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Disobedience
At times
you have to
stain alleys
with rage
feel every
brick being
shaded in
every echo,
hear the
wreckage
in every
sigh
they
howl.
Published 26th Apr 2023
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- Edited 26th Aug 2023 5:45pm
26th Apr 2023 2:21pm
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28th Apr 2023 1:23am
Hello Raconteur
The howl is such a wonderful sound, I appreciate your insights and seeing how sparse and spared the words appeared, thank you for reading and taking the time on my little poem.
Kind Regards
-A
The howl is such a wonderful sound, I appreciate your insights and seeing how sparse and spared the words appeared, thank you for reading and taking the time on my little poem.
Kind Regards
-A
26th Apr 2023 2:24pm
i read this in many relatable themes
past present
ever ongoing maybe
wonderful insight
past present
ever ongoing maybe
wonderful insight
28th Apr 2023 1:25am
Hello Tallen
Pleased to make your acquaintance, i'm happy you found many relatable themes here and not just the theme I placed this poem under, perhaps it's emotions everybody will experience in some way or some form throughout their lives, thank you for your kind words.
Kind Regards
-A
Pleased to make your acquaintance, i'm happy you found many relatable themes here and not just the theme I placed this poem under, perhaps it's emotions everybody will experience in some way or some form throughout their lives, thank you for your kind words.
Kind Regards
-A
26th Apr 2023 3:01pm
28th Apr 2023 1:32am
Hello Delia
I'm glad you enjoyed the description and enjoyed the "hear the wreckage in every sigh" line, it's wonderful when those little emotions come through unexpectedly, thank you for reading and your comment.
Kind Regards
-A
I'm glad you enjoyed the description and enjoyed the "hear the wreckage in every sigh" line, it's wonderful when those little emotions come through unexpectedly, thank you for reading and your comment.
Kind Regards
-A
26th Apr 2023 3:32pm
Hoi hoi
The whole poem is brim full of awesome phrases, I think.
Lovely write @neves!!!
Kind regards, Gus
The whole poem is brim full of awesome phrases, I think.
Lovely write @neves!!!
Kind regards, Gus
28th Apr 2023 1:38am
Hello Gus
Pleased to make your acquaintance, i'm happy to hear you enjoyed my phrases and it came across as a lovely write in your eyes, thank you for reading and your comment.
Kind Regards
-A
Pleased to make your acquaintance, i'm happy to hear you enjoyed my phrases and it came across as a lovely write in your eyes, thank you for reading and your comment.
Kind Regards
-A
26th Apr 2023 3:44pm
Hello Robert
Pleased to make your acquaintance, i'm glad you saw the liberation in this write, thank you for reading and your comment.
Kind Regards
-A
Pleased to make your acquaintance, i'm glad you saw the liberation in this write, thank you for reading and your comment.
Kind Regards
-A
Anonymous
26th Apr 2023 7:29pm
Like… at one point I felt like waving my bra above my head and screaming bare breasted at the traffic.
I just love the express madness in this.
Sometimes people forget that as humans, rage is a valuable commodity. It gets shit done. Not really sure why people are so afraid of it.
Yeah.. this one just spoke to the tornado in me. And I liked that it did.
Thanks for sharing.
-M
I just love the express madness in this.
Sometimes people forget that as humans, rage is a valuable commodity. It gets shit done. Not really sure why people are so afraid of it.
Yeah.. this one just spoke to the tornado in me. And I liked that it did.
Thanks for sharing.
-M
Hello Northern Soul
Aw I do appreciate a lady who will say it from the heart or from the bra in this matter, please excuse my terrible pun in this comment, i'm delighted to hear you expressing about the madness in this poem, rage is certainly a process that is dangerously underestimated and is also necessary in difficult times among us, i'm happy it spoke to the tornado in you, perhaps we all have our own different tornadoes and whirlpools, who knows? but I make you right, it gets things done, like ripping off a band-aid that's sunk deep into the skin.
Thank you for reading and telling me how this made you truly feel, I do love hearing other people's emotions and thoughts.
Kind Regards
-A
Aw I do appreciate a lady who will say it from the heart or from the bra in this matter, please excuse my terrible pun in this comment, i'm delighted to hear you expressing about the madness in this poem, rage is certainly a process that is dangerously underestimated and is also necessary in difficult times among us, i'm happy it spoke to the tornado in you, perhaps we all have our own different tornadoes and whirlpools, who knows? but I make you right, it gets things done, like ripping off a band-aid that's sunk deep into the skin.
Thank you for reading and telling me how this made you truly feel, I do love hearing other people's emotions and thoughts.
Kind Regards
-A
26th Apr 2023 10:04pm
28th Apr 2023 1:53am
Hello BITS
It's lovely to see you here again, I appreciate you felt this poem was a good read while seeing the conciseness in it, i'm happy to hear it reached it's target too, thank you for reading and commenting.
Kind Regards
-A
It's lovely to see you here again, I appreciate you felt this poem was a good read while seeing the conciseness in it, i'm happy to hear it reached it's target too, thank you for reading and commenting.
Kind Regards
-A
27th Apr 2023 1:02am
28th Apr 2023 1:54am
Hello Daniel
Great to see you here, i'm glad to hear this had a powerful presence and it came across focused with my careful choice of wording, thank you for reading and commenting.
Kind Regards
-A
Great to see you here, i'm glad to hear this had a powerful presence and it came across focused with my careful choice of wording, thank you for reading and commenting.
Kind Regards
-A
27th Apr 2023 2:44am
YES! Just... YES! And more YES! Missy expressed it perfectly. It was an incredible anthem to rage, and that's legit shit.
So much hot ire packed into one poem. Fucking excellent stuff!
28th Apr 2023 1:59am
Hello Betty
I don't think i've seen so many yes' in one line, i'm happy to hear this came across like a little anthem for rage, I think everybody needs to release that now and again, it certainly stops my curls from burning, thank you so much for your fiery and amazing comment it gave me a little smile.
Kind Regards
-A
I don't think i've seen so many yes' in one line, i'm happy to hear this came across like a little anthem for rage, I think everybody needs to release that now and again, it certainly stops my curls from burning, thank you so much for your fiery and amazing comment it gave me a little smile.
Kind Regards
-A
“Why did it seem like the only way to live-was to disobey?” ― Sheila Heti, Pure Colour
Enjoyed the naughtiness of a tryst in a back alley; bricks echoing the unbridled passion. The perceived unbecoming setting be damned.
Enjoyed the naughtiness of a tryst in a back alley; bricks echoing the unbridled passion. The perceived unbecoming setting be damned.
27th Apr 2023 2:15pm
28th Apr 2023 1:25pm
Hoi hoi
My guess is that, like me, you don’t write for an audience.
Having said that, it’s perfectly OK to enjoy the measure of your work resonating with a lot of people here.
They all find something of beauty in your poem.
Enjoy it and be proud!
Kind regards, Gus
My guess is that, like me, you don’t write for an audience.
Having said that, it’s perfectly OK to enjoy the measure of your work resonating with a lot of people here.
They all find something of beauty in your poem.
Enjoy it and be proud!
Kind regards, Gus
