Maybe no lessons were learned. Who knows? But I’ve decided to take on a new career. I’m going to re-write all the classics. Thank you for reading. 😊
H🌷
16th May 2023 10:27pm
Great. Really like:
"travelled
the two
diverged roads
To discover
they were
a cul de sac"
"travelled
the two
diverged roads
To discover
they were
a cul de sac"
18th May 2023 4:12am
Dear L,
Thank you so much. I’m pleased as lunch you liked my cul de sac pun. I really appreciate your comment and generous RL. Thank you again. H🌷
Thank you so much. I’m pleased as lunch you liked my cul de sac pun. I really appreciate your comment and generous RL. Thank you again. H🌷
20th May 2023 1:24pm
So ingeniously clever . Words that weave and tell a story . True art . Loved 🥰 it .
21st May 2023 2:24am
Dear M,
Thank you so much for your lovely comment. Il glad you liked it and I’m very touched and grateful.
H🌷
Thank you so much for your lovely comment. Il glad you liked it and I’m very touched and grateful.
H🌷
Dear H,
I have missed reading your wonderful work so very much. To discover this poem of yours as my first one back, thrills me to no end. What a fabulous piece of work. It's so uniquely you. I loved every word and didn't want it to end as all poems must. You have outdone yourself with this gem.
Love,
F
I have missed reading your wonderful work so very much. To discover this poem of yours as my first one back, thrills me to no end. What a fabulous piece of work. It's so uniquely you. I loved every word and didn't want it to end as all poems must. You have outdone yourself with this gem.
Love,
F
22nd May 2023 4:51am
Dear F,
Most importantly it’s awesome to have you back! I’m thrilled and honored by this beautiful comment and generous RL. You’ve absolutely made my night, thank you so much! Xo
H🌷
Most importantly it’s awesome to have you back! I’m thrilled and honored by this beautiful comment and generous RL. You’ve absolutely made my night, thank you so much! Xo
H🌷
26th May 2023 1:32am
26th May 2023 6:00am
Dear A,
Thank you for your read and wonderful comment. This is a lovely way to end my day and I’m so grateful to you. Thank you again. H🌷
Thank you for your read and wonderful comment. This is a lovely way to end my day and I’m so grateful to you. Thank you again. H🌷
27th May 2023 1:33pm
How did I miss this poetic stomp ??
Love is tender, love is a brawl ...
This is BIG COUNTRY
LIKE
BIG LIKE
Love is tender, love is a brawl ...
This is BIG COUNTRY
LIKE
BIG LIKE
28th May 2023 5:03am
Dear PS,
You’re here now and that’s all that matters. I’m glad and thank you so much for the double BIG. Country and Like and RL. Trifecta!! 😊xx
H🌷
You’re here now and that’s all that matters. I’m glad and thank you so much for the double BIG. Country and Like and RL. Trifecta!! 😊xx
H🌷
28th May 2023 12:59pm
24th Jun 2023 1:25am
Dear H, I can't begin to say how much I liked this, not just only for it's humor but for the short hard lesson lines, and they are all true.
Wonderful work.
Wonderful work.
25th Jun 2023 3:16am
Dear W,
Thank you so much. I’m so thrilled to receive your lovely comment and RL add. This has truly brought a smile to my face tonight. Thank you.
H 🌷
Thank you so much. I’m so thrilled to receive your lovely comment and RL add. This has truly brought a smile to my face tonight. Thank you.
H 🌷
19th Aug 2023 5:36pm
Brilliant! I love the quotes and your unexpected twists.
And of course all those wise lessons!!
xx
V
And of course all those wise lessons!!
xx
V
20th Aug 2023 6:52am
Dear V,
Thank you so much! If only I’d learned those lessons after the first mistake 😏
Your lovely comment and RL has made my night! Thank you very much once again. xo H🌷
Thank you so much! If only I’d learned those lessons after the first mistake 😏
Your lovely comment and RL has made my night! Thank you very much once again. xo H🌷
14th Nov 2023 00:06am
14th Nov 2023 2:31am
Dear J,
I really appreciate your read and kind comment. It’s brightened my evening. Thank you. H🌷
I really appreciate your read and kind comment. It’s brightened my evening. Thank you. H🌷
10th Apr 2024 6:00am
Loved this…. Unfortunately I don’t listen… especially to my mother… that is why I keep stubbing my toes
10th Apr 2024 6:14am
Dear S,
Alas, I don’t either. Mine are bloodied nubs. Hmmmm that might be tmi. Moving right along, thank you very much for your read and kind comment. I really appreciate it. H🌷
Alas, I don’t either. Mine are bloodied nubs. Hmmmm that might be tmi. Moving right along, thank you very much for your read and kind comment. I really appreciate it. H🌷
3rd May 2024 11:44am
Ha! This is such a clever idea, much praise to you! And the references were not lost on me (shameless bragging LOL)
I always appreciate those who can put a humorous spin on a bitter, difficult subject. Well done!
Mundus
I always appreciate those who can put a humorous spin on a bitter, difficult subject. Well done!
Mundus
5th May 2024 10:59pm
Dear M,
Thank you kindly for this wonderful comment. I’m so glad you got the humor intended. I’m much obliged. Thank you again. H🌷
Thank you kindly for this wonderful comment. I’m so glad you got the humor intended. I’m much obliged. Thank you again. H🌷
