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Constant
He is the only constant
it took so long to figure out
i turned my back so many times
he never turned his
friends, family, things, feelings
they are only temporary
He is the only constant
the one who doesn't care if you'r not perfect
He can see your heart
He can feel your pain
He will never go away
it took so long to figure out
i turned my back so many times
he never turned his
friends, family, things, feelings
they are only temporary
He is the only constant
the one who doesn't care if you'r not perfect
He can see your heart
He can feel your pain
He will never go away
Published 13th Apr 2012
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13th Apr 2012 4:53am
something I like about this is it's open for interpretation-- you can really apply this to many things-- love, religion, spirituality, self... it's really cool.
couple things though...
The 4th line reads kinda funny, and the 8th line, the "doesn't care if you're not perfect" is a double negative..
couple things though...
The 4th line reads kinda funny, and the 8th line, the "doesn't care if you're not perfect" is a double negative..
13th Apr 2012 4:59am
thanks. what does the double negative mean im new to this and not really familiar with the technical stuff. any ideas of how to change it around??
13th Apr 2012 5:00am
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13th Apr 2012 11:19am
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13th Apr 2012 11:25am
"doesn't care if you're not perfect"-- the doesn't and the not cancel each other out and so it means "cares if you're perfect".. I would rephrase as "doesn't care whether you're perfect" or "doesn't care if you're perfect."
13th Apr 2012 11:26am
the 4th line I would take out the "on mine"-- you never defined what "mine" you were referring to-- they're small issues, but they cut your credibility.
I still like the overall style and meaning.
I still like the overall style and meaning.
13th Apr 2012 7:30pm
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13th Apr 2012 11:24am
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